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Star Wars - The Rise of the Republic. *Fan-Fic* (PG-13)

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The galactic prophets are the first of the entire galexy, relying upon a great power that they have come to call, the Force, a power that influences and drives the entire galaxy. Many have learned to controle the Force, but none have mastered it, until now.

 

Political leaders of these prophets have broken away from the power and started researching diplomacy, causing great anger and frustration within the hearts of the controlers of the Force. However, not all of these prophets have developed hatred against the now influencial polital leaders that are now underway in creating the first ever Galactic Republic.

 

Now even the prophets have broken into factions. A favoring group for the Republic Politics call themselves now, the Jedi, under the leadership of Master Vandar, a Jedi Master who's own master, Exar Kun, is now leading the hatred faction now called the Sith. Will the new Republic survive the first ever Great War?

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Chapter 1 :: The Rising Force ::

--The galaxy's center is metaphorically within the war between the two forces known as the Jedi and the Sith. This struggle has known to become known as the Great War.

--The Jedi are peacemakers of the galaxy, believing that the force can be used to aid allies in need of help, to guide those who cannot find the way, and grant harmony across space.

--The Sith, however, use the force for their own gain, using passion to give them strength, then power, which they belief will grant them victory. They believe that the Force would free them from the restrictable teachings of the Jedi.

--The first among the Sith, Exar Kun, has now welcomed his most prospected apprentice, and the first of many Sith Lords, Naga Sado, a prelate of the Force trained strictly upon the force to use it as his only weapon.

--Naga Sado has been given a task from his master to set out in search of Jedi to convert to the Sith, and for the first of his followers to become the first of the Darth Legacy.

--Naga Sado is now on route to Korriban, the homeworld of Exar Kun himself, where he is escorting a young hopeful by the name of Anomu Terricruz, a human from the mining facility of Paragus, and who Sado expects to be the first of Exar Kun's Darth Legacy.

--"You will show the utmost respect to Master Exar Kun," announced Sado as he addressed to Anomu, who stood at attention and keeping his eyes upon his host. "Much like the respect you are showing me now." He finaishes.

--"Yes, Master Sado." Anomu responded in quite an emotionless manner.

--The shuttle finally gives a shudder as the landing completed and the exit hatch opened, allowing the two men to proceed onto Korriban's desolate wasteland.

--Infront of the location in which they landed, a tall and deriving looking monument stood before them, dark and sandy looking and with an ominous feeling to come with as they stepped forward up it's steps. At the top, waiting for them, was the Sith Lord, Exar Kun, patiently staring down upon them as they ascended to him.

--When they finally reach his level, Anomu kneels down in respect to the great Sith Lord, but Exar raises his hand and calms out "Rise, I feel enough pleasure from 1 to bow to me." He said. and Anomu obeyed, now eyeing his new master.

--"I found this one on Paragus, I feel much potential in this one, my Lord." Sado gradually said as Exar Kun shifted his attention to something else.

--"Very well, follow me, and we shall see your proof." Exar responded after a long study of his surroundings, and he swiftly rounded and began to retreat into the temple, and Anomu and Naga Sado followed.

--They followed Exar Kun throughout the temple's winding halls until they entered a circular room with a round table in the direct center. Topping the table was a narrow and short rod style item. It looked machanical, and it stood vertically on its own.

Exar Kun rounded the table to stare curiously at the item, and to show respect, Anomu did not ask what the item was. However, Naga Sado did not show that curtousy.

--"I apologize for being rude, my master, but may I ask what such an item would be?" He asked, curiously eyeing the machinery as well.

--Exar Kun looked at his apprentice and merely stated, "This, my young apprentice, is a lightsaber. We have uncovered it from the burial grounds of my father, Prophet Paleos Kun. This weapon holds extroardinary power, and I believe that it the only one of its kind. This is the weapon in which the Darth Legacy shall be legendary masters of. So, in other words, your discovery here," Exar Kun indicated Anomu standing at attention, looking at the lightsaber hilt. "will be the first Sith to ever wield this weapon, once we figure out how to duplicate it."

--Anome became apprehensive at once. "Me? But, why me?" He questioned.

--"Because, you have shown your power to be far more intensified than anyone else. Now go, you must rest. Your weaponry training starts tomorrow. And then, once you are done with that, you will head down to the arena. To test your potential. If you impress me enough, I will dub you as the first of the Darth Legacy." Exar Kun ordered as he sent Anomu to his new quarters.

 

Chapter 2 :: The Legacy of the Lords.

 

--to be continued.

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hay this is cool maybe Lucas will stael this HA!

 

he won't steal it, Exar Kun not only created his own, which was a double sided lightsaber, he found it on a sith holocron, besides useful lightsabers were created in 15,550 BY and mordern ones were used in 4,800 BY, (BY is like BC in terms of time it is Before battle of Yavin and ABY is after battle of Yavin) and Exar Kun was born on 3,996 BBY, therefore it makes no sense that Exar Kun just found it, congratulations you discovered something that all Jedi's new about more than 804 years ago, its okay for this RP, but Lucas is smart enough not to make something that creates such a major plot hole

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i am merely stating that he won't copy it, your fan fic is more well written than most i have seen, and you have managed to create major suspense in chapter 1, a move that few people (including professionals) can do, you can probably make a lot of money as an author of short stories.

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