The Epic of the charmers

[krspaceT1]

This story was made possible by the ideas given by valtmasternate and the people of the The Elemental Charmer Club; The charmers are always accepting. WOOHOO LYNA IS AMERICAN .

Now, its time to start a intro

 

[spoiler=Part 1]

 

You all are familiar with the Charmer cards, six young girls with the ability when flipped face up to take control of any monster that shares their attribute.

It was said once by Joey Wheeler that each card has a story behind it and it is quiet true.

Duel monsters spirits live in the realm of Hoiguy, or the spirit world. A long time ago, the darkest of creatures roamed free, and caused nothing but chaos. They were the three demon lords; Eraser, Dreadroot and Avatar. The seven powerful rulers; Kuraz, Mobius, Thestalos, Caius, Granmarg, Raiza and Zaborg, battled them in a legendary conflict. Defeating them, they trapped them in a seal beneath their lands. Years later, all but the mechanical Zaborg have had a heir to their thrones, six girls just reaching their twelfth birthday. They are....

 

Raiza the Storm Monarch

Who rules over the Skies

Those who serve him are of the Cloudians, Dragunity, Harpies ,and Blackwings

Father of Wynn

Mobius the Frost Monarch

who rules over the Water

Those who serve him are of the Ice Barrier, Legendary Ocean, Frogs, and the Dark Sea

Father of Eria

Granmarg the Rock Monarch

who rules over the Earth

Those who serve him are of the Naturia, Crystal Beasts, Amazons, and Koa'ki Meiru

Father of Aussa

Caius the Shadow Monarch

who rules over the Different Dimensions

Those who serve him are of the Different Dimensions, Guardians, Gravekeepers, and Six Samurai

Father of Dharc

Thestalos the Firestorm Monarch

who rules over the Time

Those who serve him are of the Jurraks, Fortune Ladies, Flamvell, and Volcanics

Father of Hiita

Zaborg the Thunder Monarch

who rules over Technology

Those who serve him are of the Machina, Baterymen, Cybers and Genex

Kuraz the Light Monarch

who rules over Heaven as The high King and leader of the Monarchs

Those who serve him are of the Lightsworns, Fabled, The Heroes and the Monarchs

Father of Lyna

The Demons have minions consisting of

The Infernity, Evil Heroes, Earthbound Immortals and Dark World, all trapped with them in their tomb, but for how long, as jelousy has spawned in the "heart" of one ruler

 

"Great Zaborg, ruler of Technology, I have heard of you" a voice said in the darkness, towards a large grayish silver metal armored being with a yellow circular back piece of gold and green "hair".

 

"And who might you be" Zaborg demanded. The figure solidified in the darkness, but not much could be determined of his looks, but he was in some sort of black armor.

 

"I am a emissary of the dark, and I know of your dissatisfaction with the rule of Kuraz, and how you yearn in jealousy as your companions, who are far less mighty then you, have all had heirs ,while you remain without one"

 

"How do you know this?"

 

"I have been watching you for quite some time, and I have a deal for you, and if you follow through, you will become the sole ruler of Hoiguy"

 

"Sole ruler?"

 

"The master of all, technology, winds, the sea, time, heaven, the earth and the different dimensions. And all that can be done, by releasing the demon gods!"

 

"I, can't!" Zaborg did not sound like he meant what he said "I sealed them away, they will destroy me as soon as they escape, and even if I could, all seven of us would be needed for the ritual"

 

"Your wrong" Zaborg was shocked at what this stranger was saying "I have a key that can unlock any door, and I have a message from the dark lords themselves" he pulled a metal circle with a depression inside it. Clicking a button on the side, a red hologram image rose from it, revealing a red tinted (Due to the hologram) green head in a skull, the head of Dreadroot.

 

"Zaborg, one of the stinking monarchs who dared trap us in this imprisonment in the underworld! Normally, if we ever caught any of you cowards in our reach, we'd destroy you, but this young man has a point. Together, we can take control of this world, and you will be well rewarded, Zaborg the Demon lord" Zaborg seemed to smile evilly.

 

"There is another point for this deal" the dark man commented, before drawing six duel monsters cards from his pocket, crumbled cards of the six Charmers.

 

"The others heirs!"

 

"Yes, and rather large pains in my butts, where I come from anyway. Now, I will free the Demon's for you, if you capture them, and bring them to me!"

