Mariofreak95 Posted June 1, 2011 Report Share Posted June 1, 2011 [img]http://img7.imageshack.us/img7/5440/423858.jpg[/img] Effect: Once per turn, during your Main Phase while this monster is in face-up Attack Position, you can place 1 Poison Counter on a face-up monster your opponent controls. During your opponent's Standby Phase, all monsters with Poison Counters lose 300 ATK. When this card is destroyed by a card effect, you can Special Summon this card during the End Phase of the turn this card is destroyed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mariofreak95 Posted June 1, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 1, 2011 Why doesn't anybody rate/comment my cards? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Garthfunkle Vii Backwards Posted June 1, 2011 Report Share Posted June 1, 2011 ocg is off man When this monster is successfully [B]Trbrute[/B] summoned you can [B]place[/B] a poison [B]counter ?[/B] on an opponent face-up monster. Everytime in your opponent Standby-Phase, decrease the monsters ATK with the poison [B]counter ?[/B] by 300 points. When this card is destroyed by an effect, you can special summon this card at the end of the turn it is destroyed. i think im close Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyng's Old Account Posted June 1, 2011 Report Share Posted June 1, 2011 I have, and I will again. 1) Pic: Not the best. To be honest, with thi card's name, I thought it would be some humanoid who master's Wyverns. 2) OCG Fix: You wrote: When this monster is successfully summoned as an sacrifie-summon, you can lay a poison mark on an opponent face-up monster. Everytime in your opponent Standby-Phase, decrease the monsters ATK with the poison mark by 300 points. When this card is destroyed by an effect, you can special summon this card at the end of the turn it is destroyed. You should write: When this monster is Normal Summoned succesfully, you can place a Poison Counter on a face up monster your opponent controls. During your opponents Stand-By Phase, all monsters with Poison Counters lose 300 ATK points. When this card is destroyed by an effect, you can Special Summon this card at the end of the turn it is destroyed. 3) Effect: It seems as a 1 time only card, so it is not very reliable or useful. 4) Balance: It is underpowered. It needs to give out Poison Counters regularly. 5/10 Where you have put 4163-62423 is the Set I D. Set I Ds are only for sets. For example, this [url="http://images.wikia.com/yugioh/images/a/a6/Blue-EyesWhiteDragonDPKB-EN-SR-1E.png"]Blue Eyes White Dragon's[/url] ID is DPKB (Duelist Pack Kaiba) - EN... (English) ...001 (First Card of the set). It isn't important so don't fret about it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mariofreak95 Posted June 1, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 1, 2011 [quote name='Kyng of Ice' timestamp='1306955215' post='5246806'] I have, and I will again. 1) Pic: Not the best. To be honest, with thi card's name, I thought it would be some humanoid who master's Wyverns. 2) OCG Fix: You wrote: When this monster is successfully summoned as an sacrifie-summon, you can lay a poison mark on an opponent face-up monster. Everytime in your opponent Standby-Phase, decrease the monsters ATK with the poison mark by 300 points. When this card is destroyed by an effect, you can special summon this card at the end of the turn it is destroyed. You should write: When this monster is Normal Summoned succesfully, you can place a Poison Counter on a face up monster your opponent controls. During your opponents Stand-By Phase, all monsters with Poison Counters lose 300 ATK points. When this card is destroyed by an effect, you can Special Summon this card at the end of the turn it is destroyed. 3) Effect: It seems as a 1 time only card, so it is not very reliable or useful. 4) Balance: It is underpowered. It needs to give out Poison Counters regularly. 5/10 Where you have put 4163-62423 is the Set I D. Set I Ds are only for sets. For example, this [url="http://images.wikia.com/yugioh/images/a/a6/Blue-EyesWhiteDragonDPKB-EN-SR-1E.png"]Blue Eyes White Dragon's[/url] ID is DPKB (Duelist Pack Kaiba) - EN... (English) ...001 (First Card of the set). It isn't important so don't fret about it. [/quote] And what do you say now?^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyng's Old Account Posted June 1, 2011 Report Share Posted June 1, 2011 Better pic, but like I said the name gives a different approach. It seems it would be something like: [spoiler='...this...'] [img]http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2723/4370858176_99fb314e2f.jpg[/img] [/spoiler] [spoiler='...this...'] [img]http://images2.layoutsparks.com/1/133539/dragon-queen-cartoon-image-31000.jpg[/img] [/spoiler] [spoiler='...or even this.'] [img]http://www.iaza.com/work/110602C/iaza16207491987000.jpg[/img] [/spoiler] I know what your aim is, so I recommed naming it Princess Wyvern or Princess of the Wyverns...something like that. OCG Fix again... You wrote: Every Main-Phase, when this monster is in face-up attack-position, you can lay a poison counter on an face-up opponent monster. During your opponents Stand-By Phase, all monsters with Poison Counters lose 300 ATK points. When this card is destroyed by an effect, you can Special Summon this card at the end of the turn it is destroyed. You should write: As long as this card is in face up Attack Position, you can place 1 Poison Counter on an face-up monster your opponent controls. During your opponent's Stand-By Phase, all monsters with Poison Counters lose 300 ATK points. When this card is destroyed by an effect, you can Special Summon this card at the end of the turn it is destroyed. Copy & Paste an OCG Fix into your cards effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 1, 2011 Report Share Posted June 1, 2011 it's Winged Beast, not Winged-Beast for the type for the last effect, if you're going to do that, make sure it can't repeat the cycle that easily I would add for the next 3 turns its effect gets negated 6.6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mariofreak95 Posted June 2, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 2, 2011 Fixed OCG Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TCG warrior Posted June 2, 2011 Report Share Posted June 2, 2011 I continuously see new OCG errors in the OCG fix. It should be: Once per turn, during your Main Phase while this monster is in face-up Attack Position, you can place 1 Poison Counter on a face-up monster your opponent controls. During your opponent's Standby Phase, all monsters with Poison Counters lose 300 ATK. When this card is destroyed by a card effect, you can Special Summon this card during the End Phase of the turn this card is destroyed. It should be perfect or almost perfect now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mariofreak95 Posted June 2, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 2, 2011 BUMP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyng's Old Account Posted June 2, 2011 Report Share Posted June 2, 2011 DUDE! DON'T REWRITE AN OCG FIX! COPY IT WORD FOR WORD! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mariofreak95 Posted June 2, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 2, 2011 [quote name='Kyng of Ice' timestamp='1307040835' post='5249050'] DUDE! DON'T REWRITE AN OCG FIX! COPY IT WORD FOR WORD! [/quote] Fixed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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