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Sorry for the long wait guys I hope this chapter is well worth the wait...

 

Chapter 25

Room#2 Dragon Action.

 

(In the next room another Hyper Rider was talking with a kid he at least 16 and his voice appeared to be R.X)

 

R.X: Ok you know what I want you to do right?

 

 

???:Yeah get rid of those Duelist that are heading our way.

 

 

R.X: Good now I since them coming.

 

 

(Suddenly a door busted open and Travis and his gang appeared).

 

 

Genny: Whoa R.X is that you? It's been a while since we saw you.

 

 

R.X: Hey guys Ready to die?!

 

 

Genny: What?!

 

 

R.X Alright Dragonove lets go get them.

 

 

(The Man steeped out of the shadow and he had on green armor and a dragon for a head!)

 

 

Travis: whoa that a freaky head!

 

 

Dragonove: You stop talking about my head. It just a side effect.

 

 

Travis: How did your head become like that? what side effect

 

 

Dragonove: It's not your problem so don't worry about it! Duel me Travis Now Or I'll destroy your friend here!

 

 

Travis: Don't you touch him!

 

 

(Travis activated his duel disk and so did Dragonove).

 

 

Travis and Dragonove:Duel!

 

 

T:4000

D:4000

 

 

Dragonove: i'll begin... lets go Element Dragon!

 

 

Element Dragon 1500 ATK.

 

 

dragonove: now i play 1 face-down...your turn.

 

 

Travis: okay here i go draw! i play my E-dragon elenagic! come on out!!!

 

 

E-Dragon Elenagic 1550 ATK.

 

 

travis: now my elenagic destroys your element dragon cuzz' of his ability!!!

 

 

(monster destroyed).

 

 

dragonove: i now activate my face down called "disruption of the dragon" this trap keeps you from attacking with your

E-Dragon Elenagic anytime in the duel for now on since it destroy my dragon... block 1.

 

 

Travis:i can't attack any more because of more... that sucks.

 

 

genny: whats does he mean block one?

 

 

dragonove you will soon see. are u done my dragon dueling friend?

 

 

travis: i play 2 face-downs. your move.

 

 

dragonove: i summon hunter dragon!

 

 

hunter dragon 1700 atk.

 

 

dragonove-i now play my graceful dice spell card. now let the dice roll!!!

 

 

(The dice rolled and rolled until it stopped on the number 3).

 

 

dragonove: now my monster gains 300 attack points!

 

 

hunter dragon 2000 ATK.

 

 

dragonove i now play a spell "release and restraint".

 

 

itsuki: whats that? i never heard of it?

 

dragonove: this card keeps you from only attacking once a turn unless you sacrifice a monster from your hand or field. so now i attack with hunter dragon destroy elenagic!!!

 

 

(monster destroy).

 

 

T:3550

 

 

travis: man now i can hardly attack.

 

 

dragonove: now i play card of sainity.Now we both draw till we have 6 cards in our hands.

 

 

(they drew their cards).

 

 

Dragonove: now i play 2 face-downs.you take your move.

 

 

hunter dragon 1700 ATK.

 

 

travis: alright i draw! i now summon E-Dragon Huntoro!

 

 

E-Dragon Huntoro 1900 ATK.

 

 

Travis: now i play E dragon seal! this grants my E-dragons 700 ATK points!!!

 

 

E-dragon huntoro 2600 ATK.

 

 

Genny: hey look how at that power difference!

 

 

yukiko: it is quite strong. but don't count him out yet.

 

 

Genny: why are you defending him in this duel!? we are the good guys remember?

 

 

yukiko: yeah i just don't want him to be cocky.

 

 

genny- thats questionable?

 

 

Travis- um guys i am dueling i can use the support. Now i am going to attack with huntoro!! destroy hunter dragon!!!

 

 

(monster destroyed)

 

 

D:3100

 

 

Dragonove: i activate my face down know as "damage double". this card deals u either double the damage of which u just dealt me or u lose your entire hand and all cards on your field are destroyed. your choice...

 

 

Travis-(thinking) okay i can take 1800 points or lose my hand which contains, levacora and leveler releases so i can make levacora a level 6 monster. i think i can defeat him if get levacora on the field. so i am taking the damage.

 

 

Ray- i think he should destroy everything on his field and hand if u ask me.

 

 

Kai: no he should take the damage. he may need to use the cards in his hand.

 

 

Genny: well it's his choice not ours choice it's his...(thinking) he better take the damage.

 

 

Travis- i now accept the damage. i guess thats the best choice.

 

 

Dragonove- well this is good but now i activate a facedown card known as "liberty no more" this card takes your choice away from that card and now you must take bothe the effects!!!

