"Quadrale, Bestial Lord of Chaos": Rank 4 Toolbox BOSS MONSTER

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Yeah I don't think Konami would ever make a card like this IRL because of how it would wreck this game, but then again so will Donald Trump
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Effect:
4  Level 4 monsters with different names
You can also Xyz Summon this card by using 4  face-up Rank 4 Xyz Monsters you control with different names as the Xyz Material. (Xyz Materials attached those monsters also become Xyz Materials on this card.) Cannot be used as a Tribute or as Fusion, Synchro, or Xyz Material for a Summon. You cannot Special Summon monsters, except Level 4 monsters and Rank 4 Xyz Monsters but not by a Pendulum Summon. Once per turn, during the End Phase: Detach 4 Xyz Materials from this card unless you make this card lose 4000 ATK and DEF. You can only control 1 face-up "Quadrale, Bestial Lord of Chaos". While this card has both 1 Level 4 monster and 1 Rank 4 Xyz Monster as Xyz Material, it gains these effects.
* Unaffected by other card effects.
* Cannot be targeted for an attack.
* This card can attack your opponent directly, but if it does this way, other monsters you control cannot decalre an attack during this turn.
* Once per turn, during your Main Phase or your opponent's Battle Phase: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card; Special Summon 1 Rank 4 Xyz Monster from your Extra Deck, then attach a number of Level 4 monsters from your hand, field, and/or Main Deck to it equal to the number of its listed Xyz Materials. (This Special Summon is treated as an Xyz Summon.)

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There's a lot of problems with this design, so I'm just going to go at 'em one at a time.

 

First off, if the effect is so long that you can't read the text on the card itself, then it's way too long. Overall this design needs to be rethought and simplified, and especially you need to reconsider what niche you want this card to fill.

 

Second off, addressing the parts of the monster's effects themselves, the point of an alternate summoning condition (ala Zoodiacs) is so that it's actually easier to do than summoning it normally. Not only is the alternate summoning method harder to do than just summoning it normally, it's twice as expensive in card count at the least, and the gain for doing it in such a needlessly complex manner instead of using another card or effect to summon it (such as a Rank-Up effect) is seriously not worth it. Nobody would ever summon it this way, because especially if you have 4 Rank 4 monsters out, you've probably won anyways.

 

The xenophobia condition of not being able to be used as a material for summons is completely pointless, besides "Oh but the opponent can't use cost-as-removal on this card!" First off, every boss should have a weakness, and a fairly accessible one at that. It's just a matter of good design for making sure your card is both fun to play and play against. The extra xenophobia clause of not being able to summon other monsters is equally pointless, considering that if you summoned this by any practical means, you're either very lucky or out of cards completely.

 

The detach-4 effect is partially what makes this card practically never worth it to summon. Not only is the alternate means of summoning this card practically impossible in a regular duel against even an average opponent (you're going past Armityle levels of difficulty for almost no additional benefits), summoning it otherwise with more practical means will just mean you either need to win that turn, or it's a 0/0 jobber on the next. This just makes it not worth it to go into.

 

Finally, considering the clustercuss of effects slapped onto it as a means to make it that "SUPER INVINCIBLE UNSTOPPABLE BOSS", there's nothing to this card that makes me want to run it over something like Number 86, or really just using my Rank 4 monsters to win normally. This card tries to fit a niche, but does it terribly. As far as design goes, the area of "a super OP unstoppable boss that's next to impossible to summon" isn't good design, and just makes a card that nobody's going to want to play with outside of those achievement hunters that want to do it for bragging rights.

 

This card just isn't good, and needs to go back to the drawing board. Don't try to make a card like this that has no holes in its defenses, and work to really define what niche you want this card to fill, and why someone is going to want to run it.

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Yeah I just got back to doing yugioh cardmaker after 10 years away from it and went a little nuts, but thanks for the feedback