Jin Kisaragi

[The fan of Seto and Kisara]

 

 

Name:Jin Kisaragi,Hero of Ikaruga,The power of Order

Attribute:Water

Level:8

Type:Warrior,Effect

ATK/DEF:2600/2400

-Card Effect-

When this card destroys a monster,put 1 spell counter on it(max 5),for each spell counter this card gains 500 ATK

Once per turn you could activate one of the following effects:

1.Remove one spell counter from this card,chose one monster your opponent controls,that monster can't attack until the end of your opponent turn

2.Remove 2 spell counters from this card,and summon 2 level 4 or less water monsters from your hand or graveyard,this monsters are destroyed at the end of your turn

3.Remove 3 spell counters from this card,destroy one spell/trap card your opponent controls

4.Remove 4 spell counters from this card,all water monsters on your field gain 500 ATK and can attack twice at the same battle phase,if you activate this effect you couldn't normal summon monsters until the end of your turn

5.Remove 5 spell counters from this card,your opponent skips his turn

If this card is destroyed in battle.then you could summon 2 level 6 or less monsters from your hand,deck or graveyard

 

i know that card is a bit(or not a bit)op,especially the 5th effect

[Eshai]

Typically, if the text is that small, then the card is doing too much.

 

For starter, you could shorten it by adding "You can remove any numbe of Spell Counters from this card to activate the corresponding effect" and then number off the effects similar to Gateway of the Six does.

 

I would switch 2 and 3, since 2 seems a lot better than 3.

 

I would remove the 4 and 5 ability from this card. 4 isnt nessecary nor is it improving the card much, and 5 is straight up broken.

 

I also recommend making the last effect only from your Deck rather than the utility of hand and GY.

 

There are also several OCGrammar issues, but there's a post on Advanced Card Design to help you with that.

[The fan of Seto and Kisara]

-Card Effect(version 2)-

When this card destroys a monster,put 1 spell counter on it(max 5),for each spell counter this card gains 500 ATK

You can remove any number of Spell Counters from this card to activate the corresponding effect:

1.Remove one spell counter from this card,chose one monster your opponent controls,that monster can't attack until the end of your opponent turn

2.Remove 2 spell counters from this card,destroy one spell/trap card your opponent controls

3.Remove 3 spell counters from this card,and summon 2 level 4 or less water monsters from your hand or graveyard,this monsters is destroyed at the end of your turn

If this card is destroyed in battle.then you could summon 2 level 6 or less monsters from your deck