 

 

Travis- WHAT!!!!!!!!!!

 

 

Genny: whoa he is kicking ass in that game!!!

 

 

yukiko:now what side are you on my friend!?

 

 

Genny: my brothers i was just stateing a fact right now.

 

 

yukiko-"thats quesionable".

 

 

genny: whatever

 

 

T:1750

 

 

(travis discarded his hand relutantly and all cards on his field were destroyed).

 

 

travis- my hand, my field you destroyed it i cannot believe it.

 

 

dragonove- that had gave me a bad feeling about your hand,and it turns out my instincts were correct.

 

 

travis- oh can it! i end my turn...(thinking) well at least that spell that was sent to the graveyard will keep him from hurting me...much

 

 

dragonove- draw! i summon collosium dragon-lexus.

 

 

collosium dragon-lexus 900 ATK.

 

 

dragonove- now you have entered the collosium of doom now young man and i am about to show you the true power of these dragons. i play collosium of the dragons! this allows me to summon 2 monsters per turn from here on out!

 

 

travis-what!!! this is rediculous!!!

 

 

kai- he is just eating and eating defeat so far!

 

 

itsuki- come on guys don't count him out yet!

 

 

dragonove- i now sacrifice my lexus to summon a hell of a dragon! lets go collosium dragon aralon!!!

 

 

(a snow white dragon with a very boney structure and build hit the field)

 

 

Collosium Dragon Aralon 3200 ATK.

 

 

Travis- oh my god that is a rediculous monster!!! i've never seen anything like it!

 

 

Dragonove- good so you will not be expecting it's effect which will end the duel... he can't attack the turn it is summoned but u are dealt 1000 points of damage since it can't attack!

 

 

Travis- oh no ahh!!!

 

 

(the bones on the monster turned into shards and then shot at travis. he blocked his face and was knocked hard to the ground)

 

 

T-750

 

 

(inside travis's mind)

 

 

travis-(thinking) it's no use i can't win he too powerful! i thought i as strong but i guess i am not. i am done for.

 

 

???- you are not weak! how dare you call yourself not powerful!!! i guess i am going to have to knock some since into to you before i just give you my power. prepare yourself!

 

 

travis-whoa who are you,and where are you,and why are you in my mind!?

 

 

???- i'm your spirit and unfoutunaly you are my spirit controller.

 

 

(end chapter)

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chapter 26

the duel for control part 1

 

Travis- so you are a spirit inside me? you really expect me to believe that?

 

 

Spirit- well i would like you to believe it because i do not want you living in my space! i like to be alone. if you ever want to get out of here,which i hope you do, i would expect you to duel as if your life depends on it. well it kinda does as well.

 

 

Travis- what do you mean my life depends on it!?

 

 

Spirit-i mean that . if you do not beat me in this duel you will forever wonder in your mind like a zombie to a person.

 

 

Travis- wait so i am not conscious and if i don’t win i am never going to wake up again!?

 

 

Spirit-basically...

 

 

Travis- okay so how am i going to duel without a deck or duel disk ?

 

 

Spirit- just imagine you have one of each. it is your mind for peaces sake.

 

 

(travis then concentrated really hard and his duel disk and deck appeared)

 

 

Travis-oh this is some freaking awesome! okay spirit lets go!!!

 

 

(He activated his duel disk and waited on the spirit)

 

 

Travis- okay....what are you doing? wheres your duel disk and deck?

 

 

Spirit- i don’t need a duel disk or deck. i just shout the name of my monster and it will appear on the field.

 

 

Travis- okay then... lets Duel!!!!

 

 

Spirit- yes lets get this over with.

 

 

S-4000

T-4000

 


Travis- let me start things off. I summon my E-dragon Anteria!

 

 

E-dragon Anteria 1650 ATK.

 

 

Travis- Now i play the spell E-dragon seal! this doozie of a card gives all “E-Dragon” a boost of 700 ATK points!

 

 

Spirit- not so impressive. i’ve seen you do a lot better.

 

 

Travis- what do you mean you have seen me do a lot better? how do you know anything about me.

 

 

Spirit- (annoyed gasp) I’m am inside of your soul!!! I know everything about you! Your name is Travis Landin, D.O.B april 12,1992. your life has always been very easy.you are a dueling prodigy. At the age of 3 you said your 1st word was “summon”. You live and breath dueling. you are the word dueling!!!

 

 

Travis- okay so you know me. can we just get back to the duel? my field spell now activates.

 

 

E-dragon Anteria 2350 ATK.

 

 

Travis- i end. now lets see your unique way of dueling.

 

 

Spirit-cards appeared.




