Guest JoshIcy Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 Constant shades, Emenating from you,Unsure of who you are,What you have become, Holding on by threads,Smaller by the day,Yet you continue,To search for who you are, That one voice,That horrifies you,Yet means so much,And brings you terror, Never spoken a word,Which brought happiness,But somehow relief,In the turmoil called home, In those words,You seek a goal,One that can write you,Instead of yourself, Continuing that goal,You see identity,Never realizing,That goal was who you are, Whispers of terror have gone,That goal along with it,Now your lost again,Without it to guide you..... I know I have bugs and plan to work them out. It is also incomplete atm, but enjoy it anyway ^_^. [spoiler=Alternate Version *working*]Waiting for that chance,To call you dad,I bask in your shadow,Just for that one chance, Yet your words,Your fist,Your Anger,Distilled hatred, Confused yourself,Lacking self,Resorting to anger,I sympathize for you, ..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
=aTaLiG= Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 pretty good...8/10...:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 pretty good...8/10...:)Lesson from the wise, never rate a poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodrun Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 im sorry Icy but im not feelin anything special on this one it just doesnt eminate anything =// Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 im sorry Icy but im not feelin anything special on this one it just doesnt eminate anything =// Yeah I kinda realized that... This is from a part of my past that I refuse to see clearly, and even that doesnt come out well in Poem form... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodrun Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 im sorry Icy but im not feelin anything special on this one it just doesnt eminate anything =// Yeah I kinda realized that... This is from a part of my past that I refuse to see clearly' date=' and even that doesnt come out well in Poem form...[/quote'] then dont write about what you refuse to seewrite about what blocks it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
digitaldreams Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 Awww,I love it Icy. But you're right it could use a little more =] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
=aTaLiG= Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 pretty nice...:)Lesson from the wise' date=' never rate a poem.[/quote']ohhh im so sorry then... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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