·Toot Posted September 18, 2011 Report Share Posted September 18, 2011 [center][center][img]http://i1024.photobucket.com/albums/y308/Toot4/wind.png[/img][quote][/center][/center] [center][center][color=#40e0d0]You can [s]remove[/s] banish 1 Winged-Beast-Type monster; Special Summon this card from your hand. Face-up Winged-Beast-Type monsters gain 200 ATK for each Winged-Beast-Type monster you control. One time only, you can send 1 Winged-Beast monster you control from your hand to the Graveyard; Special Summon this card from your Graveyard.[/color][/center][/center] [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center] [/quote][/center][/center] [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center][spoiler=Shadow Turner][img]http://i1024.photobucket.com/albums/y308/Toot4/shadow.png[/img][/center][/center] [center][center][quote][color=#800080]When this card is Normal or Special Summoned; Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower Fiend-Type monster from your hand. As long as this face-up card remains on the field; Fiend-Type monsters cannot be targeted by card effects. Once per turn, you can sed 1 Fiend-Type monster from your hand to the Graveyard: Destroy 1 card on the field.[/color][/quote][/spoiler][/center][/center] [center][center][spoiler=Laval Flame Turner][img]http://i1024.photobucket.com/albums/y308/Toot4/kite.png[/img][/center][/center] [center][center][quote][color=#ff0000]You can return 1 of your Banished "Laval" monsters; Special Summon this card from your hand. As long as this card is face-up on the field: When a "Laval" monster is sent to the Graveyard; you can choose to Banish it instead. When this card is sent to the Graveyard; add it to your Deck instead.[/color][/quote][/spoiler][/center][/center] [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center][spoiler=Water Turner][img]http://i1024.photobucket.com/albums/y308/Toot4/23-3.png[/img][/center][/center] [center][center][quote][color=#0000ff]By removing from play 1 Aqua, Fish, or Sea Serpeant in your Graveyard: You can Special Summon this card from your hand. Once per turn by sending 1 card in your hand to the Graveyard: Special Summon 1 of Banished monsters. All face-up Aqua, Fish, or Sea Serpeant monsters gain 200 ATK for each of your Banished monsters.[/color][/quote][/center][/center] [center][center][color=#B22222]EDIT: lol I forgot to put "-Type" after Sea Serpeant which turns out i spelled incorrectly xD[/color][color=#000000][/spoiler][/color][/center][/center] [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center][color=#008000]How Is It?[/color][/center][/center] [center][center][color=#ffa07a]OCG Fixes Highly Appreciated[/color][/center][/center] [center][center][color=#0000ff]I Give Reps For Constructive Feedback[/color][/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JordanPark24 Posted September 18, 2011 Report Share Posted September 18, 2011 Good, but it'd be much more useful as in Aqua-Type monster. A Warrior in the middle of Aqua and Sea Serpent cards is kind of out of place. Anyway, it's still pretty good! I love how you made the card look and the effect is pretty cool, though you used "removed from play" and then switched to the new OCG later on by using "banished." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 18, 2011 xD thnx... i thought having a warrior in banisharks would be kind of a lulz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RoaringSilence0 Posted September 18, 2011 Report Share Posted September 18, 2011 The stars are awesome! How did you do that? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TwinSeed Posted September 18, 2011 Report Share Posted September 18, 2011 It hurts my eyes Other than that, it's cool. I like how you used banished monsters to your advantage; despite them being removed from the game. Why does it look so weird? Cool picture, but it looks like it could've been from some anime.. The DEF (letters&numbers) should be raised and moved to the left just a tad. Maybe it should be Machine instead of Warrior? Looks more like a machine.. OCG's fine, but I think that you're supposed to add "-type" after Aqua, Fish, AND Sea Serpent. "Once per turn,[s]by[/s] [b]you can[/b]..."; it will become "Once per turn, you can discard one card..." and should be limited, like "Once per turn, you can discard one card: Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower banished monster." Also, your last effect should be "Increase the ATK of all Aqua-type, Fish-type, and Sea Serpent-type monsters you control for each of your banished monsters x300." Overall, I really like it. I don't rate cards though, so don't look for a rating. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 18, 2011 [quote name='TwinSeed' timestamp='1316381810' post='5524091'] It hurts my eyes Other than that, it's cool. I like how you used banished monsters to your advantage; despite them being removed from the game. Why does it look so weird? Cool picture, but it looks like it could've been from some anime.. The DEF (letters&numbers) should be raised and moved to the left just a tad. Maybe it should be Machine instead of Warrior? Looks more like a machine.. OCG's fine, but I think that you're supposed to add "-type" after Aqua, Fish, AND Sea Serpent. "Once per turn,[s]by[/s] [b]you can[/b]..."; it will become "Once per turn, you can discard one card..." and should be limited, like "Once per turn, you can discard one card: Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower banished monster." Also, your last effect should be "Increase the ATK of all Aqua-type, Fish-type, and Sea Serpent-type monsters you control for each of your banished monsters x300." Overall, I really like it. [b]I don't rate cards though, so don't look for a rating.