Not-so-Radiant Arin Posted January 9, 2013 Report Share Posted January 9, 2013 [img]http://yugico.com/customcard/165148.jpg[/img] [spoiler='This Machine, crafted by our ancestor, Clarice, will wipe the world clean and start anew!'] Level 8 Machine/Synchro/Effect 2500 ATK/1500 DEF LIGHT 1 Tuner + 1 or more Non-Tuner monsters. Cards cannot be Banished, except by this card's effect. When this card is Synchro Summoned: Your opponent discards cards from their hand, equal to the Non-Tuner materials used for this card's Synchro Summon. This effect can only be used once per turn. During your next Standby Phase after this card is destroyed by a card effect and sent to the Graveyard: You can Banish 1 LIGHT or DARK monster from your Graveyard: Special Summon this card. When this card is Special Summoned this way: You discard 1 card.[/spoiler] I'm on a roll with this "Chaos Destroyer" stuff. I love hypocrisy, don't you? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zazubat Posted January 9, 2013 Report Share Posted January 9, 2013 Okay, who is this Clarice you keep talking about, you mention him/her/it in every post, and I don't get it! GOD! Anyways, pretty okay card, but if you are making it for Machina, why is it a LIGHT monster? I mean Machina is EARTH after all. It's useful for others, say if this was called Ally of Justice/Constellar it would make sense, but since you're calling it Machina, you might want to change that name to something else, or at least make it support like EARTH or something. Secondly, you might want to change the wording to say "Cards cannot be Banished while this card is face-up on the field" because it never activates it's effect on the field, it does in the Graveyard, and since you're calling it "except by it's own effect" you should be refering to simply the fact that it cannot activate it's effect while that card is face-up. Now for the actuall effect. I like it, it's not too powerful, and you keep it down because you need both Attributes in your Grave, plus you discard. The summoning is also balanced since you can only use 1 of them per turn, plus it's not that powerful of a summoning effect, and it's only Synchro Summon, so it's secondary cannot summon it and gain the effect again, which I think is a good thing. Two other OCG things, you don't need to say "you" discard 1 card. Simply remove the you, it's not needed, unless you say your opponent, your opponent never gets to draw a card (unless you're Dragged Down of course, though that it says "Both" in the start and only has one sentence of text without any breaks, so I guess it makes sense somewhat. Also, say non-Tuner, not Non-Tuner (non is never capitlized on the real cards). 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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