Unrestful Assasin

[Scrooge]

After a long absense, I came up with a simple, yet interesting concept.



[img]http://i.imgur.com/zTFWO.jpg[/img]

[b]Lore: [/b]This card cannot be destoyed by battle. This card cannot be placed into Defence position. Each time this card would be destroyed by battle, decrease it's DEF by 100. Once this card's DEF becomes 0, it is destroyed and is Special Summoned on your opponent's field during the next battle phase. If the player has 5 monsters on the field, one must be destroyed.

[Nathanael D. Striker]

This card cannot be placed into Defence Position. When this card would be destroyed: Decrease its DEF by 100 instead. When this card's DEF becomes 0: Destroy it. If this card is destroyed by its effect: Special Summoned it to your opponent's field during the next Battle Phase. If your opponent has 5 monsters on their field when this card would be Special Summoned to their field; Tribute 1 monster to Special Summon this card.

My Card Grammar may be rusty, but it is easier to understand. The card's name would be better if it was Restless Assassin. I think that this card could use a bit more work in its overall design.

Overall, 38/50 C+.

[Galkin]

I think the lore is better written as:

[quote]This card cannot be Set. If this card is in Defense Position: switch it to Attack Position. If this card would be destroyed: decrease its DEF by 100 instead. When this card's DEF becomes 0: destroy it. If this card is destroyed by its effect: during the next Battle Phase, Special Summon it to your opponent's side of the Field If your opponent has 5 monsters on their Field when this card would be Special Summoned to their field: Tribute 1 monster; Special Summon this card to your opponent's side of the Field.[/quote]
I don't see much point in this card. It has battle immunity 3 times then it goes to your opponent's control. You have to take a wreck to your Life Points before you can wreck your opponent's and more often than not, it will be destroyed by a card effect instead. Whatever this card's purpose is, Arcana Force 0 - The Fool can probably do better with a little Creature Swap.

[Scrooge]

I deeply thank both of you for your comments. Indeed, this card requires some more solid definition, as it was made after a unmaterialized concept I thought of.

I shall tweak it.


EDIT:

[img]http://i.imgur.com/AHfue.jpg[/img]

[b]Lore: [/b]This card cannot be placed into Defence Position. When this card would be destroyed by battle: Decrease its DEF by 100 instead. When this card's DEF becomes 0: Destroy it. If this card is destroyed by its effect: Special Summoned it to your opponent's field during the next Battle Phase. If your opponent has 5 monsters on their field when this card would be Special Summoned to their field; Tribute 1 monster to Special Summon this card. If this card were to be destroyed by a Monster Effect: destroy both this card and the other Monster. During the following Battle Phase, Special Summon both monsters in opposite fields.


Major credit to Strikeman for the wording!

[Nathanael D. Striker]

Glad to help.