(5 cards appeared in front of white figure).

 

 

Spirit- Monster summon. Dark requiem.

 

 

(A red abomination appeared).

 

 

dark requiem 1400 ATK.

 

 

Spirit- spell appear “dark ring of evil” okay Travis this spell is a field spell which destroys your E-Dragon seal & now i will show you the ability.

 

 

Travis- man this is a piece of crap. i just lost my field spell that i just played.

 

 

E-Dragon Anteria 1650 ATK.

 

 

Travis- Okay what else does it do?

 

 

Spirit- well if you must know it gives all dark monsters a 500 ATK point boost and when a dark attributed monster destroys a monster the damage you take will be added to my life points and you still take the damage. oh and 1 more thing. when i destroy a monster with any attribute except Dark you take damage equal to the monsters level time 300.

 

 

Travis- dude thats a hardcore card.

 

 

spirit- well thats how i play. now my Dark ring takes affect!

 

 

dark requiem 1900 ATK.

 

 

Spirit- now i attack your anteria with Dark Requiem. GO!!!

 

 

(monster destroyed).

 

 

T-3750

 

 

Spirit- now my rings 2nd ability takes place dealing you damage equal to your monsters level x 300 so you are accessed life point damage equal to 1200.

 

 

Travis- AHH!!!

 

 

T-2550

 

 

Spirit- now i gain points equal to my monsters Damage of which I just dealt you.

 

 

Travis- MAN THIS IS SOME BULL!!!’

 

 

S-5450

 

 

Travis-his points are off the charts now!!!

 

 

Spirit- now 1 face-down is played. Your turn.

 

 

Travis- okay i draw! i play E- Dragon Elenagic!

 

 

E-Dragon elenagic 1550 ATK.

 

 

Travis- now when Elenagic is normal summoned you lose 1 monster on your field so say bye to your dark requiem.

 

 

(The abomination turned to dust instantly)

 

 

Travis- now elenagic attacks you directly!

 

 

Spirit- okay that not very impressive... sorry.

 

 

S-3900

 

 

Spirit- okay i activate dark aura blast! this trap will affect your monster by taking away all it’s ATK points since it attack me directly.

 

 

E-Dragon Elenagic 0 ATK.

 

 

Travis- oh my god it’s easy prey now!!! i play 1 face- down to end my turn.

 

 

Spirit- Card Draw! i summon up demons spawn!

(A crowd of demons and monsters appeared and snarled at travis).

 

 

Demons spawn 500 ATK.

 

 

Demons spawn 1000 ATK.

 

 

Spirit- now you take damage to my attack! go demons spawn attack elenagic!

 

 

(The demons devoured the dragon)

 

 

Travis- man that a terrible site.

 

 

T- 1550

 

 

T-350

 

Travis- man now i am down low... this is bad i gotta turn this around and fast. he is winning and i cannot allow this any longer. i don’t want to be a prisoner in my own mind i gotta fight for my freedom. Lets go you...you know you never gave me your name, what is it ?

 

 

Spirit- you know you should not ask a gentleman his name it’s not polite.

 

 

Travis- your not a gentleman...your a spirit.

 

Spirit....very observant. i shall grant you my name before your defeat. my name is Aspen.




Travis- well Aspen i hope you like disappointment because i will not lose to you...because i have a will to fight and i shall carry on. so do your worst cuzz it is so on right now. LET DUEL!!!

 

 

(END Chapter)

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good continuation of this lovely fanfic...took me some time to recollect the whole thing, but now I am done...

 

Hope to see more form you in the future...and pelase don't stop midway and for like half a yr, one can lose track of time

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chapter 27

 

The Duel for control part II

 

Travis's field-

Nothing.

 

Aspen's field-

 

“dark ring of evil”

demon spawn 1000 ATK.

 

T-350

S-3900

 

Travis- it's my turn man. Draw!!! i play card of saininity! we now draw until we have 6 cards in our hands.

 

(Travis drew his cards while Aspen shouted the amount he needed to draw).

 

Travis- now i summon E-Dragon Sagi!

 

E-dragon sagi 1300 ATK.

 

Travis- Now i can activate my Sagi's ability he adds 1 field spell from my graveyard top my hand! I add my E-Dragon seal!

 

Aspen- oh give yourself a pat on the back.

 

Travis- oh shut up u Smart Ass! i play E-dragon seal now!!!

 

(The Seal of the E-Dragons appeared on the field destroying The other field).

 

travis- now my monsters gain some points. 700 ATK that is! and your mopnster loses it's boost!

 

E-Dragon Sagi- 2000 ATK.

 

Demon spawn 500 ATK.

