Akuma Sophia

[Rewind God]

Hello. So Far im not too into designing my own cards but i thought i could make something cool so please tell me what you think.

I personally think Zombies are awesome as they swarm the field and i thought it would be cool to make a Zombie-type monster dedicated for that purpose. I feel its too strong so please help me with feedback and please dont be TOO harsh since im still not too familiar with Xyz's and im still on my way to becoming a real cardmaker

 

 

2 level 6 monsters

This card can attack twice per turn, If it does, 1 other monster you control cannot declare an attack. (This effect cannot be activated if all other monsters you control declared an attack or if this card attacked directly). Once per turn, detach 1 Xyz material from this card; Special Summon 1 level 4 or below Zombie-type monster. That monster is destroyed during the End Phase. If this card has no Xyz materials attached to it, destroy it and Special Summon the Xyz materials used to Xyz summon this card. Those monsters cannot attack directly and cannot be used as a tribute or as a Synchro material and are destroyed during the End Phase.

[Organized Chaos]

An interesting card. I see you made it as Zombie support but when do Zombie Decks run Level 6 monsters ? I like the double attack thing, considering it's weak stats and all, but the bit in brackets isn't needed. It is already implyed that if you control no monsters that haven't attacked, you can't double effect. If you really want to explain it, "During the start of each of your Battle Phases, you can select 1 other monster you control. During this turn's Battle Phase, the selected monster cannot declare an attack ; This card can attack twice." I think that's the correct OCG. Also for both of the Special Summoning effects, you have to state where they're Summoned from. Considering they're Zombies, I assume from the grave ? Also for the last effect, say they can't be used for another Akuma Sophia or else it'll be really OP'ed. Besides the errors, a good card if you can get the materials. Most of the effects are balanced and well thought out. Well done. If you ever want help with card ideas or design, PM me. I'll be glad to help.

[Rewind God]

An interesting card. I see you made it as Zombie support but when do Zombie Decks run Level 6 monsters ? I like the double attack thing, considering it's weak stats and all, but the bit in brackets isn't needed. It is already implyed that if you control no monsters that haven't attacked, you can't double effect. If you really want to explain it, "During the start of each of your Battle Phases, you can select 1 other monster you control. During this turn's Battle Phase, the selected monster cannot declare an attack ; This card can attack twice." I think that's the correct OCG. Also for both of the Special Summoning effects, you have to state where they're Summoned from. Considering they're Zombies, I assume from the grave ? Also for the last effect, say they can't be used for another Akuma Sophia or else it'll be really OP'ed. Besides the errors, a good card if you can get the materials. Most of the effects are balanced and well thought out. Well done. If you ever want help with card ideas or design, PM me. I'll be glad to help.

 

Thank you for feed back. Will change it soon. Yeah i forgot to put the part about the Special Summon effect. It was supposed to be from the graveyard. Also do you think it would make it less overpowered if it said something like "Special Summon 1 of the Xyz materials" instead of Special Summoning both of them because 2 level 6 monsters is already strong enough and i understand what you mean for another Akuma Sophia. Like i said ill edit this as soon as possible.

[Organized Chaos]

Thank you for feed back. Will change it soon. Yeah i forgot to put the part about the Special Summon effect. It was supposed to be from the graveyard. Also do you think it would make it less overpowered if it said something like "Special Summon 1 of the Xyz materials" instead of Special Summoning both of them because 2 level 6 monsters is already strong enough and i understand what you mean for another Akuma Sophia. Like i said ill edit this as soon as possible.

Yes, I think that would balance it a bit more and thank you for taking notice of my comments. To be honest, what we need is more Level 6 Zombies so this card could see more play.