J-Max Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 I just wanted to write a small Poem about myself. It describes the hardships I have faced and remember all of you. There always is a light at the end of the tunnel. [align=center]Shackled to the Past I standUnlimited grief fills my handTo the past I set my GuiltWhere I stand my hopes shall wilt Many people say to meLittle one you can be strong so can weI faced them and began to yell"Yes only after I have been in Hell" The future lies for the bestMy life was just the very first testI stand to face the demons of my heartWhere do I go? Where do I start? As the demons came at meI suddenly began to seeThe hope of the future is ever so brightI now run towards that light.[/align]Thank you very Much.... I feel overwehelmed with sadness but I let it out.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodrun Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 a,a,b,b c,c,d,de,e,f,fc,c,g,g very nice poem Jspa =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-Max Posted July 16, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 Thanks Blood. Yeah I just noticed that :P I wanted every 2 lines to be different. lol No Probs. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parting Shot Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 ver = very in stanza 12? A sad poem indeed, but well-written nonetheless ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Willieh Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 Nice use of metaphors. I like it. Thank god someone put up a poem with a rhyme scheme :|. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodrun Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 Nice use of metaphors. I like it. Thank god someone put up a poem with a rhyme scheme :|. poetry is not reduced or refined to a rhymeactually, poetry has more meaning when its not restricted -.-" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-Max Posted July 16, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 It does. But I remember how I learned Poetry 4 Sets of 4 Lines. Thanks for the Feedback Guys. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Willieh Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 Nice use of metaphors. I like it. Thank god someone put up a poem with a rhyme scheme :|. poetry is not reduced or refined to a rhymeactually' date=' poetry has more meaning when its not restricted -.-"[/quote'] I like poems better when they do rhyme. Without a rhyme scheme I think it makes it not really a poem at all. But rather a collection of metaphors and meanings conducted into paragraph form. Rhyme schemes make it funner (if that's a word?). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted July 17, 2008 Report Share Posted July 17, 2008 Nice Poem. Hard to believe it's your first Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J-Max Posted July 17, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 17, 2008 That's sweet coming from you DH. Yep it really is mky first one. I was just sitting in front of my keyboard remembering my life and decided to try and put it into Words. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silencerleader Posted July 17, 2008 Report Share Posted July 17, 2008 Very tasty/10I like it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pikachu Posted July 17, 2008 Report Share Posted July 17, 2008 rhymes RHYMES YES! finally a poem with rhymes *cries* lolit's your first and best poem.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Death Metal Posted July 18, 2008 Report Share Posted July 18, 2008 Good poem, but wheres the killing? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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