Digimon : Primal Awakening

[Skyfi]

[spoiler=Chapter 0 - Prologue]. Some fought for power, others for survival. 3 Digimon were selected by Yggdrasil, to watch over all others, Seraphimon, Ophanimon, and Cherubimon. They were known as the Celestial Trinity at the time. All was fine, their was little conflict after the Celestial Trinity started to protect the weak. One Digimon didn't like this, He decided to stand up against the Celestial Trinity. This Digimon was known as Primemon.

 

Primemon, started to brainwash Digimon. He was trying to create an army. His goal was to destroy the Celestial Trinity and become the new ruler of the Digital World. He began his assault, sending many of his pawns to attack the Celestial Trinity, while he destroyed those who wouldn't join him. In a last effort to destroy Primemon, the Celestial Trinity used their life force energy to send a final blast at Primemon that would destroy him. The Earth was now free of threat, but at what cost? The Celestial Trinity had sacrificed themselves to save the Earth. In the result the Earth was split in three Parts. Earth, The Digital World, and an unnamed alternate Dimension, a prison for Primemons soul.

 

[spoiler=Chapter 1 - Baihumon's Legacy]

"Come Chatsuramon, quickly before it gets dark, We are in 'His' area, he will be out soon, and hat would be bad news for us." Baihumon exclaimed at Chatsuramon.

 

Baihumon and Chartsuramon were walking towards, Sovereigns Peak, the main Headquarters for the Digimon Sovereign.

 

"Baihumon, if you don't mind me asking, has the supposed Demon Lord actually ever been spotted here? It seems highly unlikely that Daemon would hang out in front of Headquarters without attacking it."

 

"Chatsuramon, you are a fool if you truly believe, that the Demon Lords would actually be foolish enough to strike head on. They are planning something."

 

"Very well, I underst-" Chatsuramon stopped to look at a cloaked figure farther down in the road.

 

"Chatsuramon, Look like I owe you an apology. Hello Daemon, save yourself the pain and step aside."

 

The cloaked figure did not respond.

 

"Daemon!!! Did you not hear my warning!?" Baihumon roared with anger.

 

"Haha, Daemon see that?! He's angry at you."

 

Baihumon turned around to see, another of the Demon Lords, Barbamon.

 

"Crimson Flame!!!" Barbamon yelled as Baihumon flew and hit Chatsuramon.

 

"B-barbamon!? What are you doing over here? I Thought this was Daemon's area!? Barbamon! Leave this forest NOW!!!" Baihumon pounced at Barbamon

 

"Not so fast now Baihumon. Chaos Flare!!!" Daemon exclaimed finally speaking.

 

"Haha, I expected much more Baihumon, after all I thought you were a Sovereign. What a pathetic letdown. Now give me the Prime Key, hand it over easily and I will promise to finish you quickly."

 

Baihumon groaned in pain. "Barbamon! Is that the Demon Lords plan? To collect the pieces of Prime Key! Theirs no point, even if you manage nobody knows how and where the Prime Key can be used. Our dear Celestial Trinity gave their lives, to seal Primemon. I Will not let their sacrifices be in vain! Sonic Wave!"

 

Baihumon roared sending a wave at Barbamon and Daemon.

 

"ENOUGH! Barbamon stop playing let's finish him!" Daemon exclaimed speaking for the second time.

 

"Very well, Haha, It's been real Baihumon." Barbamon disappeared.

 

"Chatsuramon! Take this data, and give it the Azulongmon! Leave me and go to Sovereigns Peak."

 

"B-baihumon, f-fine" Chatsuramon stuttered in fear.

 

Barbamon appeared behind Baihumon. "Pandemonium Lost!!!" A colossal explosion of energy started to envelop Baihumon.

 

"Good job Barbamon, now take his fractal code, and the Fragment."

 

"I Know you nitwi- What! The fragment is missing" Barbamon exclaimed.

 

Meanwhile Chatsuramon was approaching Sovereigns peak.

 

[spoiler=Chapter 2 - The Destiny Of Many]

The cave was lit only by a large fire in the center. The 3 Sovereigns, surrounding it. All was silent at the recent loss of a friend. Chatsuramon slowly approached the Fiery Phoenix Zhuqiaomon, The almighty dragon Azulongmon, and the massive beast Ebonwumon.

 

"My lords...Baihumon told me to deliver this to you, right before h-"

 

Chatsuramon looked at the faces of his leaders, he felt a sort of Depression, or anger coming from the Sovereigns. He was not sure if he should continue to talk or just deliver the Prime Key.

 

"Chatsuramon, continue please, we cannot change the past." The dragon spirit told Chatsuramon.

 

"Azulongmon my liege, he gave me this piece of data to deliver to you, He called it the "Key Fragment" all I know is that this is what Barbamon and Daemon were after earlier today, This is the reason Baihumon is no longer with us. Azulongmon, can you tell me what this is, and why the Demon Lords are after it?"

 

"Baihumon that fool, what-" The phoenix yelled in rage as he was interrupted by Azulongmon.