 

"Yes"

 

"Good, we are of agreement" Zaborg raised his hands into the air, as a burst of electricity shot into the roof, raising a block from the floor below, with a large keyhole on it. The man nodded, before black sparkles started to solidify into something between a duel disk from someone familiar (Hint hint) and a large key. Aiming the arm that held it towards the keyhole, a black light flew from it and entered the keyhole, with the sound of a clicked lock ringing. The block shook, as it started to disintegrate, leaving a gaping hole. Immediately, a large green arm with white armor appeared through it, as Dreadroot was freed, followed by the dragon like Eraser and the giant black orb Avatar. Various dark world, Infernity, Evil Hero and Earthbound creatures followed them soon after

 

"Ah, the air of the fresh side of Hoiguy, it's been too long, it needs something though...."

 

"Destruction" Eraser commented

 

"Yes, quite, now Zaborg, please begin arranging a way to meet the kings, and their daughters, in one place. It would be, benificial, to do so"

 

Okay, the intro chapter is in. Who is the strange emissary (Its not Gorz)? What are the kings like? Will the Charmer's escape from their plans?

 

 

[Grunt Issun]

You said six young girls, thus this is a illogical fic

[C.F.Yuji]

You said six young girls' date=' thus this is a illogical fic

[/quote']

 

Not technically, as on the internet, there is something called Rule 63, meaning

Rule 63 is a rule of the internet that reads as follows: "For any given male character' date=' there is a female version of that character." This rule's exceptions are only in the instance that A: the male character is already so androgynous that a female version would be basically the same, or B: the female version hasn't been drawn yet.[/quote']

 

Even if you go by exception A, I see no problem with him wanting Dharc to be female.

[Grunt Issun]

Jerk, anyway, at least there is a fic about charmers

[C.F.Yuji]

lol, Jerk?, That ain't nice XD. I was just saying as long as he's writing it, I guess he could call Dharc a girl if he wanted :P.

[krspaceT1]

Don't worry, Dharc will still have plenty of Humor confusion (Especially what will happen in the next chapter)

[Takashi125]

...Keep Dharc a guy for the love of all that is holy... It'll make things much more hilarious. At least that's imo from seeing other animes where there's only one male protagonist amidst multiple female protagonists. *cough* *cough* Negima *cough* *cough* XD anyway... It's a very interesting start... though having the really nasty antagonists saying *Stinking* and *pains in my butts" <_< Yea that kinda ruined the evilness for me... XD

[Phantom Roxas]

Can we separate Chapter Plot and Chapter Villains from the actual story with spoilers? It just looks kind of unorganized.

 

It seems way too rushed, and there are still some punctuation errors.

[krspaceT1]

[spoiler=Chapter 2]

 

"Zaborg, It's been too long" a large golden armored man chuckled, who had a regal style to him. Zaborg was communicating by what looked like hologram tech.

 

"Kuraz, my lord. I heard you have a heir"

 

"Yes, my little Lynna. You know, I heard the others have their own, but I haven't been able to meet them yet, its just been too busy in these 20 years of peace"

 

Zaborg seemed to be thinking up something "What about you invite them to your place, in a get together, a shinding, a party" Kuraz chuckled happily.

 

"That's a great idea Zaborg, and its going to be a formal" and with that chuckle, he turned off the communicator. Zaborg shook his head.

 

"That fool, and a formal, ha I'd be lucky if some of them die in those old style suits of theirs"

 

"You better hope not, I want them to suffer as we did" Dreadroot growled.

 

"Not to mention, those girls are no use to me dead" the dark man said seriously.

 

Later

 

"Now Lynna, I know it will be most exhilarating meeting the other princesses, but you must remain formal, give a good impression, after all, one day you will be co ruler with them" he smiled at a young girl with short white hair, in a very old fashioned white and black dress (Kuraz is a real old timer when it comes to how he and his family acts)

 

"Yes father"

 

"Good, now I must warn you, some of these girls may act a little off...." he was interrupted by what sounded like a really big mob. Coming up to the palace entrance they were in was a large black chariot (Actually its a pitch black convertible, but they don't have gas) pulled by the flaming Juracc Brachis beasts. Jumping out of the driver's seat was a man the same size as Kuraz with pale red armor strolled out, followed by a girl around Lynna's age with short, red hair in a pale brown dress. She had a look that said, bother me and die.

 

"Kuraz, wus up dude!" the tall man smiled.

