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The Life of the Charmers

Grunt Issun

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this is my fanfic about the life of the elemental charmers, charecter Bios comming soon

 

[spoiler=episode 1: Pilot]

Welcome to the world. The world called the Duel Monster Spirit World. Most monster from the popular card game, duel monsters, but not all, lives in the world, only the ones who were in the ancient times, in Egypt, where the monsters would be released for battle.In this world, there are many lands. Many monsters. And with those monsters, many personalities. There are good ones, there are evil ones, and there are those who are completely neutral. We are about to join seven spell-casters.

 

There are six young spell-casters, five girls, and one boy, each of them are called, charmers, each of them control an element, and have a pet monster. Theres Wynn the wind charmer, with Petit Dragon. Hiita the fire charmer, with Fox Fire, Eria the water charmer, with Gigobyte, Assua the earth charmer, with Archfiend Mammoth, Lyna the Light charmer, with Happy lover, and Finally, Dharc the dark Charmer with Meda Bat. There is also one adult, named Doriado, she is light, but controls Fire, Wind, Earth, and water too. We join our young charmers today in the middle of a friendly duel between Hiita and Wynn.

Hiita: 3200 LP

Wynn: 2100 LP

 

“Okay Wynn, now I'm going to activate my face down card, DNA TRANSPLANT” Hiita said. The field already had, on Hiitas side, a face down, DNA transplant, Fox fire (300ATK/200DEF) and herself (500ATK/1500DEF). On Wynns side, just Petit dragon(600ATK/700DEF). “and with it, I'm changing all monsters to fire type, then I activate, book of moon, putting myself face down, finally I flip myself face up” Hiita said, and walked into the her spot, “and take control of your Petit Dragon” Hiita said, then she rose her staff up, and as it glowed, so did Petit Dragon. Then the petit dragon floated over to Hiitas side of the field. “Okay, now, Petit Dragon, DIRRECT ATTACK!” Hiita commanded, and the dragon flew out and hit Wynn.

 

Wynn: 1500 LP

Hiita: 3200 LP

 

“Next I'll have Fox fire attack, and while I'm at it, I'll attack to” Hiita told Wynn, then Fox fire ran forward twords Wynn, then, started on fire and tackled Wynn “Argh” Wynn grunted when she was tackled. “That was a good one Hiita.” Wynn said after she recovered. Then Hiita raised her staff, and then it started to glow, and shot out a bolt of fire. “Take that!” Hiita exclaimed, as she lowered her staff

Wynn: 700 LP

Hiita: 3200 LP

 

“Now I'll finish this, with TREMENDOUS FIRE!” Hiita exclaimed. Suddenly, a fire started to rise up below the two charmers, then it shot up all over the battlefield, burning both of them.

 

Wynn: 0 LP

Hiita: 2700 LP

 

 

“That was a good duel Wynn, but I ended up winning.” Hiita said.

“Yeah, you were amazing Hiita” Wynn congratulated.

All the other charmers were in the room watching, they all clapped. “Thank you, thank you.” Hiita said, and took a bow. Suddenly, Doriado walked in the room, and everybody looked around to see her. “Hello Doriado” they said in unison. “Hello girls” Doriado replied, “Ahem” Dharc said annoyed, “and Dharc” Doriado corrected herself, “Thank you” Dharc said, still annoyed. “you both did very well in your duel.” Doriado said to Wynn and Hiita. “Thank you” they both said in unison. “Doriado, why are you here?” Wynn asked her “I mean, aren't you supposed to be teaching a class?” Wynn asked again. “yes, and the class I'm teaching, is you.” Doriado told them. “Us?” Assua who was watching the duel said.

 

“Yes, despite how well you are at dueling, I want you all too enter the upcoming duel monsters tournament” Doriado explained “So, I will need to help you become as good as you can be” Doriado told them. “Well, you can bet that we'll do our best” Lyna said, and optimist as always. “Well thats good to know, your lesson will start right away the next morning, so get some rest tonight.” Doriado told them and walked out

 

“What kind of teaching do you think she's going to use?” Eria asked. “I assume that she's going to have us duel in order to learn” Assua answered. “Well either way, Doriado is right, we need to get some sleep.” Wynn told everyone, then walked out to go to her room. Everyone else did the same. That night, all the charmers were thinking about the training the next morning as they went to sleep, then during the night, well they slept, they were dreaming of the tournament. Waiting for the lesson the next day.

 

 

 

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[spoiler=Shouting Time:]

 

I think it's idiotic that duel monsters are playing a card game about themselves!

 

How does the Spirit World even work?! Whenever a person in the real world creates a new card, does the monster magically appear in the Spirit World?! I don't get that!

 

Does the cards in the Spirit World have a Spirit World of their own?!

 

There's a lot of telling, not enough showing!

 

Where exactly are they?! All you said was that they were in a room! Can you please describe the setting a little bit more?!

 

Keep different dialogues apart!

 

I still think it's idiotic that duel monsters are playing Yu-Gi-Oh! That's like us humans making a card game in which we are the characters and actually playing it!

 

I thought the duel was a complete waste of time and bored the heck out of me! But that might be just me! Still! It was boring and useless! How does this duel help advance the plot?!

 

I have no idea what the characters look like, and I'm not going to look at your avatar or sig! Why?! Because that's bad! Big kids don't read picture books!(Okay, maybe sometimes...) We still need character description!

 

The plot is very boring! I don't want to read about seven duel monsters playing Duel Monsters in a tournament! Unless you have some other plot coming up or a bunch of plot twists, this doesn't interest me!

 

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Well I may be lazy because of this but, I cant think of anything else the charmers would be doing to make the story have a plot, so I'm just sticking with this, but, about updating, I might not be able to soon, it will take a while because my own laptop has errors, this is my brothers, I'll try to update as soon as possible, I'll also try to give more desctriptions in Chapter 2.

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Oh god. Your first sentence alone is terrible.

 

It makes no sense. See what I'm doing here? Because, you should notice, that, or learn, that whenever a new comma, like this, is added, it means it's extra information. If you take the parts between the commas out, it still makes sense. Either that or it's a list in which case it still makes sense.

 

It makes no sense. See what I'm doing here? Because that that whenever a new comma is added it means it's extra information. If you take the parts between the commas out, it still makes sense. Either that or it's a list in which case it still makes sense.

 

Not quite.

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