Kinda my first cards [planned "Archetype"]

[NagatoZakuro]

Edit: I don't know why but somehow the spoilers do not ALL work out as they were supposed to.. trying to fix it. =w=

 

Sooo.. these are kinda my first cards from the first of my 2 planned "Archetypes", which would be a Cybernetic Set. I'm a beginner and thus my OCG is most likely to be really really bad, so I would really appreciate correction! ^^ 

 

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Lore: You can discard 1 "Cybernetic" Monster to Special Summon this card on your opponent's field. Once per turn, during your opponent's Standby Phase, while this card is face-up on the field, the owner of this card must tribute 1 card on his field. If the is no card to tribute, destroy this card.

 

Lore: Cannot be Normal Summoned/Set. If your opponent controls a monster and you control no monsters, you can Special Summon this card from your hand. Destroy and remove from play this Card during the next End Phase. 

 

(Somehow I can't make the dots visible in the card-description D: Can anyone help me at that? ^^'')

Lore: When this card in your possession is destroyed by your opponent's card (either by battle or by card effect) and sent to your Graveyard, use 1 of the following effects:

•Target 1 Machine-Type monster your opponent controls; take control of that target.

•Special Summon 1 level 4 or lower "Cybernetic" monster from your hand or your graveyard.

 

Lore: If you own a face-up "Cybernetic" monster, you can Normal Summon this card without a tribute. Once per turn, you can destroy 1 face-up "Cybernetic" monster you control; This card gains ATK equal to half of the original ATK of the destroyed monster. When this card is destroyed and sent to graveyard, you can return the monsters, destroyed by this effect, to your hand or special summon them in face-up Defense Position.

 

Lore: When your opponent's monster declares a direct attack: You can banish 1 "Cybernetic" Monster from your Graveyard to Special Summon this card from your hand in face-up Defense Position. When this card is destroyed by battle and sent to your Graveyard: Inflict Damage to the opponent, equal to the ATK of the monster, battling with this card.

 

 

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[spoiler=Spells/Traps (1 Card)]

 

Lore: Once per turn, you can tribute 1 "Cybernetic" Monster to activate the effect of this card. You can target 1 face-up Monster on the field with same level or lower as the tributed Monster; destroy the target. When this Card is destroyed and sent to Graveyard: Shuffle the Monsters, used as tribute for this Card's effect, into the Deck. 

 

 

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I know, the Archetype isn't supporting eachother that well yet, but I'm still working on a lot of cards. Also here some unfinished cards:

 

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(Will most likely be able to swap it's DEF and ATK once per turn, but returned to normal during End Phase

 

 

(Having a real hard time with OCG for the effect of this card.)

 

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Image Disclaimer

Thanks and credits to:

(yes I listed Artists there whose Image I haven't used YET)

HP Doom

JazinKay

Sword-Summoner

Wolfberserker

(please mention if I forgot someone)

[Aix]

Wow, a newcomer who read the rules, realizes that their cards may be bad and also doesn't post a gigantic archetype. Very well, I will review your cards.

 

Stealth Bomber

You can discard 1 "Cybernetic" monster; Special Summon this card on your opponent's field. Once per turn, during your opponent's Standby Phase: The owner of this card must Tribute 1 card they control. If they cannot, destroy this card.

Seeing as your other cards have no real use for having a monster on your opponent's side of the field, except, I suppose, attacking it to inflict some petty damage. This card really isn't worth it. It's technically a -3 in terms of card advantage (the way worth is calculated in this game by pro players) (the minus comes from -1: the discarded card, -1: this card in your hand, -1: +1 card to your opponent) which can be a -2 if the intent is to attack it and inflict damage, and it becomes a -4 upon your next Standby Phase (the way you worded it is that the Tribute happens during you, the owner's, Standby Phase), and this massive card disadvantage is really, really bad and no one would ever want to use this.