 

"Huh?" Kuraz said confused "Speak English Thestalos"

 

"I'm already speaking English big K!" he laughed "What I tell you Hiita, he's a bucket of laughs"

 

"Bucket of laughs?" Lynna was confused.

 

"Now, let's get this party started, kus I ain't wannin to stick around to long on the wait, else it'll be bad for all of us, dig it?"

 

"Um, please try and speak English" Kuraz sighed " I can not understand your accent"

 

"Dude, you might want to get this party started, my little hot head here is getting steamed!"

 

"Steamed?" Kuraz was not understanding half of what Thestalos was saying "Admittedly, that was better, but steamed?"

 

"Yeah, you should of seen how steamed she was when you made this ultra formal, dude, their still cleaning the castle from the damage"

 

"She did what! You should punish her, that child is a danger!" Hiita was glaring at Kuraz. Thestalos was chuckling.

 

"You raise your kid your way, I raise mine mine, K. Hot head here needs to be independent and expressive, like the magma, you could think 'bout that for you kid dude, does she even have friends, a pet even?"

 

"You just said to raise my kid my way, I think" Kuraz sighed. "Anyway, Lynna is a perfect little angel"

 

"Um, is that another of the big M's, cool its the big C, Caius!" he cheered as a pitch dark chariot pulled by the mummy like Nightmare Horse's galloped towards the spot. The ride stopped as a black cloaked armored man with purple tinted armor with a horned helmet stepped out. Following him was a kid with pitch black hair in a black dress.

 

"Um, why is your son in a dress?" Kuraz asked confused. The kid glared in fury as Caius chuckled darkly.

 

"No, this is my daughter, Dharc (Dar-ce as you can pronounce it in this story). Now, can the party start, you called this thing right after I sealed a rather nasty time, space rip, and I'd rather not risk another universal near collapse"

 

"Another? What do you mean Caius dude?"

 

"Um, never mind, here comes Raiza" Caius quickly changed the subject as a chariot came flying, pulled by two Luster Dragon #1's. Landing, another large armored man with green armor and a blue billowing cape, followed by another girl. She had long green hair in a pony tail and a similarly colored Dress, and unlike Dharc and Hiita, seemed not to mind it.

 

"Was up Raiza!"

 

"Its all good Thestalos" Raiza nodded. "How's it been Kuraz, haven't seen you in ages"

 

"Great" Kuraz nodded

 

"And this must be the little Wynn I've been hearing about" Kuraz smiled. Wynn seemed nervous about being the center of attention.

 

"Yes, this is my little tweety sweaty" Raiza smiled. Hiita giggled to herself

 

"Tweety sweaty!" Wynn was blushing out of embarrassment.

 

"What's so funny" Lynna asked confused. Hiita was slightly disturbed by her lack of knowledge, when out of nowhere, a huge slab of rock rose from the ground. Startled, the girls yelped in shock as the rock receded, revealing a brown painted armored man with very large hands and a girl with brown grandma hair and glasses, in a brown dress of a darker shade than Hiita's.

 

"Whohoho, you rock in entrances Granmarg!" Thestalos chuckled.

 

"Word"

 

"Does anyone speak English anymore" Kuraz sighed.

 

"I do, I'm just fluent in Thestalosian" Granmarg laughed with a earthy chuckle before returning to silence.

 

"The silent rock" Caius commented to himself.

 

"Now, where is Mobius" Kuraz commented concerned.

 

"What did you expect, he's always late, he moves like a Glacier!" Thestalos sighed.

 

"I heard that" a voice called, as a blue carriage, somehow pulled by a swarm of T.A.D.P.O.L.E.S'.S landed, as a man in blueish gray armor, with a blue cape and a almost beak like nose walked out, followed by a girl with long blue hair in a ponytail and a light blue dress.

 

"Now, can we finally get this party over with" Cauis shook his head.

 

"Lynna, please take the girls to the side room, we have professional stuff to discuss"

 

"Yes father" Lynna led the other girls away.

 

"Yes father" Hiita muttered under her breath.

 

5 minutes later

 

"I CAN'T TAKE THIS FORMAL ANYMORE!" Hiita was freaking out, pulling at her hair "And this stupid dress, what is with you guys!"

 

"It looks good on you" Lynna commented "Plus don't you always wear one?" they just stared at her

 

"Um, we sort of don't" Dharc commented "And do you know how often when I have to dress up...."

 

"You get mistaken for a boy" Wynn commented.