 

Travis-Now this duel will turn in my favor. i play mystic wok! this card gives me lifepoints equal to one monsters attack points on the field. i choose sagi's!

 

T-2350

 

Travis- but next i play 2 face-downs. next we add a card known as Emergency Provisions. this card gives me points equal the amount of spells and traps i send to the graveyard times 1000. I send the 2 face-downs on my field to gain 2000 more lifepoints!

 

T-4350

 

Aspen-thoese are some nice power spells there.

 

Travis- yeah they come in handy sometimes.

 

Aspen-so continue your turn.

 

Travis-i will! i now will attack your demon spawn with sagi!!!

 

(The dragon released burning flames from it's mouth and blasted the demons).

 

A-2400

 

Travis-Yes! score for Travis! now i play pot of greed to draw 2 cards. next i play 1 morwe face-down. it's your move now.

 

Aspan- well,well looks like you just took the duel from me. i guess you are an okay duelist.

 

Travis- i am more then okay i am an great duelist!

 

Aspan- don't go running off at the mouth kid you still have to beat me in order to gain my powers. Draw Card.

 

(a virtual card appeared in front of the spirit)

 

Travis- you know you have to send a card to the graveyard since you have more then 6.

 

Aspan- i know and i am looking forward to it. Discard 3rd card from left.

 

(The virtual card disappeared)

 

Aspan- monster summoning demon shocker!

 

Demon shocker 1700 ATK.

 

Aspan- now i attack your Sagi!

 

Travis- what happened to your brains Aspan your monster will be destroyed! not that i care about it.

 

(The shocker sent out an electric spark that back fired to the monster again,destroying it.)

 

A-2100

 

Travis- what was the point of that attack?

 

Aspan- oh you will see soon. I play 2 face-downs. your move.

 

Travis- um...Draw! I sacrifice my Sagi to summon E-dragon octovio!

 

E-dragon octovio 2200.

 

Travis- now he benefits from the effect of e-dragon seal.

 

E-Dragon Octovio 2900 ATK.

 

Travis- now lets end this!

 

Aspan- oh no i'm sorry this is not happen. i activate demon glass spell! this allow me to send monsters with "Demon" in there name to the grave from my hand to prevent an attack from occuring on your field. so i will send 2 demon skull heads from my hand to the graveyard and mow your 2 monsters cannot attack this turn.

 

Travis-ugh... i end my move.

 

Aspan- Draw Card. I now play my ulitimate monster! i can now remove all monsters with demon in their name i have 5 in my graveyard!

 

Travis- but the 1st monster you summoned in the duel was that dark requium monster. he is not a demon monster.

 

Aspan-oh but i believe it Was you who said that when i have over 6 cards in my hand i must send a card to my graveyard. well that card i discarded was in fact a demon monster known as demon telepath. now i remove the 5 demons to special summon my Demon Rampart deadlocke!

 

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Demon Rampart Dreadlocke 2300 ATK.

 

Aspan- oh i love this card so much... and do you know why? because of it's effect.I will now declare an attack against your sagi.this card allows me to add 1 monster with demon in it's names ATK points to my demon rampart deadlocke ATK. i add 1 of my demon skull head ATK. his ATK points are equal to 1500 so now my deadlocke gains 1500 extra ATK points!

 

Demon Rampart Deadlocke 3800 ATK.

 

Travis-AHH! 3800 ATK!

 

Aspan-yes and he will attack your sagi now!

 

Travis-oh well the attack may go through but Octovio has an ability which reduces your monster attack points by 600 since it is not an E-Dragon.

 

Aspan- that may be true and all but your monsters ability cannot activate until after the battle phase on each of our turns.

 

Travis- oh no so now he can activate his effect on both his and my turn. this is very bad.

 

Aspan- now contiue the attack on his monster. GO DEAD FIST!

 

(The demon soldier attack the dragon and utterly obliterated it).

 

Travis- i activate my face-down spellcasters shield. this cuts the damage i take from your monster in half.

 

Aspan-ugh damn.

 

T-3450

 

Aspan- i am not done yet. when my demon rampart deadlocke inflicts damage on your life points you lose 200 lifepoints for every monster in your graveyard.

 

Travis- ahh! no E-dragon Anteria,E- Dragon Elenagic, E-Dragon sagi thats 3 so i lose 600.

 

(The fist of demon rampart deadlocke hit travis knocking him to the ground).

 

T-2850

 

Aspan- i now play 1 face-down and end my turn.

 

Demon rampart deadlocke 2300ATK.

 

Travis-I draw. i summon my E-dragon spenpare.

 

E-dragon spenpare 1950ATK

 

Travis- now the seal.

