The First Immortal

[Syncopation]

 

In case you can't read the surprisingly clear text (I mean JESUS, this site has been busy):

 

2 Level 1 Dark Monsters

You can only control 1 "The First Immortal". When this card is Xyz Summoned; attach up to 3 Spell/Trap Cards from your hand as Xyz Material. If your lifepoints is 3000 or less, it gains the following effects: *Thrice per turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material to target 1 face-up card your opponent controls; negate the effects of that card, then destroy it. If you do, this card gains 1000 attack. 

 

What do you think?

[Anc. Gr. Gadjiltron Dragon]

The burn damage needs to go. Or he needs to not be allowed to attack. Othwerwise that is 3000, plus battle damage. Nononono. Doesnt matter if your LP are 3000 or less, that's ridiculous.

 

I am however intrigued by the attaching spells from the hand as Material, though I am not sure how justifiable that actually is.

 

Anyway, "decent" card, but needs some improvements before it can be considered balanced.

[Syncopation]

The burn damage needs to go. Or he needs to not be allowed to attack. Othwerwise that is 3000, plus battle damage. Nononono. Doesnt matter if your LP are 3000 or less, that's ridiculous.

 

I am however intrigued by the attaching spells from the hand as Material, though I am not sure how justifiable that actually is.

 

Anyway, "decent" card, but needs some improvements before it can be considered balanced.

I removed the burn damage. Is it balanced or is it still stumbling?

[Trebuchet MS]

[Earth] isn't a type. Perhaps you meant [Rock]?

[Syncopation]

[Earth] isn't a type. Perhaps you meant [Rock]?

Oh -_-.