slime cards

[A1v1n1]

so this is my first card...
tell me is it fair to use or not.
[IMG]http://i55.tinypic.com/10gb9f5.jpg[/IMG]
[size="5"]2nd card! cause I see so many people commenting thx guys[/size]

[IMG]http://i51.tinypic.com/2yuipah.jpg[/IMG]

YAY BRAND NEW CARD!

[IMG]http://i55.tinypic.com/2e653wk.jpg[/IMG]

[size="7"]everything is original (INCLUDING PICTURES! I DREW THEM MYSELF!!!)[/size]

NEED HELP WITH SPOILERS!!!!

[A1v1n1]

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[War Chess]

Its fair and balanced.
I am an OCG maniac, so i'm telling you that the OCG is bad.

[<}Alpha Frogodile{>]

Change the effect to:

"This card can not be destroyed by battle and can attack your opponent's Life Points directly."

Not bad for your first card.

7/10 for you

[Zeppeli Gyro Supreme]

I think the effect is fine. Better first card than a lot of people can come up with. Usually they're extremely overpowered or extremely underpowered. This is just fine, though. Perhaps because of its Level, though, it could have some more ATK.

[A1v1n1]

i was thinking about a card that can directly hit the opponents LP so that's where i got my inspiration
2nd card posted 59 minutes after i post this thx totdloe for the effect correction

[A1v1n1]

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[Teh ZWOOTS]

I say it's overpowered. A monster who can attack your opponent's Life Points directly whilst being invulnerable to attack is a very imbalanced combination, even at only 500 ATK, which can be boosted. You can diminish the overpowered traits of the first card bu adding a clause which states "battle damage applied normally," which indicates that, when the monster is selected as an attack target and defeated, you will still lose Life Points, making it liability in some cases, and an ace in others. Also, it would help if you worded the effect so that it can only inflict 500 points of damage. There are many ways you can do this, all offering different levels of efficiency. For a simple patch, you can state "this card is unaffected by Equip Spell and Trap Cards." With this, you can prevent added power from Spell and Trap Cards that add ATK/DEF, but it leaves other methods unchecked, such as Field cards and Monster Effects. I could offer many-a-way to do this using different methods, but, with all due respect, I do not feel like wasting my time by going over one-hundred different ways to word the same effect. As you advance in your OCG skills, things like this will become natural.

As stated above, there are, OCG errors. Although, I must say, being a newbie, your mistakes are minuscule, and I will look the other way, for the most part.

Your strive to create original artworks for your cards is admirable, and although few share your skill with Paint, possibly the worst picture editing program of all time, I say that using pictures from dA, or a less overused source, would be produce better-looking cards. No offense, but 2 weeks in Photoshop tends to look better than an hour with Paint.

Although they are not uncommon practice in this corner of the YCM, fake Types are usually frowned upon. Personally, I find them irritating because they're so easy to avoid. Water can be replaced with its formal version, Aqua, with absolutely no thought or effort.

I'm not gonna lie; the second card is overpowered beyond all hope for redemption. In formal duals, each player is bestowed with a mere 4,000 Life Points. If you managed to inflict 1,200 points of damage, and then bring out that monster, it's pretty hard for your opponent to avoid defeat.

Overall, you did well for a newbie. I am especially pleased that you formatted the card set correctly.
6/10

[Lord Ursus]

Strategically, having this card attack opponents directly will most commonly leave it in Attack Position, where you can get hit for a heck of a lot more than you inflict.

In YGO we play with 8000 Life Points, ZWOOTS...

I'd say this card is powerful, though strategically balanced.

The image is rather cute, but sadly doesn't look like a realistic card image.

Please change the type to Aqua.

Not perfect, not bad. A solid first attempt.

G.

[A1v1n1]

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[Teh ZWOOTS]

[quote name='Lord Ursus' timestamp='1291902034' post='4839685']

In YGO we play with 8000 Life Points, ZWOOTS...

[/quote]
4,000 is still common practice, though. Anyway, if the card was able to take Battle Damage, like I said, it wouldn't be bad.

[A1v1n1]

thx for telling stuff to fix my cards

[DARKPLANT RISING]

[quote name='Teh ZWOOTS' timestamp='1291960280' post='4841157']
4,000 is still common practice, though. [/quote]
[img]http://karrierebibel.de/wordpress/wp-content/uploads/2007/08/wut.JPG[/img]
lolno

OT: Very fun card, though I might want to make it have 1000 ATK or something. Right now the damage you take would be heavier.

[Grygrflzr]

2500 is still a large number... It's like two hit KO for ppl who play with 4000 Life Points (which I do)...
I suggest lowering it down... Maybe to 1800? Or at least make it 'destroyable by battle'.

[Toffee.]

I'm [i]PRETTY SURE[/i] there are no Equips that can 'Raise an effect'.

[quote name='Grygrflzr' timestamp='1292041459' post='4843394']
2500 is still a large number... It's like two hit KO for ppl who play with 4000 Life Points (which I do)...
[/quote]
In 4K format, burn cards are tier 0.

[Grygrflzr]

[quote name='Armadilloz' timestamp='1292043114' post='4843472']
I'm [i]PRETTY SURE[/i] there are no Equips that can 'Raise an effect'.
[/quote]
But there are Equips that can Raise an ATK.
And btw, who are you saying this to?

[A1v1n1]

comin soon(a couple seconds after this was commented)! Goowey King! and fixed Goowey Warrior and Goowey!!