bren_da_mage Posted August 22, 2008 Report Share Posted August 22, 2008 Yeah, it's my first try on cardmaking. Darkshine Series =Darkshine Monsters=[spoiler=Darkshine Warlord - Lunaris]When this card is removed from play from your deck by the effect of a "Darkshine" monster, Special Summon this card. Once per turn, by removing from play 1 card from the bottom of your Deck, place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. By removing 4 Darkshine Counters from this card, negate the activation of all Spell and Trap cards on the field for 2 turns, counting from your opponent's turn. [spoiler=Darkshine Swordsman - Valcrist]Once per turn, by removing from play 1 card from the bottom of your Deck, place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. By removing 3 Darkshine Counter on this card, remove from play 1 card on the field. [spoiler=Darkshine Princess - Helena]Once per turn, by removing from play 1 card from the bottom of your Deck, place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. By removing 3 Darkshine Counter from this card, destroy 2 Spell or Trap Cards controlled by your opponent. [spoiler=Darkshine Guardian - Gabrielle]Once per turn, by removing from play 1 card from the bottom of your Deck, place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. By removing 3 Darkshine Counter on this card, return 1 card on the field to the top of it's owner's deck. [spoiler=Darkshine Warrior - Argus]Once per turn by removing from play 1 card from the bottom of your Deck, place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. By removing 3 Darkshine Counter on this card, destroy 2 face-down cards on the field. [spoiler=Darkshine Assassin - Shirou]Once per turn, by removing from play 1 card from the bottom of your Deck, place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. By removing 3 Darkshine Counter on this card, destroy 1 monster on the field. [spoiler=Darkshine Huntress - Keeley]Once per turn, by removing from play 1 card from the bottom of your Deck, place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. By removing 3 Darkshine Counter on this card, randomly discard 1 card from your opponent's hand. [spoiler=Darkshine Scout - Marianne]Once per turn, you can place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. By removing from play 2 Darkshine Counters on this card, look at the top 2 cards of your opponent's deck. If the 2 cards have the same Card type, you can place 1 Darkshine Counter on 1 "Darkshine" monster you control, except this card. [spoiler=Darkshine Spy - Natalia]Once per turn, you can place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. By removing from play 2 Darkshine Counters on this card, select and see 2 cards on your opponent's hand. If the 2 cards have the same Card type, you can place 1 Darkshine Counter on 1 "Darkshine" monster you control, except this card. [spoiler=Darkshine Assistant - Melissa]You can Special Summon this card from your hand if you control at least 1 "Darkshine" monster. Once per turn, by removing 1 card from the bottom of your Deck from play, place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. If this card has 5 Darkshine Counters, remove this card from play. If this card is removed from play from the field, distribute the Darkshine Counters placed on this card among the "Darkshine" monsters on your side of the field. [spoiler=Darkshine Executioner - Zellius]If this card was removed from play by the effect of a "Darkshine" monster, Special Summon this card. Once per turn, by removing 1 card from the bottom of your Deck from play, place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. By removing 3 Darkshine Counters on this card, increase this card's ATK by 2000, until the End Phase. Any Battle Damage that this card inflicts is 0 when this effect is activated. [spoiler=Darkshine Commander - Randolf]If this card was removed from play by the effect of a "Darkshine" monster, Special Summon this card. Once per turn, by removing 1 card from the bottom of your Deck from play, place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. By removing 3 Darkshine Counters on this card, Increase the ATK of all Face-up "Darkshine" monsters you control by 200 for every Darkshine Counter placed on them, until the End Phase. Any Battle Damage that any "Darkshine" Monsters would inflict is halved when this effect is activated. [spoiler=Mirana - Goddess of Radiant Hope]This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play 2 "Darkshine" monsters from your Graveyard. Increase the ATK and DEF of this card by 1000 for each "Darkshine" monster you control. Each time a "Darkshine" monster you control is removed from the field, place Darkshine Counter on this card equal to the Level of the removed monster. For every Darkshine Counter placed on this card, increase your Life Points by 500. Remove 5 Darkshine Counters on this card to inflict the damage equal to the difference between your and your opponent's Life Points. When this card is activated, this card cannot attack. =Darkshine Spells=[spoiler=Darkshine Assault]You can only activate this card during your Main Phase 1, and only if you control at least 3 "Darkshine" monsters. Remove 7 Darkshine Counters on your side of the field to remove from play all cards on the field, except "Darkshine" monsters. Any Battle Damage inflicted by "Darkshine" monsters after this card's activation is halved. [spoiler=Desperate