PokeDaSmot Posted June 17, 2011 Report Share Posted June 17, 2011 [center][font="Century Gothic"][color="#000000"][img]http://img88.imageshack.us/img88/6690/432835.jpg[/img] Transcendent Wolf Ookami-Sama DIVINE ********** [Divine-Beast / Effect] This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by banishing 3 Level 4 or higher monsters you control. If this card attacks a Defense Position monster, inflict piercing Battle Damage to your opponent. When this card destroys a monster by battle: Place 1 Divine Counter on it. Once per turn: You can remove 2 Divine Counters from this card; Double the ATK of 1 of your monsters with the lowest Level, except this card, you control until the End Phase. When this card is destroyed: Banish it and Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower monster from your hand or your Deck. ATK / 3000 DEF / 1500 Tell me what you think.[/color][/font][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Master White Posted June 17, 2011 Report Share Posted June 17, 2011 Dang good OCG, a quick touch-up Use "can", not may, special summoned= Special Summoned light=LIGHT Maybe a little OP'd or Up'd, not sure, but nice for a 1 star card.... .92/1 =92% = B+ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PokeDaSmot Posted June 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 17, 2011 [quote name='Master White' timestamp='1308341143' post='5290731'] Dang good OCG, a quick touch-up Use "can", not may, special summoned= Special Summoned light=LIGHT Maybe a little OP'd or Up'd, not sure, but nice for a 1 star card.... .92/1 =92% = B+ [/quote] [font="Century Gothic"][color="#000000"]Thanks, making those changes as we speak.[/color][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Back Scratcher! Posted June 17, 2011 Report Share Posted June 17, 2011 Piercing and banishing? I think you mean deals damage to the opponent and sacrificing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Master White Posted June 17, 2011 Report Share Posted June 17, 2011 [quote name='Back Scratcher!' timestamp='1308341373' post='5290738'] Piercing and banishing? I think you mean deals damage to the opponent and sacrificing [/quote] He's using New OCG just to let you know.... Banishing=Removing from play Piercing is the term for difference in battle damage cards.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PokeDaSmot Posted June 17, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 17, 2011 [quote name='Back Scratcher!' timestamp='1308341373' post='5290738'] Piercing and banishing? I think you mean deals damage to the opponent and sacrificing [/quote] [font="Century Gothic"][color="#000000"]Take a look at the new OCG rules bud: http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/250644-konami-new-card-grammar-rules/.[/color][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Back Scratcher! Posted June 17, 2011 Report Share Posted June 17, 2011 Alright, didn't know about that yet, thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MibeR Posted June 18, 2011 Report Share Posted June 18, 2011 Beast Warrior with LIGHT? aiming for LightSworns? or what? Effect is simple but useful. 2850 is bit too much, lower it around 2500. graveyard=Graveyard, level=Level, This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set at the first sentence Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PokeDaSmot Posted June 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 18, 2011 [quote name='Maha Guns' timestamp='1308357641' post='5291283'] Beast Warrior with LIGHT? aiming for LightSworns? or what? Effect is simple but useful. 2850 is bit too much, lower it around 2500. graveyard=Graveyard, level=Level, This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set at the first sentence [/quote] [font="Century Gothic"][color="#000000"]Thanks, made those changes.[/color][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MibeR Posted June 18, 2011 Report Share Posted June 18, 2011 youre welcome Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Blu:. Posted June 18, 2011 Report Share Posted June 18, 2011 For a first time card maker, really nice It would go pretty well in a lightsworn deck as it will be easy to put out onto the field. Anyways, yeah, you may want to lower the ATK a bit, but overall, very very nice beginning card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nghtwing Posted June 18, 2011 Report Share Posted June 18, 2011 yeah, very good for first try ! it smashed out my first card anyways... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shadowserpent Posted June 18, 2011 Report Share Posted June 18, 2011 I am jealous my cards now are not as good as this. You might just deserve a rep. Yes decrease the attack though maybe to 2500? 9/10 Like the picture btw Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PokeDaSmot Posted June 18, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 18, 2011 [font="Century Gothic"][color="#000000"]Thanks everyone![/color][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PokeDaSmot Posted June 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted June 20, 2011 [font="Century Gothic"][color="#000000"]BUMP, plus I updated the card, alot.[/color][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sleepy Posted June 20, 2011 Report Share Posted June 20, 2011 This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. [u]This card can only be Special Summoned by banishing 3 Level 4 or higher monsters [b]you control[/b].[/u] If this card attacks a Defense Position monster, inflict piercing Battle Damage to your opponent.[b]When this card destroys a monster by battle: P[/b]lace 1 Divine Counter on it. Once per turn[b]: You can remove[/b] 2 Divine Counters from this card[b]; D[/b]ouble the ATK of [b]1[/b] of your monsters with the lowest Level, [b]except[/b] this card, [b]you control[/b] until the End Phase [s]of your turn[/s]. When this card is destroyed[b]: B[/b]anish it and Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower monster from your hand or your Deck. [color=blue] -Underlined part I'm not sure how to change because I still haven't seen any semi-nomi monster with the new grammar. -The rest is, since you are using the newest OCG, you need to use colons and semi-colons too. -Some capitals I made weren't wrong in your version, but I changed them that way because they started different things now after those colons/semi-colons. Seems a tad hard to Summon but its all good. Card would be overpowered if it didn't have those Summoning conditions. Its a splendid job for a new member's first card. Keep it up. [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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