HORUS Posted January 21, 2009 Report Share Posted January 21, 2009 Under the expanding Umbra do I lay,My fruitful seeds never to becomeMore than bitter lamentation,Forcing regret of the past. Unable am I to discover an escape from theGreedy UmbraConsuming the sweetest of my dreams andPressuring my mind into reality. Unsettling my disposition,Disallowing surreal perception,The Umbra seeks out every corner,Determined to condense my mind into mere corporeality. Impartial to love,Impervious to guilt,And preventing my body from entering into desirable incorporealityDoes the Umbra of his hand repress my dreams. His oppressive strength willDeny my seeds nutrition,Poison my hope with fear,Until I submit to the reality of realityAnd become one of many minds,Dead by inaction,Hiding within the Umbra. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jericho Posted January 21, 2009 Report Share Posted January 21, 2009 Poems need to rhyme. [/thread] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sander Posted January 21, 2009 Report Share Posted January 21, 2009 Poems need to rhyme. [/thread] Wrong. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aximil Posted January 21, 2009 Report Share Posted January 21, 2009 Poems need to rhyme. [/thread] Wrong. Correct. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
A●O●J Posted January 21, 2009 Report Share Posted January 21, 2009 Poems need to rhyme. [/thread] Wrong. Correct.I smell a flame war a'brewin! Anyway I thought it was great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted January 21, 2009 Report Share Posted January 21, 2009 Poems need to rhyme. [/thread] I lol'd Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Lovegood Posted January 22, 2009 Report Share Posted January 22, 2009 The poet at Obama's inauguration didn't rhyme. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted January 22, 2009 Report Share Posted January 22, 2009 Poems need to rhyme. [/thread] Try looking up "Free Verse." Maybe that will help you realize what HORUS did here. To tell you the truth, Edgar Allen Poe even had some poems that were written in free verse and they were amazing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted January 22, 2009 Report Share Posted January 22, 2009 The poet at Obama's inauguration didn't rhyme. That poet also sucked. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
black_buffalo Posted January 22, 2009 Report Share Posted January 22, 2009 i wonder if i could put i poem of my own on here if you dont mind i walk in the wind of the cool breeze of the airi step on a leaf and it crackles in the airas i pick up the leave i smell the airi look down as i see that people dont carei look down in my soule only to seethe things i been through the things you will never seei seen war at home war every wherei might be a citizen but i have been to warmy own war at homeas i look outside i see a house i walk inside and i see the mousei look in its eyes and see the painof the family it had eatin by a snakei feel for its pain as i was taken away from my montherto live with my grandpa is where my horroir begani see the things that you will never see i will live the things you will never livei have a disorder that you shall ar may not ever havei suffer from ptsd just because of what they did Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
「tea.leaf」 Posted January 22, 2009 Report Share Posted January 22, 2009 The poet at Obama's inauguration didn't rhyme. The poet at Obama's inauguration failed pretty hard. That's not to say this poem needs to rhyme though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pikachu Posted January 22, 2009 Report Share Posted January 22, 2009 Hmm...this poem has the word 'Umbra' in five times. I wonder who this poem is about [/sar Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HORUS Posted January 23, 2009 Author Report Share Posted January 23, 2009 Hmm...this poem has the word 'Umbra' in five times. I wonder who this poem is about [/sar The "umbra" in the poem is ignorance. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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