Nghtwing Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 [font="Century Gothic"] [b][size="3"]Update:[/b] After some comments that I would call "Classes" I changed some stuff of the card and Changed some Effects [/size] [center][img]http://img853.imageshack.us/img853/1051/419009.jpg[/img] [i][b]Lore:[/b] This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your hand by Banishing 1 "Beaver Warrior" and 1 Fiend-Type monster from your Graveyard. When this card is Summoned this way, destroy all face-up Attack Position monsters with 1500 or lower ATK and inflict Damage to both players equal to the combined ATK of all monsters they control. This card inflicts Piercing Damage.[/i] [spoiler=IMG's Credit]http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/226217-doomed-custom-card-images-v21-update/page__p__4725356__fromsearch__1[/spoiler] [/center] [/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jack of All Spades Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 Naaaaah...I used my Beaver Warrior as a fire starter for my BBQ. Anyway, this card loses face value w/o Beaver Warrior, so I'd have to have 4 or 5 to assure this card gets up on the field. It's fair, the picture is excellent, and worth the tributees. 9.1/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Angel of Silence Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 The picture is great. And i like how you brought such an old card back from extinction. Nice job. 9.5/10 The only problem I see is that people wouldn't want to use Beaver Warrior in their Decks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Max Darkness Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 A fun idea, but given the lack of synergy between "Beaver Warrior" and Fiends (ie the difficulty of getting it out), perhaps make it only so your opponent takes damage when this blasts the field? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nghtwing Posted June 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 [quote name='+Whambulance' timestamp='1307757043' post='5273141'] Naaaaah...I used my Beaver Warrior as a fire starter for my BBQ. [b] I LOL'd at it[/b] Anyway, this card loses face value w/o Beaver Warrior, so I'd have to have 4 or 5 to assure this card gets up on the field.[b]could you explain?(sorry i didn't understand the english caus I'm not american ;x)[/b] It's fair, the picture is excellent[b]thanks to Doom [/b], and worth the tributees. 9.1/10 [/quote][quote name='darkstar_316' timestamp='1307757152' post='5273143'] The picture is great. And i like how you brought such an old card back from extinction. Nice job. 9.5/10 The only problem I see is that people wouldn't want to use Beaver Warrior in their Decks. [/quote] In fact, Beaver Warrior is weak and don't have effect ;x anyway, it's cute but that's all ;x thanks for the comment [quote name='Max Darkness' timestamp='1307757157' post='5273144'] A fun idea, but given the lack of synergy between "Beaver Warrior" and Fiends (ie the difficulty of getting it out), perhaps make it only so your opponent takes damage when this blasts the field? [/quote] No, any player that controls a 1500 or lower ATK monster will take damage for balancing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jack of All Spades Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 ^What I meant was, if I don't have a lot of Beaver Warrior's in my deck, this card probably won't be played. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Angel of Silence Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 Since Beaver Warrior isn't exactly a "useful" card, this card would be under played. But i would play it because Beaver warrior is awesome! And this card may make Beaver Warrior actually slightly more useful. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nghtwing Posted June 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 in fact, i didn't make the card for playing, but just for that it's pic fix into what I wanted to make anyway, if you see it's circulation, it is just for entering a Club, wich means that is not it's playability that is being rated , but my OCG skills Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 been a LONG time since I've seen Beaver Warrior, glad to see a card that makes good of its uses burn effect should be reasonable, probably won't get more than 1500 total burn out of it anyway, so I'll give this 9.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren✧ Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 I love Beaver Warrior and now you have totally made him more useful. Even though you demonized him in the process, but oh well. Card looks good. Love the idea. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MibeR Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 Yeah, the Summoning conditions make this card suck. Maybe, banish from Graveyard to make it more usable The another effects is good and great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nghtwing Posted June 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 [quote name='ragnarok1945' timestamp='1307769447' post='5273495'] been a LONG time since I've seen Beaver Warrior, glad to see a card that makes good of its uses burn effect should be reasonable, probably won't get more than 1500 total burn out of it anyway, so I'll give this 9.5/10 [/quote] Thank you bud, any comment about how i can improve? [quote name='Nightwing the Dark Falcon' timestamp='1307774698' post='5273610'] I love Beaver Warrior and now you have totally made him more useful. Even though you demonized him in the process, but oh well. Card looks good. Love the idea. [/quote] KKK' okay, but make it without being demoniac shouldn't fix with the pic anyway, thanks for the comment [quote name='Maha Guns' timestamp='1307781257' post='5273864'] Yeah, the Summoning conditions make this card suck. Maybe, banish from Graveyard to make it more usable The another effects is good and great. [/quote] Yeah, you're right! maybe banishing form Graveyard is better (Banishing from the field looks too much with Fusion Summon, right?) