Veniet Posted February 17, 2013 Report Share Posted February 17, 2013 I obviously intended Asaruka to be a boss card of sorts that can summon a Ritual Spirit version of herself when things get tough. Its obviously not meant to be offensive, but can provide great support for other decks. Comments and OCG fixes are appreciated! [spoiler='Effect'] This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card "Heaven's Net". You must also offer monsters whose total Level equal to 7 or more from the field or your hand. When this card is sent from the field to the Graveyard by a card effect: Special Summon this card during the next Standby Phase. Each time this effect is activated, its ATK increases by 200 from its original ATK. (Permanently)[/spoiler] [spoiler='Effect'] Cannot be Normal Summoned/Set. Must be Special Summoned with the effect of "Asaruka" or "Heaven's Net". When Ritual Summoned, offer monsters whose total Level Stars equal 6 or more from the field or your hand. When a Spell, Trap, Spell/Trap effect, or Effect Monster's effect is activated that targets a Set card you control: You can Tribute this card; Negate the activation and change the target to 1 Set card your opponent controls. When this card is returned to the hand: Special Summon "Asaruka" from your Graveyard. This card returns to the hand when it is destroyed by battle, or at the end of the turn this card is Summoned.[/spoiler] [spoiler='Effect'] 1 LIGHT tuner+ 1 or more non-tuner "Servant" monsters When this card is Summoned successfully; Discard 1 LIGHT monster. Cannot be destroyed by battle. Once per turn, during either player's turn, when a Spell, Trap, Spell/Trap effect, or Effect Monster's effect is activated, you can negate the activation; Switch the target card's effect to an appropriate card your opponent controls. When this card is removed from the field; Special Summon "Soul of Asaruka" from your hand, or Graveyard.[/spoiler] [spoiler='Effect']This card can be used to Ritual Summon "Zi'ting" or "Soul of Asaruka". You must also offer monsters whose total Level Stars equal to the monster you wish to Summon.[/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Veniet Posted February 21, 2013 Author Report Share Posted February 21, 2013 hmm, bump bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkneptune Posted February 22, 2013 Report Share Posted February 22, 2013 if soul of asaruka is a spirit, you forgot to add the effect of it returning to the hand at the end of the turn. unless its supposed to stay on the field until something returns it to the hand. i think its interesting the way they both rotate each other, similar to the Inti-Quilla loop, but with a twist. very cool. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Veniet Posted February 22, 2013 Author Report Share Posted February 22, 2013 Thanks; Well I forgot to add he returning to hand for "Soul". I'll add that now. What do you think overall? I edited "Soul" and fixed an OCG error. Think there's more. Anyway. rate! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darkneptune Posted February 22, 2013 Report Share Posted February 22, 2013 well my ocg isnt that great, but right not id say its well done. it might not be used a lot, so maybe 8/10. overall a pretty nice combo Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Veniet Posted February 22, 2013 Author Report Share Posted February 22, 2013 Thanks for your honest opinion ^^; looking forward to hearing more from others. There is alot to learn from others, and they know more about OCG than me. Hope to hear of them, Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Veniet Posted February 25, 2013 Author Report Share Posted February 25, 2013 Anyone else have thoughts? I know its less than four cards though. Do at least want to have the OCG right as much as possible, so I know what to work on in the future. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I Hate Snatch Steal Posted February 25, 2013 Report Share Posted February 25, 2013 I'd change the summoning requirement statement to "Cannot be Normal Summoned/Set. Must first be Special Summoned by the effect of "Asakura" or with "Heaven's Net". Its more clear that way. Most spirit monsters return to the hand during the end phase of the turn that they are flipped face-up as well, not sure if you missed that by mistake. Also, may I suggest that unless you want the retargeted effect to be treated as soul of asakura's effect that you change the wording to something like "When a Spell, Trap, Spell/Trap effect, or Effect Monster's effect is activated that targets 1 set card you control: you can tribute this card; Switch the target to an appropriate set card your opponent controls." Also, since some commonly used effects can only target your opponent's cards. I might change it to "When a Spell, Trap, Spell/Trap effect, or Effect Monster's effect is activated that targets 1 set card you control: you can tribute this card; Switch the target to 1 set card your opponent controls, (even if the targeting conditions are no longer correct)." references: http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Chaos_Sorcerer http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Remote_Revenge http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Stardust_Dragon http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Red-Headed_Oni *****Asakura's review starts here***** The first sentence, is that supposed to affect the sucess of the summon at all? As it stands, it sound like you have to discard only if you have A LIGHT monster to discard (with the ruling precedent of your opponent being able to verify that you have no monster to discard if they choose to). The same wording fix I mentioned above can be modified to fit here. Let me know if you want help with that. Holding off on a balance review until I know what "servent" monsters you had in mind. Maybe make the last effect only apply when sent from the field, just in case. what card I say about heaven's net? Its a ritual spell card, what else? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Candy Corn Knight Posted February 25, 2013 Report Share Posted February 25, 2013 9/10. I like the idea. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Veniet Posted February 25, 2013 Author Report Share Posted February 25, 2013 I'd change the summoning requirement statement to "Cannot be Normal Summoned/Set. Must first be Special Summoned by the effect of "Asakura" or with "Heaven's Net". Its more clear that way. Most spirit monsters return to the hand during the end phase of the turn that they are flipped face-up as well, not sure if you missed that by mistake. Also, may I suggest that unless you want the retargeted effect to be treated as soul of asakura's effect that you change the wording to something like "When a Spell, Trap, Spell/Trap effect, or Effect Monster's effect is activated that targets 1 set card you control: you can tribute this card; Switch the target to an appropriate set card your opponent controls." Also, since some commonly used effects can only target your opponent's cards. I might change it to "When a Spell, Trap, Spell/Trap effect, or Effect Monster's effect is activated that targets 1 set card you control: you can tribute this card; Switch the target to 1 set card your opponent controls, (even if the targeting conditions are no longer correct)." references: http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Chaos_Sorcerer http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Remote_Revenge http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Stardust_Dragon http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Red-Headed_Oni *****Asakura's review starts here***** The first sentence, is that supposed to affect the sucess of the summon at all? As it stands, it sound like you have to discard only if you have A LIGHT monster to discard (with the ruling precedent of your opponent being able to verify that you have no monster to discard if they choose to). The same wording fix I mentioned above can be modified to fit here. Let me know if you want help with that. Holding off on a balance review until I know what "servent" monsters you had in mind. Maybe make the last effect only apply when sent from the field, just in case. what card I say about heaven's net? Its a ritual spell card, what else? About "Soul of Asaruka"; I Think I understand you, but request help with the exact wording between both of them. At first I thought I made it clear that "Soul" would return to the hand by default during the End Phase. I worded it wrong? About "Asaruka" herself, yes, each Summon is supposed to be able to be verified by the opponent, and I want to make it a requirement that I discard a LIGHT after every successful SS. By successful, I mean wasn't countered by a Bottomless or what not. You want me to post how many "Servant"s? I made quite a few, but I guess I will post at least a couple here. "Heaven's Net" is just a Ritual Spell. No additional effects. I also made some changes to both "Asaruka" and her "Soul of Asaruka" according to your theories. Take a look, if you would. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Veniet Posted March 13, 2013 Author Report Share Posted March 13, 2013 Bumping, yes yes! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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