 

E-dragon spenpare 2650ATK.

 

Travis- now spenpare allows me to destroy a Monster on your field. just like elenagic.

 

Aspen- oh like it would be that easy. i activate the trap quick help! this lets me add and play a spell from my deck. I play the spell demon spector. this allow me to prevent the destruction of a demon monster on my field by removing a demon from my deck out of play. now from my deck i remove my level 7 demon advancer from my deck out of play.

 

Travis- hmm... i now play pot of greed to draw a couple. then i play a face-down now i end my turn.

 

aspan-now why did you not attack?

 

travis- why attack when you are only going to boost your lifepoints and make me lose lifepoints.

 

aspen- well you were thinking. very good.i now activate my deadlocke ability since i am going to attack your octovio. i send another demon skull head back to my deck. So now my monster gains another 1500 ATK points.

 

Demon rampart deadlocke 3800ATK.

 

Aspan- now i attack your octovio!

 

Travis- i got you now. I activate E-lance! this card lets me give up 150 life points to send all cards removed from the game back to the owners graveyard. since you have 4 monsters removed i give up 600 life points to end your combo! now your nothing after this turn!

 

Aspen-what but...how!?

 

Travis- you depended on that combo to much and thought thata it was fool proof. you never intenden on me having a card like this in my deck. so now your little combo is useless Aspen!

 

Aspen- well that was also a shock for me. i will still continue the attack on your octovio!

 

t-1950.

 

Aspen- now you take even more damage thanks to my deadlocks ability.

 

Travis-another 800. AHHH!!!

 

T-1150

 

Aspen now you may have thought that you have me again the ropes but no more. this card known as "demon religion" deals you damage equal to the amount of monsters sent back to my deck when they were removed from play by x 500. i also must pay 3000 life points in order to play this card. so i take 3000 and you take 2500.

(Out of the spell card came out dozens of dark rays. they striked both travis and Aspen. the blast sent both travis and aspan to their knees.

 

A-900

T-0000

 

Travis- No way i lost. My friend. I have to get out of here and help them i can't stay here in my own mind. no i won't

 

Aspen- it is true... what they said you are the one the world has been waiting on. you are the savist. i will happily battle along side of you to defeat the evil menace known as the Hyper Riders. What i said before about you not being worthy to have my power. i was wrong to the fullest.You are now a rightfully a Spirit controller now.

 

(A seal then appeared on travis's arm. a large shining light appeared and aspen joined travis in the light).

 

Travis & Aspen- By The Right of the spirit dimension i call upon the help of the spirit Aspen and the Controller Travis! NOW OUT THE SPIRIT WORLD COMES SPIRIT TEAM 1 TMEPA!

 

(The light then dissapeared and travis was standing. Aspen conjoined with Travis. travis's eyes were now silver and a mark appeared on his arm. it looked like an italic E. Travis duel disk was now a shimmering silver color. And his clothes were trimmed in silver).

 

Travis-oh yeah i really like this look...Aspen i have to get back to the human world and out of my mind. i gotta go defeat the hyper rider Dragonove.

 

Aspen... no you do not because another will has already defeated him.

 

Travis-OH... who has beaten him...

 

Aspen- your friend... R.X!

 

Travis- What are you serious!!!?

 

Aspen- yes... if you would like to see what is going on right this instant i can show you.

 

Travis- Please show me!

 

(A Shining screen appeared and showed travis what is happening)...

 

travis- OH my God...

 

(TO be continued).

 

(end chapter).

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Okay. I'm reviewing this chapter because I'm bored and this story seems popular. And I'm getting a lot of hate mail after this, aren't I...?

chapter 27

What? No capital letter in 'Chapter'? THAT'S not professional.

The Duel for control part II

Okay' date=' so you only use capitals EVERY NOW AND THEN. I UNDERSTAND NOW. I came in during the middle of a duel, so I won't talk about stuff I've already missed.[/color']

Travis's field-

Nothing.

 

Aspen's field-

 

“dark ring of evil”

demon spawn 1000 ATK.

Dude, you SUCK with capital letters!! Get wit it, yo!

T-350

S-3900

 

Travis- it's my turn man. Draw!!! i play card of saininity! we now draw until we have 6 cards in our hands.

Do you EVER use punctuation? HERE'S how this is SUPPOSED to look like(and I will never EVER accept script format).

"It's my turn, man. DRAW!!" Travis grasped his next card and swiped it from the deck. This HAS to be good... or else it's over. Travis told himself. He stared at his card and turned it to face Aspen. It was a card showing men dancing under a hail of gold coins! "I play Card of Sanctity! We now draw until we each have six cards in our hands."