 

"No Zhuqiaomon, Baihumon knew that today would be his last day, That is way he decided to bring his Fragment with him, he knew that the Demon Lords would attack today, he just wasn't sure when. He knew if he was to die today, if he left it at his base in Western Are it would have been free for the Demon Lords to take. Chatsuramon, you know the story of Primemon correct? These are the keys used to free him."

 

"Which means if they succeed...This is the end of the Digital World as we know it" The Massive turtle moaned.

 

"But n-nobody could defeat P-primemon" Chatsuramon shuddered just saying the name of this almight Primemon.

 

"It's time then isn't it?"

 

A Forth shadow arrived from the cave entrance. As the Golden Dinosaur approached them, All of the Sovereigns bowed.

 

"Fanglongmon, I didn't realize you were arriving." Ebonwumon said with the utmost respect.

 

"That is of no importance now, with the loss of our companion, and The Demon Lord trying to bring back Primemon, the most dangerous Digimon that has ever been, Even the Royal Knights, and Olympus 12 wont be enough. It's time we call upon the humans."

 

Fanglongmon held out his key fragments, as did the other Sovereigns. Fanglongmon and the others each blasted the keys with their own attacks as the Keys started to glow. Each key turned into a Digi-Vice.

 

"Now go! Find the Digi-Destined!" Fanglongmon preached as the keys flew into the air.

 

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"And here's your test back Uryu, I Know you can do better then this."

 

This had been the 5th time this month tha Uryu had received a C- on his AP : Human History class this year.

 

"Im sorry Mr. Zamora, Im really trying my best" The tall Brunette whined.

 

"It's fine Uryu, but please pay more attention in class next time. Okay class have a good weekend!"

 

Uryu approached his locker and saw his friend Shane. Uryu punched his locker as he whined to Shane.

 

"Damn it Shane, this is getting on my nerves, I study all night but still get a C- on what could be one of the biggest exams this year."

 

"Haha buddy, C- is bad? Then my D- isn't good? Oh well." His careless Black haired friend chuckled.

 

"Dude stop screwing aro-" Haaris was interrupted as they were walking outside. Shane pulled him to the side of the school.

 

"Holy crap that was Lenny, he said if I didn't bring him lunch today after school, he would kill me." Shane groaned.

 

"Haha Shane not so fun anymor-" Uryu and Shanes cellphones began to ring at the same time. They both picked up the calls to hear the voice of Fanglongmon.

 

"Please, reply to this message, we need you to save the Digital World, you are one of the few chosen for this task."

 

"Haha, sure I'll play along" Shane said, as he texted Yes back to the number.

 

"Fine I'll do the same Shane" Uryu began to text. After both of the young boys had sent, their phones started to glow, as they were taken through the stream of dimensions.

 

[spoiler=Chapter 3 - The Destiny Of Many : Part 2]

"Seriously, how long are these guys going to be knocked out?" Said a mid-height, blond girl.

 

"Settle down Leah, you were out for a few hours, when they brought us here." The tall Black haired boy said, as he wondered what they had been brought to this world for."

 

"Please Kyo, Leah stop fighting you've only met like 3 Hours ago and your already like an old married couple."

 

Both Leah, and Kyo looked at this short, black haired girl.

 

"Stay out of this Hikari, oh yeah, and if you ever call us a couple again, I will-"

 

Leah was interrupted by the groans of Uryu, and Shane both waking up.

 

"Huh...Uryu man where are we?..." A confused Shane groaned.

 

"Man...I Don't know Shane, I think I hit my head on something, Oh who are you guys? Did the same thing happen to you? Where are we?" Uryu asked while rubbing his head trying to hold in the fact that his head was hurting more then he was letting on.

 

"Wow, I find you guys annoying and I've only just met you. As for who am I, I'm Leah. Yes if you mean being forced through dimensions, Yes the same thing happened to all of us. And we're in someplace called the Digital World."

 

"Huh? Wait so this is a different Dimension? And what's the Digital World?" Shane asked looking more scared then his usual self.

 

"I would be the one who would answer those questions."

 

"H-holy what the h-hell is that Uryu!?" Shane asked starting to back up after seeing the Large Dragon Spirit.

 

"I-I don't k-now Shane, Leah, You guys, why aren't freaking out like us? This isn't something you see everyday!"

 

"Settle down you guys, This is Azulongmon, he is one of the people who brought us to this world." The very cute, kind Hikari told them with a small chuckle following.

 

"W-what?" Shane said still scared.

 

"Please, Shane, Uryu, Leah, Hikari, Kyo, Please follow me if you turely wish to know why I have brought the five of you."

 

The five children, followed Azulongmon into a large cave, with giant fire lit in the middle. In this room were the other Sovereigns, and their leader Fanglongmon.

 

"Children, so far you have only met one of the Sovereigns, me Azulongmon, I would like you to me the other 2 and our leader." Azulongmon now using a serious tone.

 

Azulongmon, Ebonwumon, and Zhuqiaomon, all bowed before their leader.

 

"Welcome children, My name is Fanglongmon, I am the leader of the Digimon Sovereign. We have brought you 5 here, because you have been selected, selected by destiny to save our world."

 

The children were all still shocked by the site of the huge, Phoenix, Gold Dinosaur, and Massive beast.

