Guest Delinquent Girl NiAtSoFi Posted June 23, 2010 Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 I can't believe I'm doing this...I'm curious. Do mine. http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-209423.html Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted June 23, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 23, 2010 i will start working on it. your review will be number seven since someone else already asked me to review their story. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted June 24, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 BUMPED! Hello readers! This is Pikachu! Pichu is in the hospital due to a problem with the Ojama's. Please read the next review to find out how he was hurt! [spoiler=#6: Summer Duels by Ecoboy1324]We now have another review! We will dive into Summer Duels...... The Pro Journal-Summer Duels A story written in the form of a journal! June 17, 2035 2035! Way to get into the future! The crisp golden sun was in the air as I strapped on my duel disk. Dueling for the fun of it just like we used to way back when dueling was everything to us and we were without holographic projectors. Back when dueling was not for the sake of money, fame or even for the sake of winning but just to enjoy the game game itself. Now you make dueling sound like crap. So many plays and weird strategies I came up with during those golden summer days. Though I have gained the status of professional duelist with the fame and the money from the sponsorships, I have never forgotten my roots which is why I am dueling today. DANG IT! He's a pro.... Now that means that there will be no mistakes in a duel... The deck that I chose for today's game is Ojama's. WHAT THE F***! The Ojama's! Are you outta your mind? We aren't that bad! I think we're great! Better then ever! Oh great! The Ojama Trio is here... Specifically, Its a style known around the pro's as Delecure Ojama's. It is a style for playing Ojama's I invented about 20 years ago and is part of what led to me becoming as popular and successful as I am. I still remember like it was yesterday the first duel I used it. It was against my friend Ryial and it is a crowning moment of my childhood. Ohhh! Flashback! I'll get the popcorn! June 17,2015 “I have two Marauding Captains and Royal Decree on the field, Shang.” Ryial said confidently looking at the playing field. “Granted I have used up every card in my hand, but it still doesn't overcome the fact that you have two thousand life points left without any monsters and two face-downs that can't be activated. How do you expect to win this duel if you can't attack or activate any of your traps?” As you see, in five years from now, a boy named Shang will be stuck in the worse position ever in a Yu-Gi-Oh duel! We now must read on! “I guess all I can do is try my friend. I shall draw to being my turn.” I said somewhat doubtfully, but then I picked up my card and smiled inside as I knew, then and there, that this move was a long shot but that luck would be on my side. “You may have a full eight thousand life points but with this one move I can win if luck is on my side. Quick! Get away from him, Luck! I'll start off by summoning Snipe Hunter and then tossing Ojamagic for it to activate its effect, but first I'll activate Ojamagic's effect pulling Ojamas Black, Yellow, and Green out of my deck. Look! He's using us! Now, Ryial, I assume you know what Snipe's effect is?” “Well, yes of course. First you toss a card to the graveyard, then you choose one card on my side of the field and roll a die.” He said with a calmness to his voice reminiscent to his calm demeanor. Ryial sounds like a know it all! “If the result is anything but one and six, the card in question is destroyed.” “Yep” I said with a hint of cockiness. “How lucky are you feeling my friend?” “Very” he said still with that coolness. “You Sure” said I sensing some misplaced sarcasm. This is where you use a sarcasm tag, children. I will now show you what on is. [/sarcasm] “Yes, I have two monsters that you must destroy in order for you to attack.” Starting to lose his trademark coolness he exclaimed. “Not to mention a Trap that makes your Traps null and void. I'd say that I had the upper hand.” That means Ryial is winning! “Well lets let fate decide then” I said boldly as I picked up and began to shuffle a die lying right beside me in my hand releasing it as I say. “For my first target I choose Royal Decree.” The die rolls for about three seconds. Three long and suspenseful moments filled with a hint of bittersweet saccharine but when it landed on the table finally the top showed 4, and I smiled to myself. YAY! *Crowd goes wild* “Lucky!” He exclaims as he put his trap into his graveyard “What Now?” he said out of polite and yet somewhat strange for him curiousness. In answer to his question with that cockiness I reply as I pick up the die again. I thought I told you to get away from him Luck! “Now I discard Ojama Black Say what? to activate Snipes effect again, This time on your Marauding Captain.” The die rolls for those 3 suspense filled moments again landing on two. “Your really pushing me here Shang you know that.” He sighs as he places his monster on top of his trap but then starts to get slightly nervous as he says. “Anymore?” If Shang has more Ojama's, yes. “I'm about to push it even further.” I said using all the force I could muster. “I activate Ojama Country” SEE! MORE OJAMA! Taking a pause to collect myself I place it on the mat right under my