And THAT'S how it's DONE, dude!

(Travis drew his cards while Aspen shouted the amount he needed to draw).

What lame stage direction.

Travis- now i summon E-Dragon Sagi!

 

E-dragon sagi 1300 ATK.

Either you need to tell us what it looks like, or you've already shown the other readers that. But what did it do as it appeared? Did it roar? Did it twist? Did it eat a burger? Your monsters are BORING!!

Travis- Now i can activate my Sagi's ability he adds 1 field spell from my graveyard top my hand! I add my E-Dragon seal!

Run-on sentence, much. And you really didn't pay any attention to your spelling, either.

Aspen- oh give yourself a pat on the back.

WHo SAYS that?

Travis- oh shut up u Smart Ass! i play E-dragon seal now!!!

Well, whenever I talk, I don't pronounce 'you' without an 'o'. So who's the smarty butt now?

(The Seal of the E-Dragons appeared on the field destroying The other field).

Use commas or die.

travis- now my monsters gain some points. 700 ATK that is! and your mopnster loses it's boost!

Mind my comment here, but 700 is a bit TOO much. Unless it makes them all 2000. I don't know.

E-Dragon Sagi- 2000 ATK.

 

Demon spawn 500 ATK.

 

Travis-Now this duel will turn in my favor. i play mystic wok! this card gives me lifepoints equal to one monsters attack points on the field. i choose sagi's!

WHY DO YOU NEVER SPELL 'I' CORRECTLY?! I MEAN, GOSH, IT'S SO EASY!! IT'S JUST 'I'! ONLY ONE FREAKING LETTER!! WHAT'S WRONG WITH YOU?

T-2350

 

Travis- but next i play 2 face-downs. next we add a card known as Emergency Provisions. this card gives me points equal the amount of spells and traps i send to the graveyard times 1000. I send the 2 face-downs on my field to gain 2000 more lifepoints!

You just used 'next' twice. That's dumb and lame-sounding.

T-4350

 

Aspen-thoese are some nice power spells there.

SPELL CHECK EVERYTHING YOU DO. I CAN'T TRUST YOU OTHERWISE.

Travis- yeah they come in handy sometimes.

 

Aspen-so continue your turn.

 

Travis-i will! i now will attack your demon spawn with sagi!!!

 

(The dragon released burning flames from it's mouth and blasted the demons).

 

A-2400

 

Travis-Yes! score for Travis! now i play pot of greed to draw 2 cards. next i play 1 morwe face-down. it's your move now.

Gosh, this guy sounds like a retarded monkey on a sugar rush. "YES! Score for Travis!!" Who would SAY such a thing?! He is now officially a nerd.

Aspan- well,well looks like you just took the duel from me. i guess you are an okay duelist.

Holy crap, you don't even spell Aspen's(or Aspan??)name correctly! How much time do you spend on this?!

Travis- i am more then okay i am an great duelist!

*Robotic voice*I AM MORE THAN OKAY I AM AN GREAT DUELIST. Your grammar and spelling suck eggs.

Aspan- don't go running off at the mouth kid you still have to beat me in order to gain my powers. Draw Card.

 

(a virtual card appeared in front of the spirit)

 

Travis- you know you have to send a card to the graveyard since you have more then 6.

You discard at the END of the turn. GET IT RIGHT. You JUST screwed up the ENTIRE chapter somehow!! Unless... they set up a RULE saying that in order to gain ultra-demonic powers you have to speak like a robot retard and discard at the beginning of your turns! Or at least that's what I understand by reading the latest chapter.

Aspan- i know and i am looking forward to it. Discard 3rd card from left.

 

(The virtual card disappeared)

 

Aspan- monster summoning demon shocker!

Monster summoning? Isn't it just 'I summon'? These guys ARE robot retards.

Demon shocker 1700 ATK.

Don't you capitalize ALL parts of names? Gosh, I can't believe I'm still not even halfway through with this crap.

Aspan- now i attack your Sagi!

 

Travis- what happened to your brains Aspan your monster will be destroyed! not that i care about it.

'What happened to your brains?!'

(The shocker sent out an electric spark that back fired to the monster again,destroying it.)

 

A-2100

 

Travis- what was the point of that attack?

 

Aspan- oh you will see soon. I play 2 face-downs. your move.

 

Travis- um...Draw! I sacrifice my Sagi to summon E-dragon octovio!

A capital letter in the middle of a sentence? That's a peda no-no.

E-dragon octovio 2200.

 

Travis- now he benefits from the effect of e-dragon seal.

 

E-Dragon Octovio 2900 ATK.

Uh, yeah, your field spell is too cheap. And that sucks.