 

"Save this world!? I can't even pass my History test, let alone save a whole world. And Save this world from what? And what's a Digimon?" Uryu said.

 

"Yeah, Uryu brings out some good points, Fanglongmon, can you please answer these questions Fanglongmon sir?" The polite Hikari asked.

 

"Very well, Digimon is short for Digital monsters. And now to tell you what to save our world from. First I will have to tell you a story. When Digimon first came to exist, Some fought for power, others for survival. 3 Digimon were selected by Yggdrasil our God, to watch over all others, Seraphimon, Ophanimon, and Cherubimon. They were known as the Celestial Trinity at the time. All was fine, their was little conflict after the Celestial Trinity started to protect the Digimon. One Digimon didn't like this, He decided to stand up against the Celestial Trinity. This Digimon was known as Primemon. Primemon, started to brainwash Digimon. He was trying to create an army. His goal was to destroy the Celestial Trinity and become the new ruler of the Digital World. He began his assault, sending many of his pawns to attack the Celestial Trinity, while he destroyed those who wouldn't join him. In a last effort to destroy Primemon, the Celestial Trinity used their life force energy to send a final blast at Primemon that would destroy him. ? The Celestial Trinity had sacrificed themselves to save the World. In result the Earth was split in three Parts. Earth, The Digital World, and an unnamed alternate Dimension, a prison for Primemons soul.

 

Each of the Sovereigns, were given a piece of the key to Primemon's Dimension. So you see, the Issue, is an Evil Group of Digimon, "The Seven Demon Lords" are trying to take the Fragments of the key and bring back Primemon, and destroy the Digital World. They have actually managed to destroy one of the 4 Digimon sovereigns, Baihumon. Fortunately they were not able to get his key fragment. We wish to give you each a Key Fragment, to protect from the Demons Lords. You will each be partnered with a Digimon partner, Together the 5 Of you and your Digimon can save the world!"

 

"I'm in! I have been waiting to know what I was born to do! And now I know, I was born to save this world!" Shane felt, felling almost patriotic towards the Digital World, as if it was his home. Shane looked at Uryu and nodded his head. Uryu nodded back.

 

"I'm in as well, This sounds like a blast, saving the world and all." Uryu preached, as he felt a feeling of Motivation coming from Shane.

 

"Well all of you loser's know that you can't do this without my help. So I guess I'll help." Leah told them, speaking as if she was better then the rest of them.

 

"Hm...this could be dangerous, Which means I'm definitely in." Kyo replied.

 

Fanglongmon stared at Hikari, and she nodded back to him.

 

"Very well, you have all accepted your destiny. Time to introduce you to your Digimon partners. Shane, you partner will be Commandramon."

 

From the cave entrance, Commandramon, a mid sized raptor dressed in army close, carrying what appeared to be a Battle Rifle step forward.

 

"Glad to meet ya kid" Commandramon said greeting Shane.

 

"Sweet, Commandramon your awesome, I feel a great friendship forming" Shane said trying to be as nice as possible to his new friend.

 

"Haha, Thank Shane" Commandramon responded.

 

"Okay now it's time fore your Digimon Hikari, your sweetness can only be matched with that of your partners, Meet Lunamon."

 

Another Digimon stepped through the caves entrance, This time a small creature, the best way to describe it would be to, call it a Fairy Rabbit.

 

"Hi! Im Hikari!" Hiakri said in a joyful mood as she ran forward and hugged her new friend.

 

"Hehe, I Like you to Hikari." The small rabbit said to her.

 

"Kyo, your appearance, leads people to believe that they can get away with fooling around with you, you hold your power back, Only for everybody else's safety. You partner will be Leormon."

 

Again through the cave a Digimon walked through, This time what looked to be a Loin Cub.

 

"Heh, your pretty cool, Glad to meet you buddy." Kyo said trying to hold back how happy he was.

 

"Right back at ya, Haha" The loin cub spoke to him.

 

"Next up is you Leah, you are very Independent, but you do let your Anger lead you away from people. Your partner will be FanBeemon."

 

Another Digimon walked through the entrance, a Very large Bee Wasp cross fusion.

 

"So your my partner, heh, Oh well" FanBeemon said looking at Leah.

 

"Exactly my thoughts" Leah replied feeling a sort of respect for her partner.

 

"And Finally Uryu, I can since in your heart, that you have a Fiery Will, Sort of an depressed heart. I promise you that this journey in the Digital World will change that. Your Digimon will be just as fiery as your willpower. Meet Coronamon."

 

The Final Digimon stepped through the caves entrance, this time it looked like an Orange Bear, on two legs.

 

"Hey! So your Coronamon? Let's take down these Demon Lords okay!?"

 

"Yeah! Yeah! Fight! Fight!" Coronamon eager to get into another fight.

 

"Very well, know all of you, get a good nights rest, In the morning your journey will begin. I wish the best of luck to all of you. Good Night"

 

[spoiler=Chapter 4 - The Journey Begins]

As Uryu layed in his bed, he was thought, he thought about all that had happened to him today. He couldn't sleep, knowing that the fate of a whole world, he didn't know existed before today, was depending on him to save it. It was all to much for Uryu to take in. Uryu got up from the pile of hay he was sleeping on and looked around. He was sharing a room with Shane and Kyo. Uryu shook Shane trying to wake him up.

