Sorrow's Grievances

[Yang Xiao-Long]

I saw this image, and something made me make this, so I did. Here's "Sorrow's Grievances".





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[center][center]Lore:[/center][/center]


[center][center]Activate when you take 1000 or more damage. You take 500 damage during each of your Standby Phases: If you do not; destroy this card. During each of your End Phases: Special Summon 1 "Sorrow's Tear Token" (Fairy-Type/LIGHT/Level 4/ATK ?/DEF ?); its original ATK and DEF are equal to the damage you took on the turn of its Summon. When this card is removed from the field: Destroy all "Sorrow's Tear Tokens" on the field; inflict damage to your opponent equal to the combined ATK of the destroyed Tokens.[/center][/center]





I used new OCG. I feel like it's off a bit in a few places, so corrections would be nice; I haven't made cards in a while, so I'd like to see what I can improve on.
The cardmaker went all glitchy on me when I used quotations, so that's why the card image doesn't have text.

So rate/comment/fix.

[ragnarok1945]

strange, the text didn't show up on the card

has a very impressive burn effect, I can see it easily setting up for OTKs

but then, burning yourself makes it easy for your opponent to do OTK on you, so it's balanced

9.4/10

[Therrion]

[center][center]Very nice effect. Though, it is a Spell so how could you activate when you take damage?[/center][/center]
[center][center]Should say something like "Activate during a turn you take 1000 or more damage" or something, correct?[/center][/center]
[center][center]8.6/10[/center][/center]

[LiquidDJ11]

i relly like the burn, and the reverse burn on you is good for balance. 9.2/10