aznrice Posted October 27, 2009 Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 So did I epic fail? >_> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flash Flyer - Sakura Posted October 27, 2009 Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 No, this is pretty good for a newbie member. OCG is actually not too bad. Some small mistakes, but nothing major. 9.5/10 :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
aznrice Posted October 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 May you state the mistakes? I just want to review them so I could hopefully learn from them and apply them in the future. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Flame Posted October 27, 2009 Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 Really good for a new member, not an epic fail. The one big mistake I see is that I don't think this thing would survive long enough to activate its effect. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lexadin Posted October 27, 2009 Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 This is accually pretty good, I've ssen lot's of members Epic fail with their first card, but this is very good!1 tip though, whne the card has a long effect copy it below, so can someone fix it more easy!A 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jolta Posted October 27, 2009 Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 Since you're a newbie, 11/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
賢狼ホロ Posted October 27, 2009 Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 "This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except when your opponent controls more cards than you. When this card is successfully Special Summoned, put 1 "Death Counter" on it (max 5). Put 1 "Death Counter" during each of your Standby Phases. When this card has 5 "Death Counters" you can remove from play all cards on the field." Perhaps? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archelaus Posted October 27, 2009 Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned when your opponent controls more cards on the Field than you do. When this card is Special Summoned' date=' put 1 Death Counter on it (Max 5). Put 1 Death Counter [b']on this card[/b] during each of your Standby Phases. If this card has 5 or more Death Counters on it, you can remove from play all cards on the Field. Fix'd [Got the fixes from: Fiend Megacyber, Generic Counter monsters, etc.] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I rul3 Posted October 27, 2009 Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 pretty cool pic :] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Master White Posted October 27, 2009 Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 good for a new member. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KurashiDragon Posted October 27, 2009 Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 This isn't bad actually. No epic fail for you. OCG is bad in a sense but not terrible but the effect itself is strangely balanced for a Newb. The pic is pretty good. 7/10 Nice job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted October 27, 2009 Report Share Posted October 27, 2009 next time please write out the lore, it was a little hard to read Anyways, the OCG is very good for someone new, though the effect is a little too slow 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
aznrice Posted October 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted October 28, 2009 Aha, thank you everyone who gave me advice and commentary. I REALLY APPRECIATE IT. I'll remember the lore next time for longer cards and thank you Holo, for editing it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kazuki Shuheiwa Posted October 28, 2009 Report Share Posted October 28, 2009 May you state the mistakes? I just want to review them so I could hopefully learn from them and apply them in the future. :D And he asks. This is clearly an example of a non-noob, but real, constructive positive newbie on the forum. AND his card is good for a first. Y'know what? 10/10. Wanna see more.A little advice though in case you post long effects: Post the lore of your cards separately, in case it gets unreadable or too small. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ljvedder Posted October 28, 2009 Report Share Posted October 28, 2009 Good pic, very nice effect idea little ocg errors definitely not an epic fail :) tho effect is kinda slow and it seems it wouldn't last long anuf on the field to activate the effect but overall i say a good 7/10 :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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