 

"Shane! Psst, Shane!" Uryu said as he started to shake Shane more aggressively, still trying not to wake Kyo up.

 

"...Huh?...Uryu What happened?" Shane yawned as if he had barely gotten an Hour of sleep.

 

"Shane, I can't sleep, I Can't stop thinking about this, I don't know if i Can do this..." Haaris sighed looking over at the 3 Digital Monster sleeping in the corner of the room.

 

Shane chuckled for a short while then started to speak

 

"Seriously Uryu? When I was in 4th Grade and those kids started shoving me around, who Beat the crap out of them, even though he was terrified? Uryu you can do this, we can do this. Our Digimon are awesome and they'll be with us through this all!"

 

For a while Uryu felt as if he was the only one reacting to all that had happened normally. No other child would just come to a different dimension, Just accept to save it, get a Digital Monster as a partner then call it a day then go to sleep. All this and much more was going through Uryu's head. Uryu managed to pull a humble smile upon his face then looked at Shane with a face full of confidence.

 

"Your right Shane, we can do this, You and me and our Digimon, Together we'll take down these 'Demon Lords' and save this world!" Uryu exclaimed as loud as he could without waking up Kyo.

 

"Haha, That's my boy, and who knows, Maybe after all of this is done, You can ask out Hikari...That is If I don't first" Shane teased Uryu.

 

"Ha, keep dreaming Shane, Keep dreaming." Uryu yawned as he fell asleep.

 

 

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"Come on Uryu, wake up!"

 

Uryu woke up to see Hikari shaking him, and Kyo shaking Shane. Everybody else had already woken up. Uryu didn't realize how long him and Shane stayed up talking. Uryu blushed as he looked at Hikari and laughed.

 

"Huh? Haha sorry Hikari, guess I overslept." Uryu chuckled feeling sort of embarrassed to have to have the girl he wants to impress wake up him up.

 

Uryu turned over and helped Kyo pull Shane up. Uryu started to think about Kyo...What was he doing in the Digital World, He seemed the most normal out of the 5 of them. He was also very quoit so nobody really knew him as much as they knew each other.

 

In a matter of about 20 Minutes all of them found their selves standing in front of the Sovereigns...and Leah.

 

"What took all of you so long!?" Leah and FanBeemon said in unison.

 

Haaris leaned towards Hikari's ear and whispered.

 

"She's worse then My Mom..." After a second of silence Uryu and Hikari broke into laughter.

 

For the first time in years, Uryu felt as if he was actually happy. After his father and mother had gotten a Divorce, he had always felt lonely except his only friend, Shane. Although it had barely been a day in the Digital World, he felt as if he was already making more friends. Uryu decided to come back into reality, and greet his Digimon like the others were doing.

 

"Hey, Coronamon! Did you sleep well!?" Haaris exclaimed as he went and started to tease his Digimon.

 

"Okay! Enough of this Greeting session! Is everybody ready for me to continue!?" The almighty Fanlongmon roared out of impatience.

 

The group stayed quiet, knowing ti would be disrespectful to talk back.

 

"Very well I shall continue, As I told you yesterday each of you shall receive one piece of the key, This will make the Demons Lords hunt for you, But no matter what happens you may not let them get any of the keys, The results may be fatal. These keys were made out of the energy of the Celestial Trinity I spoke of yesterday, That amount of Energy could be enough to destroy everything in a 100 Mile Radius."

 

Fanglongmon signaled the other Sovereigns, The group still quiet as can be. Each Sovereign pulled out a Piece of Data. Each giving them to their leader.

 

"Please reach into your pockets, and show me your Digi-Vice's"

 

"...Our what?" Kyo hesitated to ask.

 

Shane who had reached into his pocket already found a "Digi-Vice" replacing his crappy Nokia flip phone. Within 5 Minutes each of them had pulled out their Devices.

 

"There are Digi-vice. They are sort your Cell Phone for the digital world. They can do more then just that but, some I'm afraid you'll have to find out on your own. Please hold them out."

 

Each of the children held out their Digi-Vices. Leah with her Gold trimmed Digi-Vice, Kyo with his Blue trimmed, Hikari with her Purple trimmed, Shane with his green trimmed, and lastly Uryu with his Red Digi-Vice.

 

"I Am going to put these key's data into each of your Digi-Vices. Again, if the Demon Lords were to get their hand on your Digi-Vices it would mean chaos. The Demon Lords might try to tempt you with darkness. Please do not join them. You are our only hope now that you have your keys, you know what you must do. Save the Digital World!"

 

[spoiler=Chapter 5 - Friend or Foe]

"Strabimon are you finished locating Lilithmon?" A White haired boy walked towards his Blue Wolf Digimon who appeared to be meditating.

 

The Blue wolf pulled his gloves tighter, moved his scarf from his face, Ans stared at his Human Partner.

 

"Im picking up her signal Ace, But it's strange... I think I since the presence, of 5 Digimon, and 5 Humans around her area..."

