Benraino Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 This is a continuation of my last thread "I fail." I went to chem today early, hoping I was going to be able to talk to my ex. Well, I see her and she is crying. She says "Im Pregnant." I said "oh my god. How did this happen?(we never did it) She responded "In West Philadelphia, born and raised. On the playground is where I spent most. Chillin out, maxin, relaxin all cool, shootin some b-ball outside the school. When a couple of guys who were up to no good, starting making trouble in my neighborhood. I got in one little fight and my mom got scared. She said "Your moving with your auntie and uncle to bel-air." I begged and pleaded with her, day after day. She packed my suitcase and sent me on my way. She gave me a kiss and then she gave me a ticket, I put my walkman on and said "I might as well kick it." First class, yo, this is bad. Drinking orange juice out a champagne glass. Is this what the people of Bel-Air living like, Hmm, this might be all right. But wait, I hear they are prissy and bougioue and all that. Is this the type of place they'll send this cool cat. Man I dont think so, I'll see when I get there. Well, uh, the plane landed and when I came out, there was a dude looking like a cop standing with my name out. Im trying to get arrested, I just got here. I sprang like lightning and disappeared. I whistled for a cab and when it came near, the license said "fresh" and there were dice on the mirror. If I could say anything I would say this cab is rare. But I said "Ah forget, yo homes to Bel Air." I pulled up to the house about seven or eight, and I yelled to the cabbie, "Yo homes, smell ya later." I looked my kingdom, I was finally there, ready to sit on the throne as the king of Bel-Air. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucas Maximus Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 Congratulations. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skyfi Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 That Great :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Father Wolf Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 Now, this is a story all about howMy life got flipped-turned upside downAnd I liked to take a minuteJust sit right thereI'll tell you how I became the prince of a town called Bel Air Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Digital.Simplicity. Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 I love this write more ^_^. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cyber Altair Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 That was uninteresting and dumb. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larxene Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 Boring Plus you got the lyrics wrong You sir, fail Good day Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
「tea.leaf」 Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 No. Armageddon did significantly better than you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Poc Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 I see you took my advice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Black Rose Phoenix® Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 Quite frankly i find this a sham and an epic fail... You sir, do not have the true writers touch, it was totlay and uterly boring, i've written alot of things in my time, only 11 years, but sir you have issues!!Talk about boring the ass of someone, this is nothing personal, but if you never hear the unwanted truth, you will never learn and be able to get better, there are only obviously a few honest people on this forum, but some obviously aren't!! ~Good Day!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 Expected/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Black Rose Phoenix® Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 Again, i expected more, and thank you Crab Helmet, i forgot to post my rating...well from my previous post you should know...no offence, but i really do proepose some drastic changes...i really don't mean to be mean, so i'm just going to stop posting, cas i think you get the message...??[/collor] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benraino Posted October 10, 2008 Author Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 @Clair: I know I messed up some of the lyrics, I did it off the top of my head. @CardCreator444: I wrote this in like 1 minute. I can write pretty decent if I actually try. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bakura Vessal Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 Lulz. You rymed. That was slighty amusing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest KAJN Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 Bye my good sir. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Draco Straybyrn Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 No. Armageddon did significantly better than you. This. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larxene Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 [colo=#008000]Again' date=' i expected more, and thank you Crab Helmet, i forgot to post my rating...well from my previous post you should know...no offence, but i really do proepose some drastic changes...i really don't mean to be mean, so i'm just going to stop posting, cas i think you get the message...??[/collor'] Your horrible grammar used in an attempt to tell someone they fail makes me laugh Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skuldur Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 i just wish that i could get back those seconds it took me to read this Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Draco Straybyrn Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 Sage. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MarbleZone Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 So many witty members with witty posts in one thread. YCM's best indeed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nageki no Posted October 10, 2008 Report Share Posted October 10, 2008 The Fresh Prince...I did not expect this to happen. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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