Measures]Increase the ATK and DEF of all "Darkshine" monsters you control by 300 for each Darkshine Counter placed on each card, until the End Phase. Remove all Darkshine Counters placed on all "Darkshine" monsters at the End Phase of the turn this card is activated. [spoiler=Darkshine Siege]Each time a "Darkshine" monster attacks or is attacked, place 1 Darkshine Counter on 1 "Darkshine" monster you control. You can only activate this effect twice per turn. [spoiler=Darkshine Soul Render]When this card is activated, you cannot activate any other card whose effect includes placing of Darkshine Counters. Select 1 Monster Card from your hand, field, or Graveyard and remove it from play. Place Darkshine Counters on "Darkshine" monsters you control equal to the Level of the removed Monster card. You can only place up to 2 Darkshine Counters per card. =Darkshine Traps=[spoiler=Fateful Encounter]Select 1 "Darkshine" monster you control. Whenever a monster is Summoned on your opponent's side of the field, place 1 Darkshine Counter on the selected card. When this card is removed from the field, remove all Darkshine Counters placed by this card's effect. [spoiler=Darkshine Comeback]You can only activate this card when a "Darkshine" monster with at least 2 Darkshine Counter is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard. Special Summon the destroyed card on the End Phase. [spoiler=Darkshine Spell Reinforcement Team]Remove 2 Darkshine Counters on your side of the field. Activate one of the following effects:· Select 1 Spell Card removed from play by the effect of 1 “Darkshine” monster and return it to your hand.· Negate the activation of 1 Spell Card that targets 1 “Darkshine” monster you control. [spoiler=Darkshine Trap Reinforcement Team]Remove 2 Darkshine Counters on your side of the field. Activate one of the following effects:· Select 1 Trap Card removed from play by the effect of 1 “Darkshine” monster and return it to your hand.· Negate the activation of 1 Trap that targets 1 “Darkshine” monster you control. [spoiler=Darkshine Hades Golem]This card can only be activated if you control at least 1 "Darkshine" monster. After activation, Special Summon this card in Defense Position; it is treated as an Effect Monster Card (Fiend-Type/LIGHT/Level 6/ATK 0/DEF 2300). Once per turn, you can select the target of 1 of your opponent's monster's attack to this card. If you do not control a "Darkshine" monster, destroy this card during the End Phase. …and a some sort of Special Card for the Darkshine Series… [spoiler=Diospada – Runelord of Chaos]This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play 3 "Darkshine" monsters you control. Once per turn, by removing 1 card from the bottom of your deck from play, place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card. Once per turn, during your Main Phase, remove 5 Darkshine Counters on this card to remove from play all cards on the field and on both player's hands. If this effect is activated, this card cannot attack. Disclaimer: I do not own the images that are used. Most of them are acquired from Cabal Online Wallpapers, Photobucket, and Deviant Art. Coming soon: Some more Darkshine-support cards. I'll work on Spells and Traps sooner. Updates:* Added 1 Monster Notes: Taking comments on anything. Tell me what you think about the images, effects, and/or grammar. I'm just a noob btw, so be a little kind. lol n_n jk Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Impact™ Posted August 22, 2008 Report Share Posted August 22, 2008 the pics are meh but the effects are cool 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheePowerful Posted August 22, 2008 Report Share Posted August 22, 2008 OCG needs work. And find better pics, even thoughthese are good, there really isn't a background. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bringer Of The Apocalypse Posted August 22, 2008 Report Share Posted August 22, 2008 Wow. For a n00b these are really good! (Maybe your not a n00b.) I will give you your first ever + rep!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bren_da_mage Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 Yeah...I really think the pics are bad, due to the background... how about the effects? They arent broken/trash, aren't they? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bren_da_mage Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 BUMP: Updated the BG and Effect Grammar (I hope I got it right this time.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spire Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 -Some OCG errors.-Ok pics. Spire's Rating: 7.5/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bren_da_mage Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 thanks for the rating. n_n still have a long way to go. Anyone cool enough to give OCG ratings?Are the effects overpowered/underpowered?Do you think images still need some touch? Help me develop these cards to perfection (or at least near-perfection lol) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zeppeli Gyro Supreme Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 These are errors I'll list off as I see them, and comments too. -"deck" should be "Deck"-The card sent from the Deck should be random or from the top, or you're risking setting up some huge combos with other cards not related to the series.