 

"So what Lilithmon warned us about was true, Fanglongmon is calling in others, others like me... Very well Strabimon, it is no matter our objective will remain the same, We will hunt Lilithmon. If they get in our way then we'll just have to teach them a lesson or two. Let's go visit Our new friends, before we Visit Lilithmon though." Ace spoke, still with no emotion showing on his face.

 

Strabimon smirked at him, and the two of them disappeared.

 

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The 5 Children and their Digimon waved to the Sovereigns as they walked farther and farther away. For a few minutes or so the group was silent, Not sure what to speak of.

 

"Fine nobody want to talk? Then I'll give the orders, We should head to the 'Overdell' It is A massive cemetery, home to the Bakemon...Also said to be where the Demon Lord known as Lilthmon resides." FanBeemon spoke arrogantly

 

"FanBeemon, are you aware it is also said, to enter the graveyard, you must first defeat the Demon said to haunt it." Commandramon muttered.

 

"Oh well let's just start our journey their okay!? It should take about a Day or 2 Unless any of you can fly." Leormon yelled, just trying to bring back the peace.

 

"Wait, Do you guys know what Fanglongmon meant when he said our Digi-Vices wold be capable of something else?" Kyo spoke for the first time in a while, it shocked most of them.

 

"Allow me to answer that. You see us Digimon, occasionally if we get strong enough, or even make strong bonds with others, We can 'Digi-Volve'. In Other words we will actually change form, we can actually become bigger, even stronger. The only problem is that, without Digi-Vices this is very rare. With your help, we will be able to Digi-Volve" Coronamon spoke as everybody stay silent, confused that this was the Same Coronamon who before wouldn't even speak in full Sentences.

 

"Wow, that sounds amazing, I hope we can do that one day." The cute Hikari spoke silently to her digimon partner, Lunamon.

 

"Dont worry Hikari we will! This day will come soon." Lunamon smile cheerfully.

 

There was a moment of silence as everybody had believed they heard something. The silence was broken when the voice of a Teenage voice spoke from above.

 

"Welcome...friends. My name is Ace, thought I would just be polite and welcome you to the Digital World, This is my partner Strabimon."

 

"Charmed..." The Blue wolf spoke.

 

The gang looked around to see where this voice was coming, It was coming from a large tree to the side.

 

"What!? Who are you!?" Shane, was the first one one to respond to this figure as the rest of them were still confused.

 

"No need to be frightened, I am a friends...That is if you stay out of my way and let me finish these Demon Lords by myself."

 

Uryu looked at the White haired boy, he had seemed to have been covered in cuts and bruises.

 

"Is that supposed to be a threat!? We don't even know who you are! No way we're just going to step to the side and let you do all this. For all we know you could be one of the Demons Lords in disguise!" Uryu yelled.

 

As Uryu spoke that last sentence All the Digimon moved into a Battle stance.

 

"Very well, It was your mistake not to move aside when I told you to. DNA charge!!!" Ace yelled as he pulled out a Black Digivice with Grey Trim and slaped his hand to the top of it.

 

Strabimon jumped off the tree as Ace fell following, it was as if their bodies had merged in the air. A New unfamiliar Figure fell to the ground. This new body seemed as if Strabimon and Ace had actually merged. This new figure appeared to be a boy, in Armor that appeared to represent a Wolf like Strabimon.

 

"Lobomon!!!" The new figure yelled as it pulled out what looked like 2 Beam Swords.

 

[spoiler=Chapter 6 - Unexpected Detour]

The half Wold half Boy looked forward at the five Digimon preparing to engage in battle with him.

 

“You realize you Digimon are only at the Rookie Level, I'm a Champion, theirs no way your pathetic Excuse for a Digimon will be able to defeat me.” Lobomon with much pride as he looked for the fear in his opponents faces.

 

“You just merged with your Digimon? What the hell, is that!?” Shane yelled now very angry.

 

Ace stood silent for a moment listening to everything Shane yelled at him, then finally responded.

 

“This...This is my form of Digivoloution.”

 

“So this is Digivoloution? What a letdown...” FanBeemon teased Lobomon.

 

“Why You Insolent Pest! I have not time to deal with naive fools like you.” Lobomon yelled for the first time losing his temper.

 

"Honesty Lobomon, I can't leave you alone without you Attacking sombody?"

 

The Gang looked above to another tree, This time another Figure was standing their, This time a Black Haired boy, he was about the same height as Ace, and his close were Torn. Along side with a Dragon Digimon, wearing Black Armor, similar to a Samurai.

 

"Hello all, Sorry for my brother 'Attitude', My name is Cifer. This is my digimon Ryudamon."

 

Cifer and Ryudamon jumped off the tree, Not fusing like his brother but coming down to greet them. Cifer walked first towards his brother Ace.

 

"Cifer, What the hell do you think your doing?!" Ace questioned his brother.

 

"Ace, why are you so stupid? They could be useful to use if we wish to get revenge on Lilithmon. Just play along with me, All we have to do is get their trust" Cifer whispered in his ear.

 

Lobomon de-digivolved back into Strabimon and Ace, The four of them started to walk towards the Digidestined.

