Legendary Dragon Posted November 30, 2012 Report Share Posted November 30, 2012 [img]http://yugico.com/customcard/146431.jpg[/img] [spoiler:D-Lord: Nobula, the Maser Dragon] [color=#000000][font=Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif][size=3]2 Rank 4 Xyz monsters[/size][/font][/color] [color=#000000][font=Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif][size=3]This card cannot be summoned except by Xyz Summon. While this card has an Xyz Material, it cannot be destroyed by battle or card effects. During your Standby Phase, detach 1 Xyz Material from this card. Once per turn: You can pay 500 Life Points to target 1 face-up monster your opponent controls; negate its effects and decrease its ATK and DEF by 500 until the End Phase. You must have an Xyz Material(s) on this card to resolve this effect.[/size][/font][/color][color=#000000][font=Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif][size=3][/spoiler][/size][/font][/color] [spoiler:D-Lord: Entiano, the Supreme Insect][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/146082.jpg[/img] 3 Rank 3 Xyz monsters This card cannot be summoned except by Xyz Summon. While this card has an Xyz Material, it cannot be destroyed by battle or card effects. During your Standby Phase, detach 1 Xyz Material from this card. Once per turn, by paying 1000 Life Points, you can switch the original ATK and DEF of all face-up monsters on the field until the End Phase. Any additions and subtractions to ATK and DEF due to card effects are applied to the new ATK and DEF. If a Monster(s) has 2000 or less ATK due to this effect; destroy it. You must have an Xyz Materials(s) on this card to resolve this effect.[/spoiler] [spoiler:D-Lord: Aquanor, the Chained Knight][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145765.jpg[/img] [color=#000000][font=Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif][size=3]2 Rank 4 Xyz monsters[/size][/font][/color] [color=#000000][font=Verdana, Geneva, sans-serif][size=3]This card cannot be summoned except by Xyz Summon. While this card has an Xyz Material, it cannot be destroyed by battle or card effects. During your Standby Phase, detach 1 Xyz Material from this card. Once per turn: You can target 1 face-up your opponent controls. Inflict damage to your opponent equal to it's Level/Rank x200. You must have an Xyz Material(s) on this card to resolve this effect.[/size][/font][/color][font=verdana,geneva,sans-serif][size=3][color=#000000][/spoiler][/color] [color=#000000]Alright so you're prolly wondering "What the actual f*** is this", but let me explain.[/color] [color=#000000]Y'know how a Chaos Xyz Summon keeps the original Xyz Monster's overlay units? Not the case here. When you Dimensional Xyz Summon (or D-Xyz Summon, which is what I'm calling it), if the Xyz Monsters being used for the Xyz Summon have overlay units attached to them, you send them to the graveyard.[/color] [color=#000000]Now you're prolly curious about what a "D-Lord" is. Well, in the fan-fic I'm making, these monsters are known as Devourer Lords, Xyz monsters who eat anti-matter, aka their Xyz Monsters brethern (like cannibalism) and ate much of the universe. Someone stops their reign of terror, and traps them all in stars, to temporarily stop them from eating the goddamn universe. Fastforward a 1000 years later, most if not all of the D-Lords literally ate their previous prisons, causing them to collapse and become black holes, which allows many others of their kind to come from whatever forsaken dimension they all originated from. I'm still working on the rest of the background story, but I think that *sort* of explains what they are. I hope.[/color] [color=#000000]As for their effects and how they're related to each other, well they prevent their destruction by having Xyz Materials. Unfortunately unlike most Xyz Monsters they naturally consume their overlay materials, so you gotta use their effects quickly.[/color] [color=#000000]So what do you think?[/color][/size][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aix Posted December 1, 2012 Report Share Posted December 1, 2012 The picture doesn't show, if you made this on Yugico, plz go and unprivate the set which this card is located in, otherwise we can't see it. I can't see it's stats, so it's hard to judge how powerful it is, if it had a something like 2500 - 2600 ATK, then it would be a good card IMO, any more would be a bit too strong. 3000 DEF would be good too, as a wall, but not both at the same time. The burn is nice, it's a perfectly fine amount considering you can only do it once, but nothing really stands out about this card. (No rating until I can see the card) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legendary Dragon Posted December 1, 2012 Author Report Share Posted December 1, 2012 Thanks didn't know that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legendary Dragon Posted December 1, 2012 Author Report Share Posted December 1, 2012 bumping this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SynchroTuner Posted December 1, 2012 Report Share Posted December 1, 2012 Okay, I feel the card is pretty balanced, with one part UP and the other OP. Since all other xyz materials of the xyz materials of the xyz monster you xyz summon are removed(see what I did there?), and you cant summon except by xyz summon, this card is pretty weak, getting its effect only twice. But, then again we could use xyz monsters without xyz materials as xyz material for this xyz monster's