宇佐見 蓮子@C94 Posted July 9, 2013 Report Share Posted July 9, 2013 A while back, I made this awesome piece of work. Then I decided that Overwhelming Supers should be a thing. So, I got back to safebooru and found a pic that I think looks awesome. And it is. It's even got a girl on it. [spoiler=I had another picture depicting Gigant: Take-Mikazuchi instead of that, so ask and I'll show that one :3] 2 Level 9 Monsters When this card is Xyz Summoned: Target 1 card on the field; send it to the graveyard. Once per turn, during either player's turn: When your opponent Special Summons with an ATK of 2500 or less, you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card; negate the effect(s) of that card while it is face-up on the field and reduce it's ATK to 0. [/spoiler] When I made this, I want to convey the image of a destructive satellite, high up in the sky decimating those who displease him. So, I went and gave him just that. I think I might ditch the Xyz Summon eff, but Jiggurat had an effect similar to that so I wanna keep it like that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted July 9, 2013 Report Share Posted July 9, 2013 It is extremely more powerful then Dyson Sphere, and I really like that, but I don't like how it screws anything and everything that can deal with it monster wise (aside from ATK, but really, you were generous with that too). I would suggest reducing the strength of the effect or reducing the stats a bit. 3000 ATK with such an effect is a bit too good (in Theory-O), so perhaps 2700 or something would be better. Off topic of the card I had little to nothing to say about: A. It still wasn't the name I voted for... Meaaann. B. Your leaderboard card is due today, my day ends in an hour and 40 minutes, so feel free to PM me if you need more time and etc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
宇佐見 蓮子@C94 Posted July 9, 2013 Author Report Share Posted July 9, 2013 Removed the "NO XYZ" effect completely. Now it's a lot less screwy, rite? Also, I'm having difficulties trying to find my card, so hang on for a bit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted July 9, 2013 Report Share Posted July 9, 2013 It doesn't appear any different, am I missing something? Alright Toyo, no problem ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
宇佐見 蓮子@C94 Posted July 9, 2013 Author Report Share Posted July 9, 2013 Err, it had an effect that said "No Xyz Monsters with lower rank than this card can be Xyz Summoned" earlier? Also, sent you a PM. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zazubat Posted July 9, 2013 Report Share Posted July 9, 2013 I don't really mind it having 3000 at all. Rank 8s have that on most of their cards, so why should we make Rank 9s worse, especially considering the extreame lack of support they have (like an Archetype for example). Well, the card is pretty good. It's mandatory send when it's Summoned can screw you up, but if you're going for it anyway, you probably have a card you want sent. DARK is nice, another EEV target, and since this screws up what your opponent might have in store for you, if they are trying to use their Spell/Traps, you can screw them up on that as well. Since it doesn't destroy the monster, it means that your opponent can still do stuff with it, which I like, since it a powerful effect. I like it, another good Rank 9 from you Toyo. My OCG fix: Hover your cursor over the dotted lines to read my reasons for the fixes. I do not repeat if you have made the flaw more than once, instead will it be bold (if any). Anything in italic is simple typos (if any). Also, if you have the time, check out my OCG Thread. 2 Level [acronym='You don't normally capitalize monsters on their own, only if you're talking about specific monsters, such as Xyz Monsters or Effect Monsters you want to write it like that']monsters[/acronym] When this card is Xyz Summoned: Target 1 card on the field; send it to the graveyard. Once per turn, during either player's turn: When your opponent Special Summons [acronym='You forgot to put this in. Also, I need to know, is it like Bottomless Trap Hole, where it gets multiple? Then you want to put "a monster(s)" instead']a monster[/acronym] with an ATK of 2500 or less[acronym='You had a condtion just before, so when it says "you can", you want this a colon here']: You[/acronym] can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card; [acronym='There's no reason to say that the line "While it is face-up on the field" since it will lose them when it isn't face-up on the field regardless because of game mechanics. Also, you could say that it reduces the ATK (Black Rose Dragon), but saying "becomes" makes more sense, since you're talking about a specific value, that being 0 in this case.']negate that monster's effects and its ATK becomes 0.[/acronym] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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