Kill Now, For Elysium Awaits! A Poem by Lord Davok (Torchman)

[Davok]

A poem by Lord Davok (Torchman)

Kill Now, For Elysium Awaits!

 

The nameless Apocalypse has gone near,

and closer, closer it shall come,

when everything ends, it shall begin new,

and all shall be Paradise,

no life, no interruptions, nothing but perfection,

the darkness shall turn to light,

the burning shall sprout new flowers,

The nameless Apocalypse shall come near,

why fight it, why fight Paradise?

It all matters, my ultimate goal,

to end all under the burning fire,

Kill Now, For Elysium awaits!

[Umbra]

When I first read the title, I thought it said "Kill Davok". But that's just because I read it too fast.

 

The poem itself: Too many commas. Put a period after every second line. Also;

the burning() shall sprout new flowers

Missed a word here? (I would suggest "ground" or "soil")