liverpool rule Posted April 26, 2008 Report Share Posted April 26, 2008 this one is better than the last one here is the first Chocolate Milk shakes I look at it looks weird and yummyThat would fit well in my tummyHow I really want to swallow itI would love to drink it now but I think I will drink it bit by bitOh I love chocolate milk shake I am going to do one about mars bars later ( thanks to kizzi for the idea) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arekku_Koro Posted April 26, 2008 Report Share Posted April 26, 2008 ....What? Milkshakes? Okay, whatever. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
liverpool rule Posted April 26, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 26, 2008 do u think it was better than last times poem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kizzi Posted April 26, 2008 Report Share Posted April 26, 2008 4th line is really out of place. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
liverpool rule Posted April 26, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 26, 2008 ok so shall I change it to I will swallow and enjoy it bit by bit Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted April 27, 2008 Report Share Posted April 27, 2008 it's a rather good (above average) poem you got there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slash Posted April 27, 2008 Report Share Posted April 27, 2008 Ya I liked it ^.^ Good Job Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
liverpool rule Posted April 27, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 27, 2008 thank you mars bars will come on here later Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted April 27, 2008 Report Share Posted April 27, 2008 Umm, odd mental images...EDIT: 1000th post! YES! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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