 

"YES! It gets annoying. I'd give to at least have something, you know, female to stop those questions"

 

"Um, well, you know, its not all that good, you know" Eria tried to cheer her up "Do you know how often I get people staring at me...."

 

"Because guys realize your a girl!"

 

"Just trust me, your just one of those late bloomers"

 

"You better be right" Hiita then broke the weird conversation

 

"Urg, how long is this thing going to last, I want to get in some actual clothes!" Hiita moaned

 

"Those are actual cloths"

 

"I didn't mean it like that light head!"

 

"My dad it should take approximately two hours" Aussa commented.

 

"Two, hours!, oh hit me!"

 

Whack!

 

"OW!" Hiita was rubbing her cheek.

 

"You did ask" Lynna said concerned. Hiita rolled her eyes.

 

"Girl, you do know what sarcasm is"

 

"Sarcasm?"

 

"Hey, did anyone notice that Zaborg was missing" Eria commented.

 

"Oh, father said that he called that something had came up, and he'd be late" Lynna told them.

 

"Hey, do you have any grub" Hiita commented as her stomach growled.

 

"Gross, why would we have bugs" Lynna was shocked

 

"That's another name for food, genius, and that was sarcasm so it means the opposite" Hiita sighed.

 

"Oh, you mean for evening dinner, we had that an hour ago" Hiita had a shocked look in her eyes

 

"Um, fire girl, you alright?" Wynn asked. Hiita then stormed out of the room.

 

"Hey, you can't leave, my father..."

 

"Your father, oh who cares what he thinks, and you better have some good grub here, like aged corn dogs!" she vanished around the corner.

 

"Did she just say aged corn dogs" Era was looking a little green.

 

"Yes, those from the fire element find the taste of corn dogs aged for a week in warm conditions to be a rare and expensive delicacy for some strange reason" Aussa commented also a little green.

 

"You know, we don't carry such disgusting entrees!" Lynna said disgusted

 

"Then I would recommend hiding under a solid object, like this table" Dharc ducked under the table in the room.

 

"Um, what?" Lynna was confused

 

"Basically, Hiita will get really mad, and for my health, I call dibs!" Aussa also ducked under the table.

 

"Hey, what about us!"

 

With Hiita

 

Hiita was sneaking around the castle, looking for anything edible, when she heard the voices of their fathers

 

"I mean, when lava solidifies in the ocean, is it fair that I loose water space?"

 

"Do I get that space, dude, I could use a beach house"

 

"Can we hurry this up, I have a space rip to make sure it hasn't opened again, I don't want another Atlantis lawsuit"

 

"Another what!"

 

"Nothing" Hiita laughed to herself, before a crash of lightning was heard.

 

"Ah Zaborg, good to see you" Kuraz's voice rung.

 

"Sorry I was soo late, I had something to take care of back home"

 

"Well dude, better late then never!"

 

"You know, I've always found the way you talk highly illogical and annoying"

 

"What do you mean..."

 

ZAP

 

Hiita's eyes widened as it sounded like lightning had struck her father

 

"ZABORG, what are you doing!" Kuraz yelled before Hiita heard the sound of mechanical footsteps.

 

"Sorry old man, I'm taking control now, and my friends are going to help me" Hiita mouthed the word "friends".

 

"Wait, those are the Demon Lord's minion's!" Hiita was now scared as Kuraz continued to rant "What are you planning, ahhhhhh!" Hiita started to back away slowly.

 

"I smell girl!" a fiendish voice rang out. Eyes wide, Hiita started to run the other way.

 

"Stupid dress!" She cursed as she tripped on the girl fabric. Pushing herself up, she heard the clinking of fiendish footsteps, and turning she was staring at a man with brownish black fiend like armor with a dark looking tail and wings. It was Evil Hero, Infernal Prodigy

 

"Why, if it ain't Thestalos's little sparky!" he laughed evilly. Hiita rolled up her dress sleeves.

 

"Oh what, are you preparing for some sort of oh I'm such a helpless girl...." he didn't have a chance as Hiita punched him in the face, then kicked him in the nuts. He bent over in agony as Hiita ran away.

 

Back to group

 

The other girls were just bored ,when Hiita burst into the room.

 

"Zaborg, fathers, attack, evil, fiends!" Hiita was hyperventilating.

 

"What!?" Lynna and the others said in shock.