[/b] [/quote] lol wasn't looking for 1 thnx for the ratings everyone[quote name='Sonic Dragon' timestamp='1316379625' post='5523958'] The stars are awesome! How did you do that? [/quote] its something i did in gimp a while back xDAnd I actually screwed up the template i was just oo lazy to fix it... you can tell by looking at the borders lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 19, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 19, 2011 Bump for new turner monster Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RoaringSilence0 Posted September 19, 2011 Report Share Posted September 19, 2011 I think it's good, and pretty well balanced...I still can't get over the pictures and stars... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 19, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 19, 2011 thnx man Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted September 19, 2011 Report Share Posted September 19, 2011 [center][center]"Banish 1 Aqua-, Fish-, or Sea Serpent-Type monster in your graveyard: Special Summon this card. Once per turn: You can discard 1 card; Special Summon 1 banished monster. Aqua-, Fish-, and Sea Serpent-Type monsters you control gain 200 ATK for each of your banished monsters."[/center][/center] [center][center]Yeh, make the Special Summon of banished monster 4 or lower. Banishark support FTW!!![/center][/center] [center][center]Laval one is great also, but Laval has a long way to go before its competitive.[/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 19, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 19, 2011 [quote name='Therrion' timestamp='1316400548' post='5525258'] [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center]"Banish 1 Aqua-, Fish-, or Sea Serpent-Type monster in your graveyard: Special Summon this card. Once per turn: You can discard 1 card; Special Summon 1 banished monster. Aqua-, Fish-, and Sea Serpent-Type monsters you control gain 200 ATK for each of your banished monsters." [/center][/center] [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center]Yeh, make the Special Summon of banished monster 4 or lower. Banishark support FTW!!! [/center][/center] [center][center] [/center][/center] [center][center][b]Laval one is great also, but Laval has a long way to go before its competitive.[/b] [/quote] this is it's 1st step to pro... lol and thnx for the feedback [/center][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 19, 2011 Report Share Posted September 19, 2011 it's not too hard to summon still unsure how you plan to use the banished monsters this way though..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 19, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 19, 2011 i guess it can rely on the support cards within and some outside of the arhetype Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Simping For Hina Posted September 19, 2011 Report Share Posted September 19, 2011 Why Laval? Shouldn't it keep to the achetype and not others? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 19, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 19, 2011 lol i wasn't really basing it on an archetype... just similar names lol (Turner)... it would probably be a nice archetype if i put my mind to it lolI was just gonna make 1 for each attribute Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MibeR Posted September 19, 2011 Report Share Posted September 19, 2011 Banish not on the Caps > banish. both cards is decent, though IMO Water Turner should be at 2000-2300ish, its pretty weak atm Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 19, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 19, 2011 lol thnx for the FB Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 20, 2011 bump for new turner monster Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 21, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2011 Bump... Wind monster added Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 21, 2011 Report Share Posted September 21, 2011 for Storm Turner, the type is called Winged Beast, not Winged-Beast so this goes to 2500 right off the bat shame for the last effect you made it only once, don't think twice per duel would really hurt Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 21, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2011 lol i thought it would be to Op'ed, thnx for the feedback Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 21, 2011 Report Share Posted September 21, 2011 explain how twice per duel would be too much then Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 21, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2011 lol i don't really have a good reason why, i wasn't originally gonna put a restriction on it at all... something just told me it would be Op'ed lol xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 21, 2011 Report Share Posted September 21, 2011 all right, we'll just leave it up to you then Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
·Toot Posted September 25, 2011 Author Report Share Posted September 25, 2011 bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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