Planetary Sea-serpent: Neptune (part of an archetype just havent thought much up yet)

[one-eyed fiend]

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Lore:Cannot be normal summoned/set. This card can only be special summoned (From your hand) by removing from play one "Planetary" monster from your graveyard.

 

 

The premise behind the beginnings of my "planetary" archetype is mostly to create strong xyz/synchros while having a number of balanced/able to handle themselves effect monsters, spells and traps.

 

 

This guy, in particular, goes along with the majority of my Planetary monsters, whom most of are level 9, to get out these big level 11 Planetary Synchs.

[magemeek22]

Fixed OCG:

Cannot be Normal summoned/Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by its own effect. You can banish one "Planetary" monster from your Graveyard; Special Summon this card.

 

I mean, it's hard to judge sans the rest of your archetype, but from a glance, it seems decent. However, the stats seem a little too high for an insta-Summon tuner. I'd tune down the DEF a lot, maybe to around 700. Either way, I can't say much else without the rest of the archetype. If you proc special effects by banishing Planetary monsters, this card might need a limitation.

 

Also, just to be clear, it can't be SS'ed from the Graveyard? Because if it can, you need to change the effect phrasing to:

Cannot be Normal summoned/Set. Must first be Special Summoned by banishing one "Planetary" monster from your Graveyard.

 

I would disencourage you from posting archetype cards without giving detail about the archetype. (sorry, don't want to sound harsh. it's just not much to review)

[one-eyed fiend]

Fixed OCG:

Cannot be Normal summoned/Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by its own effect. You can banish one "Planetary" monster from your Graveyard; Special Summon this card.

 

I mean, it's hard to judge sans the rest of your archetype, but from a glance, it seems decent. However, the stats seem a little too high for an insta-Summon tuner. I'd tune down the DEF a lot, maybe to around 700. Either way, I can't say much else without the rest of the archetype. If you proc special effects by banishing Planetary monsters, this card might need a limitation.

 

Also, just to be clear, it can't be SS'ed from the Graveyard? Because if it can, you need to change the effect phrasing to:

Cannot be Normal summoned/Set. Must first be Special Summoned by banishing one "Planetary" monster from your Graveyard.

 

I would disencourage you from posting archetype cards without giving detail about the archetype. (sorry, don't want to sound harsh. it's just not much to review)

No worries, no worries, it just a skeleton of what i want it to be right now, so any CnC is much appreciated. Also, yes it can only be SS'd from your hand in order to stop abuse of Synching like one billion plus times a turn. Last thing, the archetype will be built around banishing and quick summoning, so as far as its' banishing effect, i could tone it down.

 

 

Edit: Oh, and i think ill tone down the atk to around 500 with the defense staying more at 1200, since most of this archetype would deal with only using Neptune's effect to instantly synch. How does that sound?

[magemeek22]

The ATK/DEF change sounds good.

 

Also, I like to see that you did think this card through enough to the point that the design you set forth works with your archetype but isn't exploitable. Good on you. Don't tone down the banishing, then. It'll probably be fine as is. Just change the OCG to what I typed first, and tone down the ATK/DEF.

[Trebuchet MS]

Fixed OCG:

Cannot be Normal summoned/Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by its own effect. You can banish one "Planetary" monster from your Graveyard; Special Summon this card.

I presume this card is an inherent Summon effect - one that doesn't start a Chain, akin to Cyber Dragon or most Nomis. The OCG would read like this:

Cannot be Normal Summoned/Set. This card cannot Must be Special Summoned (from your hand) except by its own effect. You can banishing 1 "Planetary" monster from your Graveyard; Special Summon this card and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways.

That said, once the rest of the archetype gets fleshed out, it'd be best to pool all of them under a single thread in the Multiple Cards section so that we can review the archetype as a whole. Right now, nothing much to say since we don't know about the rest of the archetype members.

 

Oh, and "Sea Serpent", not "Sea-serpent".

[one-eyed fiend]

I presume this card is an inherent Summon effect - one that doesn't start a Chain, akin to Cyber Dragon or most Nomis. The OCG would read like this:

That said, once the rest of the archetype gets fleshed out, it'd be best to pool all of them under a single thread in the Multiple Cards section so that we can review the archetype as a whole. Right now, nothing much to say since we don't know about the rest of the archetype members.

 

Oh, and "Sea Serpent", not "Sea-serpent".

Yeah, its an inherent summon.

 

Derp at the Sea Serpent thing, i always thought the type read like that.