[New Card] Serpent Warrior of Pain

[AL2X]

 

 

Effect:

This card can be special summoned to your opponent's field by tributing 1 monster they control. During either players' end phases, put 1 venomous counter on this card. When this card leaves the field, the player that last controlled this card takes 500 damage times the number of venomous counters on this card.

 

This card can get rid of a powerful monster your opponent controls. Despite of a high attack, your opponent is damaged depending on how long this monster stayed on the field. 

[Kanashimi]

You should specify where the additional Special Summon came from (like say: "You can Special Summon this card (from your hand) to your opponent's side of the field, by Tributing 1 monster they control.")

 

Anyway about the card, feels like burn deck would love this, i mean comparing to Lava Golem:

> It has Kaiju removal, not stopping your summon compared to Lava Golem.

> Has lower ATK/DEF than Lava Golem, since you will give this to your opponent, why not? this card is better.

> But the damage delayed until it leaves the field, and the minus is if they use some kind of rank 5-ish deck which, they can use it as an Xyz Material and voila~ no damage taken. (Like Cydra deck and etc etc etc).

 

Still, i dont get why he's LIGHT, maybe EARTH or DARK or WATER would make more sense imo. And that Venomous Counter i thought it was Venom-related monster (turns out Venom monster use Venom Counter instead of Venomous Counter, which is different things to begin with). Or is it supposed to be Venom-archetype related?

 

Overall a fine card if you ask me, tho not a fan of Kaiju-ish summon-removal myself.

[AL2X]

I will edit the cards lore if it needs to have some more clarity on the effect of the card.

 

about being light? i just based it on the image .. he looks like he has golden scales :)

 

Hmm. its not a venom-archetype related card.

[Caláin]

I will edit the cards lore if it needs to have some more clarity on the effect of the card.

 

about being light? i just based it on the image .. he looks like he has golden scales :)

 

Hmm. its not a venom-archetype related card.

 

 

Then, you should maybe look for a name for your counters that's more different from theirs (like Poison Counters, Toxin Counters or whatever, maybe even Pain Counters, referring to the card's name…). Anyhow, you could also keep yours, but I suggest choosing a different name. I can understand you made him LIGHT; to me he looks like he's protecting some kind of temple. Apart from that, I really don't have much to add. Card looks useful and well-balanced to me.