B.E.S. SHNNNG

[NecroLordX]

LIGHT / Machine / Xyz

Rank: 6

ATK/DEF: 3000/2800

Effect: 2 level 6 Machine-Type monsters. ♥ This card cannot be destroyed by battle while it has counters. ♥ When this card is Xyz Summoned, place 3 counters on it. ♥ Once per turn, you can remove 1 counter from this card; Special Summon 1 "B.E.S." monster or "Big Core" from your Deck. ♥ If "Great Fortress Zelos" would be destroyed by your opponent's card effect: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card instead. ♥ During either player's turn: You can destroy this card, and if you do, Inflict 1500 damage to your opponent, then during this turn's End Phase: You can Special Summon 1 "B.E.S." monster or "Big Core" from your Deck, after that all monsters your opponent controls lose ATK and DEF equal to the Summoned Monster's level x 300. You can only activate this effect of "B.E.S. SHNNNG" once per turn. 

[Darj]

The name doesn't look serious unless it is an actual Gradius reference. And the card is too strong for its requirements IMO. To begin with, I'm reading 5 different effects there, and that simply is too much for a single card. Then, the damage-dealing capabilities of this card are outrageous. Some effects definitely feel like an overkill, such as the 1500 burn and the ATK/DEF reduction on the opponent's monsters. I suggest to scrap said ATK/DEF reduction effect, and maybe tone down the burn to 1000 or so.

 

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2 level 6 Machine-Type monsters

This card cannot be destroyed by battle while it has counters. When this card is Xyz Summoned: Place 3 counters on it. Once per turn: You can remove 1 counter from this card; Special Summon 1 "B.E.S." monster or "Big Core" from your Deck. During either player's turn: You can destroy this card; inflict 1500 damage to your opponent, then, during the End Phase of this turn, you can Special Summon 1 "B.E.S." monster or "Big Core" from your Deck, also, after that, all monsters your opponent controls lose ATK and DEF equal to the Summoned Monster's level x 300. You can only activate this effect of "B.E.S. SHNNNG" once per turn. If "Great Fortress Zelos" would be destroyed by your opponent's card effect, you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card instead.