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My Golem is Finished


Tacobill123

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I give credit to the following ppl.

 

Name: Armadilloz

Effect & ATK/DEF: schattenwolf

 

During each Standby Phase, you can choose one of the following effects:

* This cards ATK becomes 3000. Once per turn, you can negate the effect of 1 Spell or Trap card which hinders monsters from attacking and destroy this Spell or Trap card.

* This cards DEF becomes 3000. Once per turn, you can negate 1 attack of a Monster Card and destroy the Monster Card.

* This cards ATK becomes 4000. By paying 1000 Life Points, this card can attack twice this turn. Destroy this card during the next End Phase.

* This cards DEF becomes 4000. Any Battle Damage your opponent takes when he/she attacks this card is doubled. Return this card to your hand during the next End Phase.

 

Possibly the Longest Effect in the world!!! lol

 

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I knew they'd come to life one day!

 

Anywho... It is nice to see a card based on the very founding fathers. I do have some gripes with the effect... As for "Spider-Man"...shouldn't that be in the "Pop Culture" section?

 

Ratings:

 

Effect of "Founding Golem": 8.5/10 (Nice to see certain limits to the monster's last two effects, but you are probably going to have to put limits on its universal effect, make it so you can only activate one of the effects during YOUR Standby Phase. The second effect of this monster is a little unfair, given that monsters usually HAVE to attack. My suggestion is to simply make it so you can force monsters to attack "Founding Golem" instead.)

 

Grammar: 7.0/10 (Not too keen on the grammar... "you can choose one of the following effects" should be "you can activate one of the following effects". "card which hinders monsters from attacking" is supposed to be "card that negates the attack of a monster(s)" and "this Spell or Trap" is supposed to be "that Spell or Trap". "negate 1 attack of a Monster Card and destroy the Monster Card" should be "negate the attack of 1 monster and destroy it". "during the next End Phase" should leave "next" out of it. Also, when clarifying that the card's ATK or DEF becomes [insert], it should be "This card's original ATK becomes [insert]" or the same thing for DEF, because otherwise you would have to say "This card gains [insert] ATK".

 

Overall: 7.5/10 (Actually, both cards should exist in the "Pop Culture" section because "Spider-Man" is an existing Marvel Comics character and "Founding Golem", a card based on the founding fathers, is a political image. Otherwise, I do say good job on making a good enough effect for "Founding Golem".)

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The OCG errors and the a little bit overpowered effect aren't Tacobills fault. I wrote them to give an idea for his card, but didn't realy mind the OCG while writing and also didn't think too long about the effect. I thought Tacobill would refine the effect if he likes the idea, and not just take the effect as I wrote it.

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