 

"Our sincerest apologies, My brother thought you were working for the Demon Lords, They have been doing nasty things around here and we've been trying to take them down." Cifer lied, as he rolled his eyes towards his brother.

 

 

[Phantom Roxas]

Weather Report!*

 

[spoiler=Prologue]

Before the start of human civilization' date=' Digimon walked on our very Earth. This makes no sense. How can Digimon exist before humans?

 

"Hello class, and welcome to History of the World 101!" the teacher greeted. "Our first lesson for today is how the digital entity known as Yggdrasil created our very world."

"Um, sir?" asked little Bob.

"Yes, Bob?"

"How can a digital entity create our world when we create data? It's a paradox."

"You speak blasphemy. Data existed before humans. Everyone knows that."

 

But enough of that, back to the real story. Some fought for power, others for survival. 3 Digimon were selected by Yggdrasil, to watch over all others: Seraphimon, Ophanimon, and Cherubimon. They were known as the Celestial Trinity at the time. All was fine, there was little conflict after the Celestial Trinity unnecessary comma started to protect the weak. One Digimon didn't like this. He decided to stand up against the Celestial Trinity. This Digimon was known as Primemon.

 

Primemon, started to brainwash Digimon. He was trying to create an army. His goal was to destroy the Celestial Trinity unnecessary comma and become the new ruler of the Digital World. He began his assault, sending many of his pawns to attack the Celestial Trinity, while he destroyed those who wouldn't join him. In a last effort to destroy Primemon, the Celestial Trinity unnecessary comma used their life force energy to send a final blast at Primemon that would destroy him. The Earth was now free of threat, but at what cost? The Celestial Trinity had sacrificed themselves to save the Earth. In the result, the Earth was split in three parts. Earth, the Digital World, and an unnamed alternate dimension, a prison for Primemon's soul.

 

 

It seems like it's off to a decent start. I hope to see Chapter 1 soon.

 

*Weather Report = Credit to Weather Report and Kendo Fish for showing me this brand of review.

[Skyfi]

Thanks for the fixes Roxas, glad to see you liked it, also this was meant to show that there's more to Digimon, then what has been revealed.

[Phantom Roxas]

Updated the reasoning on how Digimon did not exist before humanity.

 

If possible, could you change the prologue so it's exactly how I put it, minus the unnecessary commentary?

[Skyfi]

Nice yeah, I Like your version better, Thanks.

[Phantom Roxas]

Wait, what the hell? That classroom thing was just a joke. If you actually want to incorporate into the story, change the name to something more realistic than "Bob".

 

The is supposed to be an apostrophe in "Primemon's soul".

 

 

 

Before the start of human civilization, Digimon walked on our very Earth.

 

But enough of that, back to the real story. Some fought for power, others for survival. 3 Digimon were selected by Yggdrasil, to watch over all others: Seraphimon, Ophanimon, and Cherubimon. They were known as the Celestial Trinity at the time. All was fine, there was little conflict after the Celestial Trinity started to protect the weak. One Digimon didn't like this. He decided to stand up against the Celestial Trinity. This Digimon was known as Primemon.

 

Primemon, started to brainwash Digimon. He was trying to create an army. His goal was to destroy the Celestial Trinity and become the new ruler of the Digital World. He began his assault, sending many of his pawns to attack the Celestial Trinity, while he destroyed those who wouldn't join him. In a last effort to destroy Primemon, the Celestial Trinity used their life force energy to send a final blast at Primemon that would destroy him. The Earth was now free of threat, but at what cost? The Celestial Trinity had sacrificed themselves to save the Earth. In the result, the Earth was split in three parts. Earth, the Digital World, and (insert actual name here), a prison for Primemon's soul.

 

 

[Skyfi]

I Though I did change the name, i probably didn't click the save changes button.

[Legend Zero]

I like it, sounds like a good story will develop. Does this have a place between any season? I feel as though it could be used as a Adventure 03. =P

 

Primemon sounds awesome. ;)

[Skyfi]

I Never really thought of it taking place between any certain seasons, but I guess it could take Place after Adventure 02 and Tamers. Glad you liked it.

[Phantom Roxas]

Firs off, most Digimon Fanfics are designed to be its own season. The Trinity of Seraphimon, Ophanimon, and Cherubimon is based on, aside from the heavenly hierarchy, Frontier.

[Kendo Fish]

Final Flast? Heh heh, whatever a flast is. Should be blast.

 

As Roxas said, there's not really a way for Digimon to exist before us unless some aliens conveniently knew English and made some weird programming, or if there's another universe where things conveniently speak English, which was once connected conveniently to earth, which would soon speak English. Whaaaaa...?

 

Anywho, I think the plot will develop nicely, and your confused little bud of a story could turn into a blossoming...apple. Or rose, whatever you want. : D

[Skyfi]

Haha, Thank, But for the record, I did right Final Blast not "flast"

[Phantom Roxas]

Oh, I had accidentally typed flast. My mistake.

[Legend Zero]

Firs off' date=' most Digimon Fanfics are designed to be its own season. The Trinity of Seraphimon, Ophanimon, and Cherubimon is based on, aside from the heavenly hierarchy, Frontier.