 

"I hear them!" a fiendish voice called out. Gulping, the charmers poked their heads around the corner of the wall, seeing a mod of Infernity Beasts, Broww, Huntsman's of Dark Worlds, Machina Soldiers and Genex Gaia's were heading there way.

 

"Wait, aren't some of those Zaborg's minions!" Wynn commented.

 

"Just run!" Hiita demanded as the girls ran the opposite way.

 

"Get them!" they pursued the girls outside, to the edge of the cloud they were on.

 

"Um, can any of you fly?" Dharc asked "Like, you Tweety"

 

"That is not my name, and no I can't!"

 

"I know my father will save us" Lynna commented.

 

"Oh just shut it!" Hiita pushed Lynna off the cloud.

 

"Was that necessary?" Eria sighed.

 

"Either that, or them!" the army was getting closer.

 

"Well, I lived a good life!" Dharc jumped off the cloud, followed by Hiita.

 

"Um, the likelihood of a safe landing is not in our favor here!" Aussa quivered before Wynn and Eria dragged her over the cloud with them, as the dark army got to the edge.

 

"They're never survive" one commented.

 

"Well, whose telling the bosses?" they looked uneasy

 

"Um, the new guy!"

 

"Hey!"

 

Far below

 

The girls had fallen into a pond, and only Eria and Hiita were still conscious. Pulling the others out, they slumped down, exhausted.

 

"Urg, this isn't, cool" Hiita sighed, before she and Eria also collapsed. It was then that a shadow of a woman, with a large headdress, appeared over them

 

"Oh dear"

 

 

 

[Takashi125]

O_o Atlantis Lawsuit...? LMFAO XDDDDDDDD Oh wow! That really killed me! XDD

 

Anyway... yea... still lacking in alot of detail... do improve on that.

[krspaceT1]

Well, its been a while. I was just kind of hoping for more publicity myself. Since I don't curse, any point that would contain a curse will be censored.

 

[spoiler=Part 3]

 

Hiita slowly opened her eyes, to find herself on a soft cot bed somewhere, a small bedroom that looked like it had hastily been stocked with cot beds. Pushing herself up, she noticed the other girls in similar beds.

 

"Um, hello, anyone here" Hiita called, waking the other girls.

 

"Can't anyone get some sleep here" Dharc grumbled yawning.

 

"Hey, what time is it" Lynna asked as she got up, before seeing a clock. The clock said 7:00

 

"7! Oh, I slept two hours in!" Lynna started to panic as the other girls looked on strangely.

 

"Hey, 7's early for me" Hiita commented. "Usually me and my dad don't get up until at least 8"

 

"Does anything get done in that messed up place of yours! You sleep the day away, while important things go on that should be dealt with immediately. Your father must be a lazy sloth, nothing like my dad. He doesn't even act proper as a king!" Lynna said disgusted. Hiita had steam, literally, coming out of her ears, that was quickly darkening into smoke (What, each Charmer has humor like that related to their element). The other girls looked sort of scared, and Wynn hid her head under her blankets. Hiita then hopped out of bed and stomped over to Lynna, and held her up by the collar of her dress.

 

"Can't, breathe!"

 

"Listen hear daddies girl, I don't think you get anything that's happened here, your no longer in your uptight cloud castle with your dad, Zaborg betrayed our fathers and has them. Now I'd suggest you stop acting all, oh daddies going to save us. AND IF YOU EVER INSULT MY FATHER OR HIS KINGDOM AGAIN...." Hiita tossed Lynna straight into the wall. She hit the wall with a huff and fell to the floor, crying. Hiita didn't look at her as she sat down on her own bed.

 

"Um, Hitta right, that was a little harsh" Eria scolded. Fresh steam began burrowing out of Hiita's ears

 

"A little, she did toss her into a wall and nearly choke her" Wynn popped her head out from under her blankets. Hiita glared at them, and Wynn ducked under again as Eria stood up to confront her.

 

"What gives you the right to act like that!"

 

"That little light (Censor) insulted my families honor" Hiita snarled "If I was in a worse mood, I'd duel her, over a pit of boiling lava filled with Solar Flare Dragons, to the death!"

 

"Um, let's not do that just yet" Dharc pointed out.

 

"Good point, Dharc. The Solar Flare Dragons are still full from the last person who insulted my father" the girls looked at her with concern.

 

"Um, okay, getting off this topic, how did we get here?" Aussa looked around for any sign of someone.

