Guest JoshIcy Posted April 16, 2008 Report Share Posted April 16, 2008 Under the shade of blue,I walk in comfort,Hidden from the rest,But open to all,My thoughts unrelenting,My mind absolute,I stand in confusion,Lacking that something,That I once wished I had,Now away from that I wish,I coast and shy,Deserted mind,I fill its gaps,With games for many,And goals to none,I be shy and stray,Personal and distance,There is no way,To bring this wish,Back to the blue,I weep and tear,Hoping for that wish,To come back to me,My heart so still,It is content,Accepting its fate,Until to the corner,Catches its eye,It pumps and feels,Not knowing why or how,Not seeing its object,Just a faint glimpse,It ponders and thinks,Not knowing of,Not knowing why,What is this I ask,~-----~Maybe it could be,For now I have lost,The drive no more,I sit in blue hoping for more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frlf Posted April 16, 2008 Report Share Posted April 16, 2008 8/10! its ncie ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted April 16, 2008 Report Share Posted April 16, 2008 i wasnt really expecting to be rated like that lol, but ty Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RiffMaster Alex Posted April 17, 2008 Report Share Posted April 17, 2008 Very deep. It really reflects events in a soothing, dark way...9/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted April 17, 2008 Report Share Posted April 17, 2008 As always, your poem calms my nerve...very nice...uniquely written Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silencerleader Posted April 17, 2008 Report Share Posted April 17, 2008 8/10...*snaps finger* (like in a place where people recite poems) Bravo... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ITI3L33 Posted April 17, 2008 Report Share Posted April 17, 2008 It is nice and all smooth(My opinion). I like it! ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted April 17, 2008 Report Share Posted April 17, 2008 Thanks everyone ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Glorious eXcess Posted April 17, 2008 Report Share Posted April 17, 2008 very deep. I'm the poetry picky-man, so. You should be honored that someone that does sonnets in his sleep aknowledges you. >.< don't actually think I know what I'm typing. I'm half asleep myself, writing an epic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted April 17, 2008 Report Share Posted April 17, 2008 lol, and for those reading... This Poem is About Me.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parting Shot Posted April 17, 2008 Report Share Posted April 17, 2008 It's very good. The depth of the meaning and images really pulls the reader in and makes them feel the emotion of the narrator. Very well done icy! ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted April 17, 2008 Report Share Posted April 17, 2008 lol, if you notice your not supposed to use terms like "and, for, is, of"..... but i did it successfully lol ^_^. and thanks browarod, i never actually read it till you said that >.> and it does pull you in XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Buffer Posted April 17, 2008 Report Share Posted April 17, 2008 it seems like somthing cloud would thinki like it very calming 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted April 17, 2008 Report Share Posted April 17, 2008 thanks Buffer ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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