deck. “I am assuming you know what this does?” I think all of us know but Ecoboy is going make Ryial explain the card. “Yes Yes I know.” Said Ryial now completely nervous for he knew, From our past duels, that I was going to do something either incredibly dramatic or stupid and he wasn't exactly sure which it was yet. “Provided you have a Ojama creature on your side of the field. The attack and defense points of all monsters are switched.” He takes a short break to compose himself. “You can also send one Ojama from your hand to the graveyard and summon a Ojama from the grave once per turn if I'm not mistaken.” He tells us! “You are not,” I said still not exactly sure if what I was about to do was going to work. “Now let me proceed with my face down Macro Cosmos.” I flip the card on my left face up. “This removes all cards from the game instead of them going to the graveyard.” “This is a very weird deck your playing.” He said , Voice calming, and took a sip of water out of the water bottle that was right next to him. Drinking water was kinda random. “Are you sure you know what your doing Shang.” Of course he does! He's a pro! “What would make you say that Ryial” I said trying to keep him from noticing my nervous expression but failing miserably. “Come on Shang, Macro Cosmos in a Ojama deck.” He exclaims “Even for you that is a very weird choice for a archetype centered on locking down your opponent. Don't you think?” I still have no idea why he has to use an Ojama deck... But we're great! We can kick @$$! You guys suck. He's right.... Quick! Go get a fusion card, Ojama Green! I'm on it! What the hell are you guys doing? You'll see! .“Just watch and learn.”I said. “I remove Ojama Yellow from the game for Snipe Hunter's effect.” COME ON! Putting it right besides my deck I continued.”I then select your last marauding captain and roll my die.” The die rolls for a third time for those three awkward and suspenseful seconds only this time a certain feeling filled the atmosphere, It was a feeling of extreme tenseness as I realized yet again that I had to prove my self Bad grammar alert! I got it! Why does Ojama Green have a fusion card? Get over her Ojama Black! We all have to have our hands on the card! WHAT THE HELL!?!? Ojama King! Uhhh! I'm sorry for telling you guys that you suck and.. and... Too late fool! Goodbye! NOOOOO! ************************************************************************* Hey there fellow reader! This is Pichu big brother, Pikachu, here! Pichu has been hospitalized because Ojama King sat on him. That was golden! I wish I could show you the tape, but we have young people on this site. Remember the part when his eye popped out? LOL! HAHA! But that wasn't the best part, Raichu! The best part is when Ojama King... THERE ARE KIDS ON THIS SITE YOU BISH! Dang it! I forgot... Well anyways, Pichu couldn't finish this review due to the hilarious incident. He won't be able to do the next review. So that's where I step in! I shall do the next review! So tune in next time for Episode Seven: A Review by Pikachu!-----------------------------------------------------Pichu told me to give thanks to his guest stars. Yes even the one who crushed him! So here you go. Thanks to:Ojama Yellow, Ojama Black, Ojama Green, Ojama King, Raichu, and me, Pikachu! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ecoboy1324 Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 Nice stab at my story there. Can i point out a couple of things though,You have to remember that the metagame in fan fiction can be different then in real life and that I was taking Shang back to when he was a child running a non meta deck for the sheer fun of it. This entire story is essentially a flashback explaining why he duels through a moment in his life that is significant to him and also to open up the way for the series i am writing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jolta Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 I had no idea why I was laughing. Well you won't mind if the same person asks you to do another fanfic, would you? I asked this although I have only one fanfic... for now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted June 24, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 This is Pikachu! Nice stab at my story there. Can i point out a couple of things though' date='You have to remember that the metagame in fan fiction can be different then in real life and that I was taking Shang back to when he was a child running a non meta deck for the sheer fun of it. This entire story is essentially a flashback explaining why he duels through a moment in his life that is significant to him and also to open up the way for the series i am writing.[/quote']dont forget that shang uses Ojama's! THEY SUCK What did you say about Ojama's? NOTHIN! Good. You want to end up like Pichu. I had no idea why I was laughing. Well you won't mind if the same person asks you to do another fanfic' date=' would you? I asked this although I have only one fanfic... for now.[/quote']You were laughing because Pichu was injured. Pichu dosent mind doing another fanfic from you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eury Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 d00d liek, i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toffee. Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 d00d liek' date=' i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk ya, its liek 1 ov de besd fanficz on teh why-see-em siet Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Headmaster Monokuma Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 d00d liek' date=' i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk ya, its liek 1 ov de besd fanficz on teh why-see-em siet Iz otoo treu. Peolep shuodl red it an d go posts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Godot Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 d00d liek' date=' i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk ya, its liek 1 ov de besd fanficz on teh why-see-em siet Iz otoo treu. Peolep shuodl red it an d go posts. eets betr den narootoe. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Xazeon Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 d00d liek' date=' i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk ya, its liek 1 ov de besd fanficz on teh why-see-em siet Iz otoo treu. Peolep shuodl red it an d go posts. eets betr den narootoe.NUFING iz betr den narootoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 You know, I don't think that Pichu is getting the message here. Would it work if we all ignored his topic, so that he'd see how many people actually DO look at his reviews? I mean, we HAVE given him quite a few views on his topic that can be misconstrued as fame. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lonk Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 d00d liek' date=' i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk ya, its liek 1 ov de besd fanficz on teh why-see-em siet Iz otoo treu. Peolep shuodl red it an d go posts. eets betr den narootoe.NUFING iz betr den narootoe You all should leave Pichu alone. He's just trying to do his job, but no! Apparently, you all feel as though you have to troll him!! That's it! You don't give people respect because of your immaturity and all of your rebellion, then I am afraid you will never be welcome in my eyes again! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 d00d liek' date=' i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk ya, its liek 1 ov de besd fanficz on teh why-see-em siet Iz otoo treu. Peolep shuodl red it an d go posts. eets betr den narootoe.NUFING iz betr den narootoe You all should leave Pichu alone. He's just trying to do his job, but no! Apparently, you all feel as though you have to troll him!! That's it! You don't give people respect because of your immaturity and all of your rebellion, then I am afraid you will never be welcome in my eyes again!Though it had been clearly established at the start of his thread that he was ripping off Crab Helmet, so your mileage may vary. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eury Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 d00d liek' date=' i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk ya, its liek 1 ov de besd fanficz on teh why-see-em siet Iz otoo treu. Peolep shuodl red it an d go posts. eets betr den narootoe.NUFING iz betr den narootoe You all should leave Pichu alone. He's just trying to do his job, but no! Apparently, you all feel as though you have to troll him!! That's it! You don't give people respect because of your immaturity and all of your rebellion, then I am afraid you will never be welcome in my eyes again! Is this the part where I'm supposed to feel horrible and get all depressed and stuff? I forgot my script. D: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Headmaster Monokuma Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 d00d liek' date=' i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk ya, its liek 1 ov de besd fanficz on teh why-see-em siet Iz otoo treu. Peolep shuodl red it an d go posts. eets betr den narootoe.NUFING iz betr den narootoe You all should leave Pichu alone. He's just trying to do his job, but no! Apparently, you all feel as though you have to troll him!! That's it! You don't give people respect because of your immaturity and all of your rebellion, then I am afraid you will never be welcome in my eyes again! I have mine Eury, you can share. So what? It's clear that it's a rip-off, and a bad one at that. The characters pretty much have the same personality as him, and yes, he needs to learn that he can't rip things of and get away with it. You are much more immature for commenting, when you clearly said that you were going to stay out of it. Also, I don't care if you dislike me. The internet is srs business. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted June 24, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 d00d liek' date=' i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk like stop taking like that! You all should leave Pichu alone. He's just trying to do his job' date=' but no! Apparently, you all feel as though you have to troll him!! That's it! You don't give people respect because of your immaturity and all of your rebellion, then I am afraid you will never be welcome in my eyes again![/quote']Thanks, Chill!(is it ok if i call you that?) Though it had been clearly established at the start of his thread that he was ripping off Crab Helmet' date=' so your mileage may vary.[/quote']i aint ripping Crab! it is really Crab ripping you! *DUH-DUH-DUUUUUUUU!* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Godot Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 Though it had been clearly established at the start of his thread that he was ripping off Crab Helmet' date=' so your mileage may vary.[/quote']i aint ripping Crab! it is really Crab ripping you! *DUH-DUH-DUUUUUUUU!* i dun get it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toffee. Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 Though it had been clearly established at the start of his thread that he was ripping off Crab Helmet' date=' so your mileage may vary.[/quote']i aint ripping Crab! it is really Crab ripping you! *DUH-DUH-DUUUUUUUU!* i dun get it. Dramatic Reverb? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 Though really, people MAY respect you more as a Pichu if you actually posted some stuctured reviews once in a while, actually bringing up valid points and such, rather than only working with your bad brand of humor. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eury Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 [quote='-Pichu-' pid='4315904' dateline='1277404349'] [quote='Eury' pid='4315158' dateline='1277398310'] d00d liek, i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk [url=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OJ2mftZpfGE]http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-209454.html[/url] [/quote] like stop taking like that! [/quote] i wil tlk howvr i wnt 2 nao can u plz revew mah fic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Twig Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 You all should leave Pichu alone. LEAVE PICHU ALONE! *cries* He's just trying to do his job' date=' but no! [b']If he had a boss, I'm sure he would have been fired. He's not even trying. He looks at a line and types up some random boring obvious comment.[/b] Apparently, you all feel as though you have to troll him!! We do. There's a high chance that Pichu is trolling us, and trolling trollers is awesome. If he's not a troll, he should get the message that his reviews are bad. It's a win-win. That's it! What's it? You don't give people respect because of your immaturity and all of your rebellion, then I am afraid you will never be welcome in my eyes again! Either you made a run-on or you forgot the "If" at the beginning of the sentence. Either way, it doesn't make sense. Main Entry: re·bel·lion Pronunciation: \ri-ˈbel-yən\Function: nounDate: 14th century1 : opposition to one in authority or dominance First of all, no one is rebelling. Second, you don't know Pichu. He has ripped TWO times. He even tried to lie when I caught him once. Also: At one point, he was begging Crab to do a Foefic on his Ken 10 fic. Crab refused. Pichu then told Crab that has been stabbed and shot at with a gun(obvious lie). Of course, Crab still refused. People told Pichu to gtfo, and he did. Later, Crab reviewed his review, and this was his reply. f*** u crab! rot in hell! all your foe fics are about making people feel like s***! I HATE YOUR GUTS YOU MOTHERF***ER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PikMan liked my review and you make it like its s***! damn you! I HOPE U DROP DEAD! Long story short' date=' we're not going to give respect because he already lost his respect. If we're not welcome in your eyes, then it's a win-win. We don't get rants,[s'] and we still get to troll.[/s] Next time, do your research. Though it had been clearly established at the start of his thread that he was ripping off Crab Helmet' date=' so your mileage may vary.[/quote']i aint ripping Crab! it is really Crab ripping you! *DUH-DUH-DUUUUUUUU!* There have been many reviews like this in the past. I think it dates back even before YCM. No one is really ripping anyone, but you made yours like a rip because you added Ann 10 as a guest reviewer. Not only that, you've had your share of ripping. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lonk Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 The reason why I defend people who I don't know is because they never did give me a reason for me to disrespect him/her. I never seen any disrespect come from him (Except common critisism, which is perfectly acceptable) towards me, which is why I defend. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grunt Issun Posted June 24, 2010 Report Share Posted June 24, 2010 Why hasent this thread been locked yet? its becoming a real spam fest. for example Agian, more spamAnd there isnt only 3 ojamas Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pichu Posted June 25, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 25, 2010 @ Wynn: Nice spam and i know is more then three ojama's. i have the whole deck but i never use it.... Though really' date=' people MAY respect you more as a Pichu if you actually posted some stuctured reviews once in a while, actually bringing up valid points and such, rather than only working with your bad brand of humor.[/quote']then i ask if you could help me with my reviews? d00d liek' date=' i rly luv ur revewz dae let ppl no dat der storeez rnt vry gud n dat dae shuld wrk moar on dem i srsly tink dat u shuld revew mah fic heer iz da lnk like stop taking like that! i wil tlk howvr i wnt 2 nao can u plz revew mah fici will but someone asked before you, u must wait your turn Though it had been clearly established at the start of his thread that he was ripping off Crab Helmet' date=' so your mileage may vary.[/quote']i aint ripping Crab! it is really Crab ripping you! *DUH-DUH-DUUUUUUUU!* There have been many reviews like this in the past. I think it dates back even before YCM. No one is really ripping anyone, but you made yours like a rip because you added Ann 10 as a guest reviewer. Not only that, you've had your share of ripping.i have ripped before. but this isnt ripping! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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