The Gazer Tank

[Comfromiteer]

So, this is my first card, please keep that mind.

 

 

When this card is Normal Summoned: Target 1 monster your opponent controls. As long as this card remains face-up on your side of the field: The targeted monster loses 200 DEF.

[·Toot]

Hm... A level 5 with 1450 points? Its not good at all. But its okay, you said you were new to this kind of stuff. I suggest you hang around the TCG sections a bit. Trust me you'll get better. Or get some help from the newb defense league in the Clubs and Organization section. No one reall tribute summons anymore (except for the monarchs :3). And especially not one with 1450 atk. Well maybe if the effect was decent. But eh... And welcome to YCM.

[PrimeAceJohn]

Newbee, eh? Trust me, I understand.

 

Well, I would strongly suggest, before making card(s), check this out: http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/293716-about-ocg/

 

I know it's a lot, but at least just read over all of them instead of study them.

 

 

As for the card, it's not so good....at all.

 

The problems with this card:

1. There is no such thing as a Divine Machine monster - especially when its level 5
2. NOBODY wants to play a level 5 1450 ATK monster, no one would tribute for this
3. It has low attack
4. It's OCG (Official Card Grammar) is totally off

 

My Fixes:

1. Make it level 4
2. Make it an EARTH monster
3. OCG Fix: When this card is Normal Summoned: Target 1 monster your opponent controls. As long as this card remains face-up on your side of the field: The targeted monster loses 200 DEF.

 

I promise I'm not trying to make fun of you in anyway, I know what it's like as a beginner card maker. What I can strongly recommend is that you take everyone's advice and enforce them; do not take offense to them - for I am sure no one here would make fun of you, especially a beginner. 

 

By the way, welcome to YCM:)

[Comfromiteer]

Thanks for the suggestions, it'll be helpful for me in making new cards.

[PrimeAceJohn]

Thanks for the suggestions, it'll be helpful for me in making new cards.

 

Np, man.

 

If you need any other suggestions or help, just message me or a mod:)

[Aix]

It's far, far, far, far, far, far, far...

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far too weak. Even back in the old days, they would not use this card because of how weak it is. First of all, it is a Level 5, requiring a Tribute Summon (unless you sent it to the Graveyard somehow and used Monster Reborn, which would be pointless) and no one Tribute Summons anymore in this game. It also has wayyy too little ATK and DEF for a Level 5. Second of all, decreasing DEF is useless, because, usually, Defense Position monsters will be face-down so they will not be an eligible target for this card anyway, and also because most monsters are in Attack Position anyway.

 

My suggestion would be to make it a Level 4 and make it change the monster to Defense Position as well. Also make the DEF decrease greater, like 500 DEF decrease instead. There isn't much else to say about this card.

 

If you want to know how to make good cards, you have to play the game in its current format first. I suggest you play online with DuelingNetwork (at www.duelingnetwork.com) and play there for at least one or two weeks so that you get used to the game. Then, you can come back and make cards. Of course, you should still hang around on this forum as well.

 

Cardmaking, like every other thing in the world, requires practice. Even after getting used to the game, chances are, you will still be making suboptimal cards, but that's fine: We can help you. If you ever have any problems or questions PM me.

[Comfromiteer]

Aix, I updated the card now, I'd probally not use that many fars, I counted 234 fars in that sentence, which is way too much.