serpent241 Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 Okay. i just registered today and these are my very first 2 cards. plz comment but nothing ripping them apart. i want critisisms.thank you! =) This card cannot be Special Summoned. When this card is Normal Summoned or Flip Summoned you can Special Summon 1 "Yang Beast" from your hand, Deck or Graveyard. Increase the ATK of this card by 500 and decrease the DEF by 500 for each "Yang Beast" on your field. This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by the effect of "Ying Beast." Decrease the ATK of this card by 500 and Increase the DEF by 500 for each "Ying Beast" on your field. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
neogadget lord Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 its yin and yang not yang and ying... just thought i shud lets u know... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
UltimateSynchron Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 the pictures in it have a man in. if you are trying to make them seem like different beings then you should get rid of the man in one or both. i like the picture but i was disappointed when i saw the second one. try to edit them so one is black with a white spot on it's forehead and visa-versa. the sumoning effect isnt very original, neither is the other effect but i've never seen them combined like that. isnt too overpowered, i'd give it a 7.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Incognito:. Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 kind of op dont you think?the first 1 is a lv5 monster with 2500 atk & def plus and effect?the other 1 is goodno wait the other 1 is underpoweredso it makes the other 1 not so op! so decreas the def of the first one and youve got an aokay!8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
serpent241 Posted June 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 the first card is a lvl 6 not a 5. and the effect already decreases his DEF so what did you mean by that lass comment? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TwistedFlameApe Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 the pictures in it have a man in. if you are trying to make them seem like different beings then you should get rid of the man in one or both. i like the picture but i was disappointed when i saw the second one. try to edit them so one is black with a white spot on it's forehead and visa-versa. the sumoning effect isnt very original' date=' neither is the other effect but i've never seen them combined like that. isnt too overpowered, i'd give it a 7.5/10[/quote'] the cards apparently have ying and yang in them for a reason. they're supposed to balance each other out. being the same creature is fine. i think the pics look pretty good. Why does it need a white spot??? frankly that'd make the pic a bit worse. he's a 1 star. obviously he could use a lil practice but for a first timer i give them a 10/10 for the effort and originality. keep it up and practice ;) fantastic ocg by the way. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:JBM:. Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 For your first post 10/10 For a 1 star 10/10 For a 2 star 8/10 Very good for a first timer. Sure it may be a little OP but it doesn't matter too much. Just keep posting new cards and you'll get better in no time! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ryanboy Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 Impressive. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 By 'Ying'... don't you mean 'Yin'? Yin&Yang Oh and don't invert pics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Necro Pheonix Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 For your first post 10/10 For a 1 star 10/10 For a 2 star 8/10 Very good for a first timer. Sure it may be a little OP but it doesn't matter too much. Just keep posting new cards and you'll get better in no time!I completely agree. Good Job!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Man0waR Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 ocg is solied but the effects and pics are suckish. and wtf is with the bst id? is that just to identify that it is a beast? even when we can read that its a beast under its type? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:JBM:. Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 By 'Ying'... don't you mean 'Yin'? Yin&Yang Oh and don't invert pics. This is his first set, give him a break. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
killertrey40 Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 don't use the same picture twice, even if it is color changed. also hand isn't capatilized Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:JBM:. Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 don't use the same picture twice' date=' even if it is color changed. also hand isn't capatilized[/quote'] Using the same picture twice in different ways represents the Yin and the Yang. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
busterblader2k3 Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 i just register today too and my mi first post too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Incognito:. Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 good job! your first spam! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sleepy Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 Ying Beast: This card cannot be Special Summoned. When this card is Normal Summoned or Flip Summoned, you can Special Summon 1 "Yang Beast" from your hand, Deck or Graveyard. This card gains 500 ATK and looses 500 DEF for each "Yang Beast" you control.(I would say it would be better if it started at around 2000 ATK. If you think about it, He's gonna be a 3000 ATK that Special Summons a monster for free. And needing only 1 Tribute, its easy to use "Mausoleum of the Emperor" or lower its Level with other card effects to Normal Summon with 0 Tributes) Yang Beast: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by the effect of "Ying Beast". This card gains 500 DEF and looses 500 ATK for each "Yin Beast" you control.(I would say this card is kinda underpowered if it only becomes weaker when Summoned and its not too useful if you have it in your hand and haven't drawn the other part. Maybe you should try to make the about equally strong. After all, Yin/Yang are 2 opposite but equal forces. Also, I see the flow going from Yin to Yang but not the other way around. The symbol is supposed to be a circle so...One last thing. I saw the tiger in the first pic, and was remanded that I usually see the symbol of yin/yang with a white Tiger going against a dragon (don't know exactly why ^-^") so... I thought maybe a dragon (even thought dragons are kinda overused in the forum) would be a good suggestion for the pic instead of just inverting the colors for the first pic.) All in all, there's the fix and suggestions. For a new member though, it was pretty good. Your grammar is good, I've seen lots of people worse and they are not nessesarily 1 or 2 star members >_> 9/10 ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
serpent241 Posted June 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 ocg is solied but the effects and pics are suckish. and wtf is with the bst id? is that just to identify that it is a beast? even when we can read that its a beast under its type? the bst id is so i can sort them in my collections it has no real purpose for you to bash on =p to sleepy: thank you very much to the response. ill take that into consideration and post them again when im through. to Lrovani: Thanks for the comment on the yin/yang inverted colors thing. that was what i was shooting 4. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Max Darkness Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 I have to say, these are probably the best first cards from a 1-star I've seen in a long time. Well done! Rating: 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
serpent241 Posted June 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 Edit: Ive changed my cards to better match every1s suggestions Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
evilherospencersimpson Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 KEWL! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TwistedFlameApe Posted June 8, 2009 Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 KEWL! yes, yes they are. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sleepy Posted June 8, 2009 Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 forgive my ignorance but... what does KEWL mean? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TwistedFlameApe Posted June 8, 2009 Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 lol... kewl is a stupid way of saying cool. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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