 

"I found you" a voice said from the hallway. Turning, they saw a blond haired woman with long hair, and a large red and green hat. She had a long blue and gold robe, with blue and green upper shoulder top parts.

 

"Um, hello, who are you?" Dharc asked. The lady bowed.

 

"I am the Elemental Mistress, Lady Doriado, and what are your names if I may ask. I found you out cold in the woods, and brought you to my home until you recovered. You've been out cold for 24 hours!"

 

"Really, oh I'm Eria"

 

"You can call me Wynn"

 

"Ow, I'm Lynna"

 

"Oh dear, are you okay" Doriado noticed her banged up against the wall.

 

"What, she was asking for it, by the way I'm Hiita"

 

"Why did you do such a violent act?"

 

"She insulted me and my family"

 

"Is that any reason to give her a concussion?"

 

"She doesn't have one, I can give her one though if you want"

 

"Don't you dare, um and you two, what about you little boy" Dharc had a angry anime tick mark.

 

"I AM A GIRL, MY NAME IS DHARC, DAR-CE!"

 

"Oh, I'm sorry, my bad Ms. Dharc"

 

"And I'm Aussa, it's a pleasure to meet you"

 

"As it is to you, I've heard those names before, let me think... OH wait those are the names of the Monarch's kids. I've read stories about you"

 

"Huh?" Aussa was confused.

 

"What, someone wrote about us?" Wynn said disturbed.

 

"I've heard your names in the Duel Monster's Inquirer. Dharc, do you have anything to say about the Atlantis..."

 

"No comment" Dharc interupted

 

"The what?" Lynna asked.

 

"No, comment" Dharc glared, ending this train of conversation.

 

"Wait, how did you end up here, this is Magician Town, none of your father's rule here?" the Charmers explained what happened.

 

"That's awful" Doriado cried "I'm sorry for what happened to you poor little girls"

 

"You can feel sorry, or you can help us save them" Hiita said, probably calmer then she had been since this began.

 

"Yes, your right. I can teach you, techniques that could help you save them" Doriado said briskly.

 

"You can!"

 

"I can. Your training starts tomorrow, but for now, you should go and enjoy the wonders of Magician Town, and maybe get some more, movement allowing, training appropriate, cloths"

 

"What, but what's wrong with this, its so elegant" Lynna let her dress's bottom ripple elegantly. Hiita and the others sweat dropped.

 

"Wait, so I can finally get out of this stupid thing!" Hiita smiled.

 

"Um, sure, but I don't have anything for young girls...." Hiita started to unstrap her Dress, as it fell, pooling around her feet. "Oh, you do have something"

 

"AH, YOUR INDECENT!" Lynna covered her eyes.

 

"Um, she has cloths under the dress, you know" Dharc rebutted.

 

"Those aren't cloths, that's Scarlet girl wear!" Lynna looked sick (Harry Potter Reference). Hiita had a short black skirt, and a white button up shirt that was unbuttoned half way, showing off a flat stomach. She had a black tube top sort of looking like a bra around her chest, that showed some, girlish stuff. Dharc sighed to herself jealously.

 

"Hey, in my place, this is formal" Hiita commented quite ready to kill the girl by now.

 

"Um, I'm not going to ask what's casual" Aussa sighed. "But unlike you, we don't have any appropriate..."

 

"That's not appropriate, except in maybe a brothel!"

 

"Lynna, say one more thing, and your rump is going to be Solar Dragon food"

 

"Girls!" Doriado yelled "No dueling, or fighting of any kind! There is a whole market in Magician Town, and you don't have to dress like Hiita, so just get what you want, but you guys have to pay"

 

"How?" Lynna asked confused. Sighing, Hiita pulled something out of her shirt pocket, a credit card.

 

"How does that thing not fall out?" Aussa asked confused.

 

"That's classified, like Atlantis"

 

"No comment!"

 

"Um, so anyone else here have a card on them?" Eria fished in her pocket's and pulled out one.

 

"My dad says its for emergencies only, so I guess it works now. So lets see, you can take Dharc and Wynn shopping, and I'll take Lynna and Aussa. That way, no one dies during the trip"

 

"Ahhhhh"

 

Well, that's chapter 3, should be the plot moving, humor based thing I'm always going for

 

 

[DARKPLANT RISING]

It's a lot better than your other one. At least, it's original. Though Dhark is male. And it's the Wicked Gods.

 

Just, the grammar needs a lot of improvement, and it's hard to understand.