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I know they were introduce as a team in Fronteir but it would make sense because Kari and TK were light and hope, which could produce those megas. But most our there own season I just saw that this could be different.

[Moderately_Friendly]

Firs off' date=' most Digimon Fanfics are designed to be its own season. The Trinity of Seraphimon, Ophanimon, and Cherubimon is based on, aside from the heavenly hierarchy, Frontier.

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I know they were introduce as a team in Fronteir but it would make sense because Kari and TK were light and hope, which could produce those megas. But most our there own season I just saw that this could be different.

 

^This

also good start I like the celestial trinity thing. and primemon

[Skyfi]

Oh' date=' I had accidentally typed flast. My mistake.

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Its all good.

 

 

Firs off' date=' most Digimon Fanfics are designed to be its own season. The Trinity of Seraphimon, Ophanimon, and Cherubimon is based on, aside from the heavenly hierarchy, Frontier.

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I know they were introduce as a team in Fronteir but it would make sense because Kari and TK were light and hope, which could produce those megas. But most our there own season I just saw that this could be different.

 

Correct.

Firs off' date=' most Digimon Fanfics are designed to be its own season. The Trinity of Seraphimon, Ophanimon, and Cherubimon is based on, aside from the heavenly hierarchy, Frontier.

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I know they were introduce as a team in Fronteir but it would make sense because Kari and TK were light and hope, which could produce those megas. But most our there own season I just saw that this could be different.

 

^This

also good start I like the celestial trinity thing. and primemon

 

Thanks

 

Also new Chapter Added!

[Legend Zero]

Very nice, Baihumon is my least favorite Sovereign. =D

 

I very direct approach from the demon lords........a good read non the less. I can't wait to see more.

[Phantom Roxas]

I made this mistake already, so I'll let you know now. You expect your readers to know what everyone looks like. Descriptions, please.

 

The battle was too similar to my first battle, especially since it involved Barbamon and the use of Pandemonium Lost.

[Skyfi]

Very nice' date=' Baihumon is my least favorite Sovereign. =D

 

I very direct approach from the demon lords........a good read non the less. I can't wait to see more.

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*gasp* He's my favorite, and Thanks glad you liked it.

 

 

I made this mistake already' date=' so I'll let you know now. You expect your readers to know what everyone looks like. [b']Descriptions, please.[/b]

 

The battle was too similar to my first battle, especially since it involved Barbamon and the use of Pandemonium Lost.

Yeah yours kind of inspired me to use Barbamon, didn't remember that he used Pandemonium Lost. Also What do you mean by the bolded.

[Phantom Roxas]

What's wrong with Baihumon? He and Azulongmon are tied for second in my opinion. Zhuqiaomon is my favorite in case you're wondering.

 

Barbamon used Pandemonium Lost then finished him off with Lightning. I though you of all people would introduce Beelzemon as quick as possible.

 

As for the bolded, it's what it looks like. Describe the appearances of the Digimon, even if we already know what they look like.

 

Will there be Digi-Destined in this, or is this going to be completely in the Digital World?

[Skyfi]

Their will be Digi-Destined introduced in the next chapter, and I already have plans in the work for Beelzemon and Lilithmon.

[Kendo Fish]

From first glance I can tell you might be in need of commas, and the italics kind of bother me PERSONALLY. But in order for me to analyze both the good and the bad of this story, I will be forced to do a WEATHER REPORT. Would you like that, by chance? :3 You seem like the type who wouldn't get so let down by constructive criticism.

[Skyfi]

Go ahead, I don't mind criticism is a good thing.

 

UPDATE: Chapter 2 Added.

[Kendo Fish]

By the way, Roxas putting in the classroom comment was a joke. ^^; It's just something us Mystery Science Weather Reporter Whatevers do. GET USED TO IT!!

 

Orange because I feel like it.

[spoiler=Chapter 1 - Baihumon's Legacy]

"Come COMMA Chatsuramon' date=' quickly PUNCTUATION before it gets dark PERIOD We are in 'His' area, he will be out soon, and that would be bad news for us." Baihumon exclaimed to Chatsuramon. Right away, the dialogue sounds a bit awkward. Maybe it's just me, but...Unnecessary Enter press! UEP! By the way, he sounds like...Will Smith? Oh well, go with it.

 

Baihumon and Chatsuramon were walking towards UNNECESSARY COMMA Sovereigns Peak, the main headquarters for the Digimon Sovereign. Gee, I wonder what this area looks like. Are they in a white void? Since I came in here without a sufficient knowledge of how the Digital World looks (and I've played a game or two, mind you), I can't really grasp any of the characters' appearances. As Roxas said, describe...OR ELSE!!!!!

 

"Baihumon, if you don't mind me asking, has the supposed Demon Lord actually ever been spotted here? It seems highly unlikely that Daemon would hang out in front of Headquarters without attacking it." Chatsuramon sounds like Jacob Moon.

 

"Chatsuramon, you are a fool if you truly believe unecessary comma that the Demon Lords would actually be foolish enough to strike head on. They are planning something."

 

"Very well, I underst-" Chatsuramon stopped to look at a cloaked figure farther down on, or no word here at all the road. There was a road? A road made of candy. Okay, got it. Why they'd let that candy go to waste is beyond me.