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 [quote name='Matheus Mariano II' timestamp='1307788382' post='5274004'] Thank you bud, any comment about how i can improve? KKK' okay, but make it without being demoniac shouldn't fix with the pic anyway, thanks for the comment Yeah, you're right! maybe banishing form Graveyard is better (Banishing from the field looks too much with Fusion Summon, right?) [/quote] I'd also add an effect to get Beaver Warrior back into your hand and all Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nghtwing Posted June 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 Card fixed about Summoning Conditions Anyway, Bye bye. Have a Country Party to go [quote name='ragnarok1945' timestamp='1307789043' post='5274015'] I'd also add an effect to get Beaver Warrior back into your hand and all [/quote] yeah, maybe... Later I'll fix it. Bye Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mehmani Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 Wording/Grammar = 5/10 Creativity = 15/20 Balance = 25/30 Viability = 10/40 55% = D+ The wording has several flaws - you spelt "Demonic" wrong, you capitalized "banished", etc. To get 8-10/10 in the Wording section, it must be flawless, absolutely flawless. I will give you some credit for the creativity - Beaver Warrior is indeed an obscure card and support for it alone is creative in itself. You drop some marks for the effect being a little unoriginal, but the concept is dead-on, very creative and very intriguing. As far as balance goes, it is close to brilliant - due to the fact that is needs Beaver Warrior and a non-meta type to be summoned, the good effect is counter-balanced. I do think that it is as a card a tad underpowered though - I would recommend having removing Beaver Warrior from the Graveyard only as a summoning requirement - it makes it more usable and more nicely balanced. Viability is sadly where you lose many marks - its obscure concept is its own downfall here - Beaver Warrior isn't and will likely never be meta, so this card is rendered unusable outside of an obscure, dedicated deck. Its good effect is the only thing that saves it from complete uselessness and lands you with a D+. Not bad. You got great marks in Balance and Creativity, but the Viability section was your downfall here. Become more familiar with the metagame and you will improve. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MibeR Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 [quote]Yeah, you're right! maybe banishing form Graveyard is better (Banishing from the field looks too much with Fusion Summon, right?) [/quote] You know what i mean. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DARKPLANT RISING Posted June 11, 2011 Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 Needs 300 more ATK. In this meta the ATK Line is 2500, with Starfags and Shi Ens rolling everywhere. But I love the idea. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nghtwing Posted June 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 11, 2011 [spoiler=Quote Mikhail][quote name='Mikhail Nekem'evič Tal' timestamp='1307790491' post='5274038'] Wording/Grammar = 5/10 Creativity = 15/20 Balance = 25/30 Viability = 10/40 55% = D+ The wording has several flaws - you spelt "Demonic" wrong, you capitalized "banished", etc. To get 8-10/10 in the Wording section, it must be flawless, absolutely flawless. I will give you some credit for the creativity - Beaver Warrior is indeed an obscure card and support for it alone is creative in itself. You drop some marks for the effect being a little unoriginal, but the concept is dead-on, very creative and very intriguing. As far as balance goes, it is close to brilliant - due to the fact that is needs Beaver Warrior and a non-meta type to be summoned, the good effect is counter-balanced. I do think that it is as a card a tad underpowered though - I would recommend having removing Beaver Warrior from the Graveyard only as a summoning requirement - it makes it more usable and more nicely balanced. Viability is sadly where you lose many marks - its obscure concept is its own downfall here - Beaver Warrior isn't and will likely never be meta, so this card is rendered unusable outside of an obscure, dedicated deck. Its good effect is the only thing that saves it from complete uselessness and lands you with a D+. Not bad. You got great marks in Balance and Creativity, but the Viability section was your downfall here. Become more familiar with the metagame and you will improve. [/quote][/spoiler] I'm really sorry about English errors, as I said, I'm not american and my English is not THAT good... and there are some words that I think that are something in English and in fact, they are not I'm sorry about Grammar, I not master and have tons of things to learn Thank you for the comments of creativity and balance ANYWAY, could you PM me teaching about this "meta" thing? As i've said before entering Cardmaker Academy; I have a lot to learn not only about Cardmaking, but about the entire game itself So if you could PM me and explain me more things I'll be very glad! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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