 

If you mean to make your opponent Tribute their card, well, then, it would be worded this way: You can discard 1 "Cybernetic" monster; Special Summon this card on your opponent's field. Once per turn, during the Standby Phase: You must Tribute 1 other card you control. If you cannot, destroy this card.

Which then, it is still a -2 in terms of card advantage (-1: the discarded cards, -1: this card in your hand no longer is yours, -1: a card for your opponent, +1: -1 card from your opponent's side of the field), which is no good and the card removal is a card of your opponent's choice, so they could just Tribute some card they have no use for.

 

There are cards that destroy a card for +0 card advantage such as Soul Taker (destroys a face-up monster your opponent controls of your choice, but increases your opponent's Life Points by 1000, which isn't too bad of a price to pay) and Smashing Ground (destroys your opponent's monster with the highest DEF), so this card is horribly outclassed.

 

Eternal Protector

Cannot be Normal Summoned/Set. If your opponent controls a monster and you control no monsters: You can Special Summon this card from your hand. During your next End Phase, destroy this card, and if you do, banish it.

A really random and generic card with no originality. I don't mind this card, even though it's a Level 7, because the top Decks (which focus on Summoning Level 7s) don't need this.

 

Cybernetic Hacker

The dots cannot be done on this cardmaker. Go to Yugico instead if you really want them. They also have Xyz there. But their forum is dead, so don't bother posting your cards there.

 

When this card in your possession is destroyed by your opponent's card (either by battle or by card effect) and sent to your Graveyard, activate 1 of the following effects:

•Target 1 Machine-Type monster your opponent controls; take control of that target.

•Special Summon 1 level 4 or lower "Cybernetic" monster from your hand or your Graveyard.

Random Machine-Type hate, as if the game doesn't have enough Machine hate already. I don't like that part, I suppose it would retrieve your Stealth Bomber, but why would you go through all that trouble for that? It's a mediocre card with a mediocre effect.

 

Absorber

If you own a face-up "Cybernetic" monster, you can Normal Summon this card without a Tribute. Once per turn: You can destroy 1 face-up "Cybernetic" monster you control; This card gains ATK equal to half of the original ATK of the destroyed monster. When this card is destroyed and sent to Graveyard: You can return the monsters destroyed by this card's effect to your hand OR Special Summon them in face-up Defense Position.

That last effect is quite nice. I suppose it's an okay beatstick.

 

Mirror Cannon

When your opponent's monster declares a direct attack: You can banish 1 "Cybernetic" Monster from your Graveyard; Special Summon this card from your hand in face-up Defense Position. When this card is destroyed by battle and sent to your Graveyard: Inflict Damage to the opponent equal to the ATK of the monster that destroyed it.

There's already cards with those effects (though separate) and the second can be used in the same fashion that this card is used.

 

Catalyst Turret

Once per turn: You can Tribute 1 "Cybernetic" Monster to target 1 monster on the field whose Level is equal to or lower than the Level of the Tributed monster; destroy that target. When this card is destroyed and sent to Graveyard: Shuffle the monsters Tributed for this card's effect into the Deck.

Meh, it's nothing special.

 

 

OVERALL

I realize you say that this archetype doesn't support each other yet, well then, it's not really an archetype. The whole point of an archetype is to support each other and have a specific theme or goal. Bleh. Just a compilation of random cards.

[NagatoZakuro]

Wow, a newcomer who read the rules, realizes that their cards may be bad and also doesn't post a gigantic archetype.

Well I tend to NOT act noobish, reason I read the rules. 

 

 

Thanks a lot for taking time to review my.. well.. horrible "Archetype" (about the not supporting yet, that's why I put these " "... I'm still working on that part ^^)

 

Also when I was already starting my second Archetype, which this time is REALLY an Archetype (but has horrible OCG...), I just realized at how bad this small set is. 

 

Well I guess I will need to re-do these cards once I get in the mood for. For now I'll work on my better Set, and hope for a better review! :3