 

"Chatsuramon, looks like I owe you an apology. Hello COMMA Daemon, save yourself the pain and step aside."

 

The cloaked figure did not respond.

 

"Daemon!!! Unnecessary exclamation marks! Did you not hear my warning!?" Baihumon roared with anger. Anger seems pretty much like a given.

 

"Haha, Daemon PUNCTUATION see that?! He's angry at you." Ladies and gentleman, one of the twelve Devas of the Digital World.

 

Baihumon turned around to see unnecessary comma another of the Demon Lords, Barbamon. Who looks like...? WHO LOOKS LIKE!?!?

 

"Crimson Flame!!!" Barbamon yelled as Baihumon flew and hit Chatsuramon. DR. OCTONAGAPUS, BLEHHHHH

Erm? He yelled an attack name, but Blob (not described) flew into Blob #2? I didn't know flames could perform mind control!

By the way, he sounds like...David Suzuki.

 

"B-barbamon!? What are you doing over here? I thought this was Daemon's area!? Yep. A though with a question mark. WHA!? Barbamon! Leave this forest NOW!!!" Baihumon pounced at Barbamon period

 

"Not so fast now comma Baihumon. Chaos Flare!!!" Daemon exclaimed comma finally speaking. He sounds like Jimmy Carter. In case anyone wanted to know his vocal tone.

 

"Haha, I expected much more comma Baihumon, after all I thought you were a Sovereign. What a pathetic letdown. Now give me the Prime Key, hand it over easily easily makes this sentence sound weird and I will promise to finish you quickly." So says the stump by the side of the road. not Barbamon. You never said it was him. But everybody thinks it's Barbamon anyways. That no-good stump.

 

Baihumon groaned in pain. "Barbamon! Is that the Demon Lords' plan? To collect the pieces of Prime Key! Theirs no point, even if you manage nobody knows how and where the Prime Key can be used. Our dear Celestial Trinity gave their lives unnecessary comma to seal Primemon. I will not let their sacrifices be in vain! Sonic Wave!"

 

Baihumon roared , sending a wave at Barbamon and Daemon. Wow. So bland, so basic. And that was so awesome that deserved its VERY OWN PARAGRAPH. And a wave of? Air? Water? Kitties? Okay, so he's roaring out a wave of kitties. He's a bulldog-thing, so he OBVIOUSLY eats kitties, only to throw them up afterward.

 

"ENOUGH! Barbamon comma stop playing punctuation Let's finish him!" Daemon exclaimed comma speaking for the second time. Which is like saying " "Hey, Bob," Robert said, speaking for the 100,798th time. Gets monotonous after just one-two times, really.

 

"Very well HOW I WOULD EDIT THIS: ," Barbamon remarked, laughing maniacally. "It's been real something-or-other comma Baihumon." Barbamon disappeared. Which you say as if people just fade into oblivion every day. Yeah, sure, I was just hoverboarding around the block when Aerith came up to me in her jetpack and asked if I wanted to go get some Kafraggles at the Kafrooglemart.

 

"Chatsuramon! Take this data, and give it to Azulongmon! Leave me and go to Sovereigns Peak." And suddenly they can't both fight? Please tell us why this is urgent, and give us a little more background...

 

"B-baihumon, f-fine" ChatsuraMON stuttered in fear.

 

Barbamon appeared behind Baihumon. "Pandemonium Lost!!!" A colossal explosion of PINK, FLUFFY energy started to envelop Baihumon.

 

"Good job comma Barbamon period Now take his fractal code, and the Fragment."

 

"I Know comma you nitwi- What! Said with an exclamation mark. Not a question mark, or even both. You know, to clarify that it's wasn't in anger or anything. The fragment is missing PUNCTUATION" Barbamon exclaimed. Where'd all this talk of a fragment come from, since when was Baihumon weakened or deleted, and what's really going on!?

 

Meanwhile comma Chatsuramon was approaching Sovereigns Peak. Meanwhile, stuff that we already thought was happening...was happening. Just a way to put a useless little sentence into a confusing chapter.

So the plot is, I guess, that the Demon Lords want to awaken Primemon by getting fragments, which are obtainable by surrounding your opponent with pink, fluffy energy, regardless of whether they show any weakness or give it up. There's also some stuff about the Sovereigns that hasn't been explained at all. This doesn't really keep me on the EDGE OF MAH SEAT, it just leaves me sad and confused...

 

Plus, almost like Rucario had (not sure whether he still does it or not), you capitalize in out-of-place areas, which is really noticeable for me. Except Rucario capitalized nouns whereas you capitalize random words. This is a HABIT YOO MUST BREAK by only capitalizing at the start of sentences and proper nouns.

 

And for a final tip, the characters are Generic Valiant Guys and Generic Bad Guys. Try and think out their personalities, then see if you can incorporate them subtly into the story, maybe be giving quirks and what-not. I know it's hard and crap, but if successful you could have a bunch of fans.

 

Stay safe and keep squishin',

 

- Kendo Fish

[Skyfi]

Haha, thanks and i'm trying to break the habit but I just can't help it.