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Indeed, i may if possible and if you will let me, want to include your Cyber-Space monsters in it at a point.

 

Section 1 stays in 1 dimension then in section 2 it travels through many so i will need all kinds of Cards to make this Fan-Fic work

 

^_^

 

And in all honesty this Fan-Fic is more realistic, my other one was about to go down the road of talking insects, mutant insects, a planet of insects, alien insects, warp holes, talking gremlins, talking trees, moving trees, morphing cards, restless shadows and running beans lol

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I wrote this on Microsoft word so if there are any grammar errors blame Microsoft.

Or' date=' I could blame them on you, since this is your fan-fic and you're supposed to look for grammar errors.

 

Some words were ment to have grammar / spelling errors as they would have been slang.

I can understand this. I'm perfectly fine with this.

 

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All the characters i used i never used before' date=' and you cannot judge this from other Fan-Fics you have read, as that is a biased opinion, not factual and not at all right for Judgement.

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I can not judge this from other fan-fics that I have read? Good. Then, I can say that Voku seems much like Jaden. The characters are quite stereotypical.

 

Thus' date=' i suggest you continue to read to next Chapters to see if it is any different from your 'seen it before' thoughts.

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I will, once you post them.

 

Over and out.

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I have read through the entire Fan-Fic on Microsoft word and it says there are no errors, thus if there are;

 

It is Microsofts fault, we are not all Geeky English nerds you know.

 

Good about the slang.

 

He is nothing like Jaden;

 

For Voku is based on myself (More then Esu was)

 

You will see a restless, cunning, cheeky, vain, self obsessed and annoying attitude from Voku, unlike any traits Jaden posseses.

 

And i dont see how a main hero being Vain, self obsessed and annoying is stearotypical somehow.

 

And good ^_^

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Well, as it was the first chapter, all that I've seen from Voku pretty much reminds me of Jaden. He beat a somewhat professional duelist in his first duel appearance. (as Jaden did with Crowler) And vain, self-obsessed and annoying I didn't see in the fan-fic. But I'll read it again and come back to this.

 

But it was good, better than most on this site.

 

EDIT: Ok, found vain. The squirrel seems to cover up the annoying part.

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Ah, you cannot judge a book by its opening chapter.

 

You seen to love reading fan-fics and i assume you like reading, if so, you will know the importance of not judging something before you have time to fully understand it and give it a chance.

 

^_^

 

And thank You

 

^_^

 

Indeed, syling Hair = Vain, squirrel is annoying, and Voku will be annoying back.

 

Also he is slightly arogant hence the insulting, and lazy due to the odd shoes and late sleep in.

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Indeed' date=' i may if possible and if you will let me, want to include your Cyber-Space monsters in it at a point.

 

Section 1 stays in 1 dimension then in section 2 it travels through many so i will need all kinds of Cards to make this Fan-Fic work

 

^_^

 

And in all honesty this Fan-Fic is more realistic, my other one was about to go down the road of talking insects, mutant insects, a planet of insects, alien insects, warp holes, talking gremlins, talking trees, moving trees, morphing cards, restless shadows and running beans lol

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Right. I'm in the process of making Spells and Traps. When I am finished I will PM you the entire card list and include some strategys (can't spell it)

 

as for your other Fan fic, wuz the alien insects your Insectoids?

and were the running beans Joshua's?

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If I had judged a book by it's opening chapters, I would never had read Fellowship of the Ring. But now, I have. And what I said was just for this chapter, not the entire story. And the grammar errors I noticed? Common ones that anyone can do. (Your instead of you're, etc.) I do them on a regular basis, but people like my fan-fics either way.

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Hehe thanx ^_^

 

My Fan-Fics always have a driven point to reach, like this Fan-Fic ive decided to split into sections, which are like Mini seasons, each Section will focus on something different, and luckly when this Fan-Fic reaches section 2 it doesnt have a focused storyline so i can write about anything and not one driven plot, which is easier and more flexable.

 

^_^

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