Careless Whisper Posted June 14, 2008 Report Share Posted June 14, 2008 I need you to comment on this skit that I wrote in the Great War RP' date=' and I found this too deep and awesome to let go of a comment chance._________________________________________________________________________________________ Ino-Koa stopped her spell, then turned to Meti, who was still sitting on the boulder, twiddling his thumbs now. He turned to face her."Do you think I should take a side? All this neutrality is getting rough, I never wanted any of this to happen." He said. And as he said it, he noticed for the first time in his life, exactly how lonely he was, not because he just sitting on a rock waiting for Xander to wake up, but because he hasn't had a friend during the entire 18 years of his life. He had lost the only one who had ever cared for him nearly 10 years ago. And he was starting to doubt whether it is such a good choice to return the dead to the living. He turned to her again."I am sorry, but I could save his life, not without an offering. And I know you will want to wish for his life, but that kind of wish is not available, for I cannot give life back to one who has lost it." She said, sadly but yet still calmly and musically."I see, so it's yet another one to loose. I lost my foster father, I lost my foster mother, I loose my entire home. And now I loose one of my best friends." Tears now ran down his eyes."You are not entirely lost, you still have one more wish." He heard her say, for he had burried his face into his own arms. Like a child who just lost his own parents that day. But he felt something strange, something he did not expect as he sensed that Ino had lifted her paw to put it on his shoulder. But it wasn't a paw that he felt, it was a gentile, warm, human hand. He opened his eyes and turned. Ino was not in wolf form anymore, she had transformed her own body, like he usually did into a wolf. She had changed to a person with such beauty and warmth. Her hair was silvery, and long, her eyes, so like his now, purple and vividly glowing the light of the moonlight. "You still have me." She said, with a more musical voice now than she had as a wolf. It nearly made him fall asleep, as she held him in her arms. But suddenly, an idea came to him, though he dreaded it for so long."What if I gave my own life to Xander. He can live, while I can see my home's-people again." He said, looking into her comforting eyes, so beautiful they were, yet he cannot bare the loss of his friend."Only if you wish it." She said again, in her musical voice."Then, I wish, for my life, to be transferred into Xander. But first, let me take a moment of reflection.""As you wish." She said, and backed away.Meti stood up, and walked to Xander's body, how peaceful it was, lying dead against the tree trunk. Meti's eyes were full of tears. He took a few minutes sitting there, staring into the blank, and asleep expression that Xander left to the world. How fitting, that he will soon switch places with him. And he knew what to do, as soon as he had gotten there. He stood up, and sank to his knees infront of Ino, who was still in her beautiful human form. His face was soaked in tears, and he croaked, "Do it." She stooped low to him, and hugged him, as he sat weeping in her arms. She then placed her hand on either side of his head and held it up, and kissed him. He closed his eyes, and as his last breathe left his body, he fell limp, peacefull, and calm. She let him fall, but gentily, onto the ground, she then turn into a wolf and walked over to Xander's body. Then, she howled. It was a howl like none the world has ever heard, the trees quaked, the wind rushed through the air like invisible bullets, and the lake of Artarius rippled. And Xander's body stirred with Life once more. She smiled at Xander, as she watched him open his eyes finally, leaving the world of the heavens.[/quote'] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Davok Posted June 14, 2008 Report Share Posted June 14, 2008 Very moving. I now wonder how the battle between Meti and Zero will turn out? :lol: But still, an extremely moving piece of writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ultimate Ryan Posted June 14, 2008 Report Share Posted June 14, 2008 Meti, that was buitiful!! So deep, I wish people at my school would be more like you and accept stuff like that I get taunted for believing in stuff like that, but it was buitiful 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RestLess-BoTics Posted June 14, 2008 Report Share Posted June 14, 2008 Absolutely incredible.You have so many talents.:) -Glasstin Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted June 15, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 15, 2008 Bump...Need more comments...plz. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cyber Altair Posted June 15, 2008 Report Share Posted June 15, 2008 i'm to bored to read it so someone explain it really short please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
commander mike Posted June 15, 2008 Report Share Posted June 15, 2008 nice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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