Dra'shar Posted June 15, 2011 Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 So, this is my first card. I understand that there are probably some horrible OCG errors, so please, correct me on those. After all, that's the only way I'll get better. Also, if you feel it's unbalanced, feel free to say so, and please give tips on how to make it more balanced. [img]http://img810.imageshack.us/img810/7710/432460.jpg[/img] Thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hippocampus Posted June 15, 2011 Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 Not bad for a first start. 2400 ATK is a bit too high for that kind of effect though. Also don't say "battlefield"; the correct word is "field". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Angel of Silence Posted June 15, 2011 Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 Hmmm. I'm not sure about balance...I'll have someone else do that. I think it is relatively balanced. OCG I can help with though. Fix: "Decrease this card's attack by 200 points for every LIGHT monster on the field. When this card attacks your opponents Life Points directly, return to your hand after applying damage calculation." Not sure if that's right, I was never the best at OCG either. Pic fits the card well. I like the name. Overall it's pretty good for your first card, though a bit simple. Although I enjoy very long, complicated effects... I'll give you a 9/10 for it being your first. Nice job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Funky6399 Posted June 15, 2011 Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 @cfc1993 you can have the Atk at 2300 and have 0 def that would be the only way this would be balanced Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Angel of Silence Posted June 15, 2011 Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 @funky99 http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Chainsaw_Insect This is about as balanced as Chainsaw Insect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mugendramon Posted June 15, 2011 Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 [quote name='darkstar_316' timestamp='1308150300' post='5285014'] @funky99 [url="http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Chainsaw_Insect"]http://yugioh.wikia....Chainsaw_Insect[/url] This is about as balanced as Chainsaw Insect. [/quote] Only not. Unless your opponent runs LIGHTs by chance, you have your free 2400 beatstick which will have it's drawback function only after this thing is not needed anymore. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Angel of Silence Posted June 15, 2011 Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 But Chainsaw's effect helps Mill your opponents deck, depleting them of cards faster. Although it is a drawback, it could be considered useful with the right cards. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ieyasu Tokugawa Posted June 15, 2011 Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 [quote name='darkstar_316' timestamp='1308151335' post='5285052'] But Chainsaw's effect helps Mill your opponents deck, depleting them of cards faster. Although it is a drawback, it could be considered useful with the right cards. [/quote] But this card's drawback is a situational drawback. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Angel of Silence Posted June 15, 2011 Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 Fine...I still think it's fine but okay. Why not lower the card's attack to 2100-2300ish. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dra'shar Posted June 15, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 [quote name='Miror B.' timestamp='1308151593' post='5285059'] But this card's drawback is a situational drawback. [/quote] Now I think about it, I agree. I'm thinking I should decrease his ATK to 2200, maybe, change the amount his ATK decreases to 100, and have it for any creature that isn't DARK. What would the wording for this be? I'm not entirely sure on it. Also, thanks for the feedback. It's appreciated. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ieyasu Tokugawa Posted June 15, 2011 Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 [quote name='Dra'shar' timestamp='1308153952' post='5285133'] Now I think about it, I agree. I'm thinking I should decrease his ATK to 2200, maybe, change the amount his ATK decreases to 100, and have it for any creature that isn't DARK. What would the wording for this be? I'm not entirely sure on it. Also, thanks for the feedback. It's appreciated. [/quote] Just put non-DARK instead of LIGHT. And if you're gonna do that you can keep the attack at 2400. Catastor is pro because it's instant destruction for non-DARKs, so if this has a drawback for non-DARKs it should be fine. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 15, 2011 Report Share Posted June 15, 2011 it should be fine at 2400 (there's some level 4s that are at 2400 without even the atk drop) returning to hand personally I had hoped you wouldn't do that once its atk drops to a certain point, but whatever 9.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dra'shar Posted June 16, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 16, 2011 Edited in the adjustments. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MibeR Posted June 16, 2011 Report Share Posted June 16, 2011 This card is quite unique, as Balance Teacher. i say that this card is balanced, indeed very good from a newb. I see a potential in you 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 16, 2011 Report Share Posted June 16, 2011 [quote name='Dra'shar' timestamp='1308212880' post='5287031'] Edited in the adjustments. [/quote] right, then I'll raise the rate to 9.9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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