Travis- now lets end this!

 

Aspan- oh no i'm sorry this is not happen. i activate demon glass spell! this allow me to send monsters with "Demon" in there name to the grave from my hand to prevent an attack from occuring on your field. so i will send 2 demon skull heads from my hand to the graveyard and mow your 2 monsters cannot attack this turn.

You really have a vendetta for capital letters. SEE HOW EASY THEY ARE TO MAKE? I'M HAVING SO MUCH FUN USING CAPITAL LETTERS! YOU SHOULD JOIN ME--BUT ONLY WHEN YOU USE THEM CORRECTLY! SEE, I'M SUPPOSED TO BE YELLING HERE, SO THAT MAKES IT GOOD.

Travis-ugh... i end my move.

 

Aspan- Draw Card. I now play my ulitimate monster! i can now remove all monsters with demon in their name i have 5 in my graveyard!

 

Travis- but the 1st monster you summoned in the duel was that dark requium monster. he is not a demon monster.

 

Aspan-oh but i believe it Was you who said that when i have over 6 cards in my hand i must send a card to my graveyard. well that card i discarded was in fact a demon monster known as demon telepath. now i remove the 5 demons to special summon my Demon Rampart deadlocke!

How obvious. I'm talking about the errors being everywhere, not the move.

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WE CAN'T READ THE ABILITY!! What, do you think we all have Superman eyes?

Demon Rampart Dreadlocke 2300 ATK.

 

Aspan- oh i love this card so much... and do you know why? because of it's effect.I will now declare an attack against your sagi.this card allows me to add 1 monster with demon in it's names ATK points to my demon rampart deadlocke ATK. i add 1 of my demon skull head ATK. his ATK points are equal to 1500 so now my deadlocke gains 1500 extra ATK points!

You're not clear. Period. Points of a monster removed from play? One in your hand? Any one in your deck? TELL US STUFF!! With proper grammar.

Demon Rampart Deadlocke 3800 ATK.

 

Travis-AHH! 3800 ATK!

AHH!! CRAPPY STORY!!

Aspan-yes and he will attack your sagi now!

STOP BEING A ROBOT!!

Travis-oh well the attack may go through but Octovio has an ability which reduces your monster attack points by 600 since it is not an E-Dragon.

 

Aspan- that may be true and all but your monsters ability cannot activate until after the battle phase on each of our turns.

 

Travis- oh no so now he can activate his effect on both his and my turn. this is very bad.

No offense, but he sounds like a guy from a Japanese 60's cartoon being shown in America. He uses no punctuation and he says such awkward things as:

"on both his and my turn."

"this is very bad."

Aspan- now contiue the attack on his monster. GO DEAD FIST!

 

(The demon soldier attack the dragon and utterly obliterated it).

 

Travis- i activate my face-down spellcasters shield. this cuts the damage i take from your monster in half.

 

Aspan-ugh damn.

 

T-3450

 

Aspan- i am not done yet. when my demon rampart deadlocke inflicts damage on your life points you lose 200 lifepoints for every monster in your graveyard.

 

Travis- ahh! no E-dragon Anteria,E- Dragon Elenagic, E-Dragon sagi thats 3 so i lose 600.

I REALLY hate these guys. They talk like... every other thing I've already compared them to combined. This is just hurting me.

(The fist of demon rampart deadlocke hit travis knocking him to the ground).

 

T-2850

 

Aspan- i now play 1 face-down and end my turn.

You never said Travis got up again.

Demon rampart deadlocke 2300ATK.

 

Travis-I draw. i summon my E-dragon spenpare.

WHAT DO THEY LOOK LIKE? HOW DO THEY MOVE?! THESE ARE SUCH STUPID CARDS!!

E-dragon spenpare 1950ATK

 

Travis- now the seal.

 

E-dragon spenpare 2650ATK.

 

Travis- now spenpare allows me to destroy a Monster on your field. just like elenagic.

 

Aspen- oh like it would be that easy. i activate the trap quick help! this lets me add and play a spell from my deck. I play the spell demon spector. this allow me to prevent the destruction of a demon monster on my field by removing a demon from my deck out of play. now from my deck i remove my level 7 demon advancer from my deck out of play.

Such a bad name and a broken card. Why not just use Smashing Ground?

Travis- hmm... i now play pot of greed to draw a couple. then i play a face-down now i end my turn.

Draw a couple sounds perverted.

aspan-now why did you not attack?

 

travis- why attack when you are only going to boost your lifepoints and make me lose lifepoints.

 

aspen- well you were thinking. very good.i now activate my deadlocke ability since i am going to attack your octovio. i send another demon skull head back to my deck. So now my monster gains another 1500 ATK points.