xyz summon(see it? I did it again.). Cards which attach xyz materials to cards would really help this one out. The burn effect is good, could deal 800 damage for an average lvl 4 to 2400 for a lvl 12. But, the cannot attack part seems a bit weak for dealing just 800-1600 average damage. The "cannot be destroyed by battle and card effects while this xyz monster has xyz material monsters which are xyz monsters which do not have xyz materials"(There! Again!) part is fine, since it is only a two turn delay, pretty much like Tiras, except also by battle...Like Maestroke(!), except that, that xyz monster's xyz materials have to be detached to activate its effect, while this xyz monster's xyz materials which are xyz monsters without xyz materials do not. IMO The card is okay with the atk and def, actually it is pretty good to use up those xyz monsters without xyz materials as xyz materials for an xyz monster which detach xyz materials if the xyz material xyz monster had them, but since the xyz material xyz monster did not have xyz material, we do not have to worry about xyz materials of xyz materials of xyz monsters which would get detached since they were xyz materials for xyz monsters!!(sorry if you did not get that part. Read it again. You will probably get it then.) Wait, you need to detach xyz material xyz monster from this cad to activate its effect? I really wouldn't put that part since it is already using 1 xyz material xyz monster as its fodder per SP. Detaching another one for its effect would seem a waste. Seriously. It would get the invincibility for only 2 turns as such, detaching another one would make it really weak. You might want to remove that cost. You really did not have to put the whole swallowing xyz materials like cannibals and devouring them ruthlessly, eating anti-matter and stuffing up the goddamned universe image into my mind. It is disorienting if you think about it. The card itself is pretty sweet. But you really should remove that cost and increase its atk and def by 200-400 since it is using up 2 xyz monsters. I would give it 8.5/10 I spent a lot of time in the middle of the knight writing this review, so if something is wrong, don't scream. I was sleepy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legendary Dragon Posted December 1, 2012 Author Report Share Posted December 1, 2012 Thank you for the wonderful review! I changed the first D-Lord and I updated the OP with a new one. What ya think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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SynchroTuner Posted December 2, 2012 Report Share Posted December 2, 2012 Dude, you cannot bump your posts within 12 hours of it receiving the last post OR before it's not on the first page anymore. Only then. Any post automatically brings it to top, so you don't have to post bump after every hour. Review for the new cards(without jokes this time.)- The new Aquanor is good, won't be saying anything about it. About Entiano- You should reduce its atk by about 200-500 depending upon you because with its effect, its atk should really be reduced. Could turn out into massive offensive with cards having 3000 def like millenium shield and labyrinth. Even 2000 or 2100 would be strong, like giant soldier of stone and gem-knight sapphire. While also wiping out your opponent's omnsters with 2000 or less def. Strong, but is fine. This could turn into an otk, with just 2 other 3000 def monsters. Picture is great, though I would like to know the derivation for its name. Ento, as in entomolgy? Probably, I suppose. Defense is great, acting as a wall which is why I told you to reduce its atk, to prevent it from being both a wall, and a killing machine. 3 rank 3 seems justified for this card's effect, preventing destruction and for 3 turns. But using its effect for 3 turns is too much. Too Much. Add a cost. A big one, like banishing and paying/discarding. Otherwise, yes, you got it. OP. Could bring use to a useless zenmaines or a levaiar(I think that's the spelling?). Nice card, but put a cost. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Legendary Dragon Posted December 2, 2012 Author Report Share Posted December 2, 2012 Thanks again SynchroTuner! I updated Entiano and uploaded the main character's ace card, Nobula. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SynchroTuner Posted December 3, 2012 Report Share Posted December 3, 2012 OOOOOoooooooOOOOO. I love main ace monsters! And this one is no different! The card is good, pretty balanced, but same as in entiano, give its effect a cost(but a very small one for this one). Discard 1 card or pay 500 lp would be fine, but try to have an innovative cost. Its effect, which is effect negation [i]and[/i] atk and def reducing is okay. Could take out strong ones with 3000 and below power with ease, since it cannot be destroyed by battle. Then again, it makes it OP. I would suggest you to reduce ts atk by 200 to get it out of the OP spot. Yes, definitely a game changer, to some exent. Using two utopias which work well with the defensive attack negation part would be good for this card' fodder. Negate 4 attacks, then bam your opponent with this + another strong monster which you could probably pull out in 2-4 turns of atk negation. Love the card and the image! Can't wait for the story! Already posted it or working on it? Please give me a link if you have started. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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