Hollow_Dragonite Posted June 17, 2011 Report Share Posted June 17, 2011 [center][font="Comic Sans MS"] My First Completed Set. I need major feedback, so go ahead and don't hold back. [img]http://img202.imageshack.us/img202/1511/325778.jpg[/img][img]http://img695.imageshack.us/img695/1511/325778.jpg[/img][img]http://img94.imageshack.us/img94/705/325778s.jpg[/img][img]http://img543.imageshack.us/img543/1511/325778.jpg[/img][img]http://img837.imageshack.us/img837/1511/325778.jpg[/img][img]http://img811.imageshack.us/img811/1511/325778.jpg[/img][img]http://img709.imageshack.us/img709/1511/325778.jpg[/img][img]http://img33.imageshack.us/img33/1511/325778.jpg[/img][img]http://img811.imageshack.us/img811/1699/325778m.jpg[/img][img]http://img857.imageshack.us/img857/1511/325778.jpg[/img][img]http://img641.imageshack.us/img641/1511/325778.jpg[/img][img]http://img151.imageshack.us/img151/3252/325778h.jpg[/img][img]http://img593.imageshack.us/img593/1511/325778.jpg[/img][img]http://img808.imageshack.us/img808/1511/325778.jpg[/img] And the Field Spell: [img]http://img685.imageshack.us/img685/1511/325778.jpg[/img] [/font][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
lvl1hero Posted June 17, 2011 Report Share Posted June 17, 2011 [u]OCG[/u] = [b][u]ALMOST[/u] Perfect![/b] ... i noticed a few errors like you spelled the numbers out (es: "one" should be "1")... and small stuff like "not effected" should be "unaffected" but hey!... who cares!... xP [u]Images[/u] = [b]Good[/b] ... good good... ... except what the hell happened to [b]Demon Pawn Ghostback[/b] hahaha... funny... ... almost like you did that on purpose... [u]Comments[/u]: [b][u](1)[/b][/u] ... [b]Shadow Lord Enjeru[/b] is a pretty epic risky card... ... i like... though... i think the effect can be made clearer or better?... [b][u](2)[/b][/u] ... [b]Demon Pawn Ghostback[/b] is broken... (haha)... yeah... funny looking card that cannot be destroyed unless you tribute or Synchro it... which makes it broken... ... you'll have to choose between Spells and Traps or let it be destroyable by monster effects... and even then... since it can't be destroyed by battle it's still a pretty neat OP card with or without one or the other effect... [b][u](3)[/b][/u] [b]Shadow Manipulator Kyuketsuki[/b] is also broken... and by broken i mean not OP (over powered)... its simply broken... xP ... its a [b]Sinister Serpent[/b] with [u]SUPER[/u] high ATK... and i understand that its weakness is being "[u]removed from play[/u]"... but still... not every deck/player will carry something like that to destroy [b]Shadow Manipulator Kyuketsuki[/b]... ... maybeeeeee... you can give it a drawback?... a negative effect for being special summoned from the graveyard for balance?... [b][u](4)[/b][/u] ... i like [b]Angelic Deciever Shiruba[/b] the most... and [b]Zombie Archlord Lucifer[/b] is pretty tight... [b][u](5)[/b][/u] ... something feels wrong with [b]Demon Wolf Akki[/b]... ... its too OP... hmmm... choose 2 of the 3 (Spells, Traps, & Effect Monster's effects)... or lower his ATK to like 1600 at the least?... that card is a killer... xP [b][u](6)[/b][/u] ... [b]Cresent Moon Fairy - Celia[/b] is broken for being able to special summon ANY dark monster from your hand... ... haha... be careful how you write out your effects on your cards... xP [b][u](1)[/b][/u] ... the rest of your cards are not bad... ... not bad... ------------------------------------------------- [u]Overall Rating[/u] = [b]6.5/10[/b] ------------------------------------------------- ... dont be shocked... this is a good rating... xP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Not-so-Radiant Arin Posted June 18, 2011 Report Share Posted June 18, 2011 I've never seen an effect like Enjeru's effect. I think it's good that you brought a new, interesting effect to the table. But then again, it seems like it's really difficult to Synchro Summon, because you need at least three monsters in order to Synchro Summon it, and getting all those monsters out on the field at once can take a lot of time and patience. Same can be said for Shiruba and Kyari. It must really suck for the guy that decided to run LS against these cards A few grammatical errors, nothing too severe or noticeable. But then again, I've been doing journalism my entire life and have taken twelve credits worth of English during my schooling career, so anything slightly out of place I notice right off the bat. I think my favorite card is the Wolf. It's pretty balanced and it's image is awesome. My least favorite card is Lucifer, just because I've seen too many Decks/Sets on here that already have a Lucifer. I personally think it's getting old. Breakdown: 8/10 - Concept and originality 9/10 - OCG 7/10 - Artwork Total: 8/10 (Great!) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hollow_Dragonite Posted July 7, 2011 Author Report Share Posted July 7, 2011 Ok thanks guys really appreciate it. Will try to fix the OP/broken cards soon! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Millenium Master Posted July 8, 2011 Report Share Posted July 8, 2011 7.5/10 They are good... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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