 

Demon rampart deadlocke 3800ATK.

 

Aspan- now i attack your octovio!

 

Travis- i got you now. I activate E-lance! this card lets me give up 150 life points to send all cards removed from the game back to the owners graveyard. since you have 4 monsters removed i give up 600 life points to end your combo! now your nothing after this turn!

Dude, did you write this after watching a few hours of the original 'Speed Racer' cartoons?

Aspen-what but...how!?

 

Travis- you depended on that combo to much and thought thata it was fool proof. you never intenden on me having a card like this in my deck. so now your little combo is useless Aspen!

 

Aspen- well that was also a shock for me. i will still continue the attack on your octovio!

Is this how you speak in real life? No. These guys sound too uncomfortable. Make them sound more like HUMANS!

t-1950.

 

Aspen- now you take even more damage thanks to my deadlocks ability.

 

Travis-another 800. AHHH!!!

Oh, I just got hit by a club in the face. OW!!

T-1150

 

Aspen now you may have thought that you have me again the ropes but no more. this card known as "demon religion" deals you damage equal to the amount of monsters sent back to my deck when they were removed from play by x 500. i also must pay 3000 life points in order to play this card. so i take 3000 and you take 2500.

(Out of the spell card came out dozens of dark rays. they striked both travis and Aspen. the blast sent both travis and aspan to their knees.

Well, that's such a lazy end to a poorly-written battle. Why don't you just use an "Instant Win" card, why don't 'ya? You gave us that indigestible chunk of text and then you just rip the bottom off of it. Way to go.

A-900

T-0000

 

Travis- No way i lost. My friend. I have to get out of here and help them i can't stay here in my own mind. no i won't

I'm just gonna stop talking about the dialogue.

Aspen- it is true... what they said you are the one the world has been waiting on. you are the savist. i will happily battle along side of you to defeat the evil menace known as the Hyper Riders. What i said before about you not being worthy to have my power. i was wrong to the fullest.You are now a rightfully a Spirit controller now.

Savist? Sounds pretty gay to me, that word there. And Hyper Riders gets the same insult. And if he just lost to this dude, then how does he get to be a(stereotypically named)Spirit Controller if he just lost to a guy? That doesn't prove he's tough, just that he can lose.

(A seal then appeared on travis's arm. a large shining light appeared and aspen joined travis in the light).

 

Travis & Aspen- By The Right of the spirit dimension i call upon the help of the spirit Aspen and the Controller Travis! NOW OUT THE SPIRIT WORLD COMES SPIRIT TEAM 1 TMEPA!

What...what the heck?! An over-the-top initiation sequence? That's hilarious!! It's like he's joining a kid's gang(with the best tree house in town, might I add!)!

(The light then dissapeared and travis was standing. Aspen conjoined with Travis. travis's eyes were now silver and a mark appeared on his arm. it looked like an italic E. Travis duel disk was now a shimmering silver color. And his clothes were trimmed in silver).

Travis ate him? Why did he just leap into Travis' body like that? Can't he be a controller WITHOUT having the other guy sacrificing himself? And why couldn't ASPEN have just done whatever Travis needed his powers for? And since when would your clothes change like that? Your plot is about as thick as snot.

Travis-oh yeah i really like this look...Aspen i have to get back to the human world and out of my mind. i gotta go defeat the hyper rider Dragonove.

Seriously man, this sounds so crazy! I have to EXIT MY MIND to go back home and KILL A HYPER RIDER? Is this really... Super Robot Monkey Team Hyper Force Go!!? Because they SOUND like they have the same plots.

Aspen... no you do not because another will has already defeated him.

I think I get it now. His psyche fused with him to give him a PHYSICAL boost. Huh? Can your brain give you a make-over in a flash of light? I don't understand... MAKE SENSE MORE!!

Travis-OH... who has beaten him...

 

Aspen- your friend... R.X!

 

Travis- What are you serious!!!?

Then what was the point of all that?

Aspen- yes... if you would like to see what is going on right this instant i can show you.

 

Travis- Please show me!

 

(A Shining screen appeared and showed travis what is happening)...

 

travis- OH my God...

OH my gosh, THIS looks SO awkWArd that i COULD just SCREAM and/OR throw uP.

(TO be continued).

 

(end chapter).

 

I don't understand. Scrolling through the first page you got several fans early on, but your terrible quality was still the same. I found it unreadable, practically, mostly because your guys can't speak correctly(but I still hate scripted format). Where's the charm? Compare this story to a real script and then learn from it. You'll be able to then properly convey the character's thoughts and actions less sluggishly and more entertainingly.

 

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