Mr. Judgment Dragon Posted July 30, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 30, 2008 Thanks for reading Lazerman and Kyroid. +Reps coming ASAP. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skuldur Posted July 30, 2008 Report Share Posted July 30, 2008 i have a few comments on the story so far. the dialouge is too long, i mean you wrote 5 lines with just the same person talking in a row. you need to descripe the creatures and descripe the story more. maybe when he summons descripe the creature it doesn't have to be long just "I summon Snipe Hunter" says James, a Goblin like creature appears on the field. or something like that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Judgment Dragon Posted July 30, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 30, 2008 Thanks. I havent really had much time to edit since I wrote it. As for the rep, its coming. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sam Litch Posted July 30, 2008 Report Share Posted July 30, 2008 I like it, duel between Mark and James was pretty awesome... 9/10. I made a fan fic it would be great if you come check it out and rate it plz. Its name Omega Series. Keep it up and let me know when you post a new episode. Farewell Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inverted{Craze} Posted July 30, 2008 Report Share Posted July 30, 2008 Very Good.Please Continue.Now Wheres My Rep Lolz. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Judgment Dragon Posted July 30, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 30, 2008 Inverted{Craze}, your +Rep is coming as soon as I can rep again as I have already given as much rep as allowed for that day. Same with you Sam Litch. Your +Rep is coming as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted July 31, 2008 Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 The Episodes are a little short, to be quite Frank... But please, they have all that they need. Continue with it! You're doing fine just as it is! 8.7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Judgment Dragon Posted July 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 31, 2008 Thanks Purple Dinosaur. +Rep coming ASAP. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Judgment Dragon Posted August 1, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 1, 2008 BUMP. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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