-"Face-down" should just be "face-down"-"Monster" doesn't need to be capitalized, either. Unless it's saying something like "Fusion Monster", "Normal Monster", etc. Overall, OCG gets a 7 in my book. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bren_da_mage Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 Ok, what I had in mind was "Select 1 card from your deck and remove it from play", but since I'm not sure how to write it in OCG, I just "Remove from play 1 card from deck". Maybe that's a little broken... I'll make sure to edit these. Thanks, pal. BUMP! Updated! n_n Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☆ Master Sami ☆ Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 Cool pics, good effects, some OCG Overall: 9/10 [brilliant] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:|Fallen|:. Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 nedds better pics6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bren_da_mage Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 contradicting comments here eh? n_n how do you guys see the images, btw? is it to bright? is the image focus alright? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bren_da_mage Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 BUMP!!! Updated with 2 new cards! * Darkshine Warlord - Lunaris* Darkshine Siege BTW, another guy also created a Darkshine monster other than the ones I created. The card he created may be affected by Darkshine Siege's effect (unless, of course, he disagrees). Just to mention as a note for balancing Darkshine Siege's effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zeppeli Gyro Supreme Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 I think it should say "cannot attack during the turn this effect is activated", not when its effect is activated, because then you have to wait 3 turns to use their effect, and they can't attack. lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bren_da_mage Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 Just a sec, bro, I didn't quite get that. n_n Were you pertaining to the "This card cannot attack on the same turn that this card's effect is activated."? This effect refers to the activation of the second effect of that of that particular Darkshine Monster. Even if you activate the first effect (...place 1 Darkshine Counter on this card...), you can still perform an attack with that card. Hmm...is there something to fix with the ordering of the effects? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zeppeli Gyro Supreme Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 I know what you meant to do, but the way it's written makes it seem like it was meant for its effect in general. I don't know if I'm right or not. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bren_da_mage Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 Thanks for noting that out slayer_supreme. I'll look into the cards again, and see if the ordering of the effects should be changed... or if anyone could provide any help regarding this, it'll be very much appreciated! n_n Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Doctor Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 some excellent cards with some fab pics ^_^9.6/10 giving + rep[spoiler=I Think I'm Talking Off-Topic But...]On my comp it says Bringer Of The Apocalypse made the first post therefore starting the thread, but he didnt, Bren_Da_Mage did. Is anyone else having this problem? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 On my comp it says Bringer Of The Apocalypse made the first post therefore starting the thread' date=' but he didnt, Bren_Da_Mage did. Is anyone else having this problem?[/quote'] Having that same problem, don't know why. On-topic, the pics rock, and you worked hard on the effects. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
╬「Selatcia」╬ Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 I think the pics are good because the backgrounds relate to eachother that they're in a set.8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bren_da_mage Posted August 24, 2008 Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 I have been wondering about the same thing too, but since it doesn't make much trouble to be given attention, I just didn't mind...or is there some dangerous bug that eats cards? lol jk thanks for the rates! I'll work harder to maintain those grades. n_n Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bren_da_mage Posted August 24, 2008 Report Share Posted August 24, 2008 BUMPing for Updates. Updates:* Made some drastic changes on "Darkshine Warlord - Lunaris"* Added "Darkshine Assistant - Melissa"* Added 2 Spells and 2 Traps* Now we have a total of 8 Monsters, 3 Spells, and 2 Traps. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bren_da_mage Posted August 25, 2008 Report Share Posted August 25, 2008 sorry if I'm bumping this again...this might be the last time... Updates:* Made a few rewording (hopefully it goes well with the OCG).* Added 4 Monsters.* Added 2 Spells.* Added 4 Traps.* Also removed the "cannot attack" line on the first 6 Darkshine monsters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
i am L Posted August 25, 2008 Report Share Posted August 25, 2008 Looking at these cards is the equivalent of being shotin my "Kahm"!!! 99/10just for the record may i shine your shoes "Superior One"? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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