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Jackel The Mad

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LOre:When this card is Summoned; discard 3 cards from your hand to the graveyard to actiavate one of the fallowing effects:
*This card gains 500 ATK and DEF for every monster in your graveyard.(destroy this card at the end of the turn)
*Roll a Six-Sided Die twice if the combined total is an even number this card is destroyed and you lose 1000 LP, if it is an odd number destroy all cards on your opponents side of the field and in there hand and your opponent loses 500 for each card.

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Lore:1 Tuner monster+ 1 or more non-tuner monsters
When this card is successfully Synchro Summoned call out a card type and card name,then draw the top 4 cards of your deck if you draw the card you named your opponent loses 1000LP.If you do not this card is destroyed and banished.

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Lore:3 Level 9 Monsters
Once per turn: you can detach on Xyz material monster from this card ; to discard all card in your hand so this card gain 3000 ATK for this turn.

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Alright, there are some basic things wrong with your OCG. One is that there are some very basic spelling and grammar mistakes, such as wrongly placed punctuation or no punctuation at all. Remember that you can use real cards as references for correct OCG etc.
Since I have no idea how Xyz cards work, I can't really criticize you. ^^"
You pictures are nice and you cards seem original. They're pretty good aside from the OCG.
So, not bad! :)

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okay, let's see.

for Ru'Sa , it should be "send 3 cards to the Graveyard" since if it's discard it could trigger Dark World monsters' effects which would make this OPed even furher. I say even further because it's already overpowered and unbalanced-
1) it's level 4, non-Nomi monster that can potentially gain up to more than 10 000 ATK by its own effect only. (even if it gets destroyed)
2) a 50:50 chance for a Chaos Emperor Dragon EotE effect? That also deals effect damage? And the negative effect is only destroying your own card and losing 1000...just no... even if you had the negative effect the reverse of the positive, it'd still be overpowered.

3) it's simply too powerful.
Possible fixes: Make this a Nomi. Lower the ATK gain and for the second effect, make the negative effect the reverse of the positive, maybe without the hand discarding, or discarding up to 1/2/3 random cards, and then we'll talk.



okay, the synchro:

it's sort of overpowered, it triggers some insane combos.

it's a generic level 7 synchro..which lets you draw 4 cards...this could so easily be abused with Plaguespreader Zombie...
but I'm still not sure.. in any case, if you keep these effects, you HAVE to lower the ATK/DEF.

The Xyz...is probably the worst Xyz I have ever seen...

3 level 9 monsters..
it's hard to take out even 2..not to mention 3 level 9's...
would you xyz 3 trishulas for this? I most certainly won't..
And the only thing it does is to boost its ATK to 3000? ONLY TILL YOUR TURN ENDS?...[b]AND[/b] you need to discard cards from your hand?..
This is just so many kinds of bad...
I guess it could be sort of useful if you're running a Dark World deck but still, how is that going to get you 3 level 9's to use in the first place?

alternative to this = (which is 10x better) Red Dragon Archfiend, which is MUCH easier to Summon and does the job MUCH better.

Sorry, it's not bad for a beginner though so keep your chin up, you'll learn to balance out your cards the more you make and the more people comment and give you advice on them.

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