Longevity of Nature, Kassara (Zazu Zingles)

[Zazubat]

It's time for me to get back into regular card making in singles, so I will post at least 3 cards aweek, 2 randoms, and 1 for my Revision Challenge. Hopefully I can keep this up. Also, now I got a little title thing, ain't that cute? Anyway, this image was lying around and I had yet to find a use for it, then I wondered why I havn't seen many Rank 6s around, and that's kinda sad, so here's a pretty splashable one for your Rank 6 deck. The end is just for fun really, but hey, who knows, maybe it's more handy then you would think? Gagaga Cowboy is still played for burn at times, so yeah. Bah, I'm rambling, time for the card.

2 Level 6 monsters
When this card is Xyz Summoned: Target 1 other monster you control; that card cannot be destroyed by battle or by your opponent’s card effects while you control this card. Once per turn: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card to target 1 monster in your Graveyard and 1 monster you control; banish the first target, then the second target gains ATK equal to the Level/Rank of the first target x 100, then if the second target is the monster this card targeted when this card was Xyz Summoned, inflict 900 damage to your opponent, also gain 900 Life Points.

[Therrion]

The ATK gaining wording is wrong.

"gains ATK equal to the Level/Rank of the card x 100, then..."

The ATK boost is rather low, but I guess it would get crazy at x 200 with Tragoedia and etc. I feel like you could make the boost x 200 if the banished card had a Rank, and x 100 if it has a Level. It wouldn't be to hard to word.

"gains ATK equal to the Level of that target x 100 or equal to the Rank of that target x 200, then..."

Aside from that, a very nice card. You would, in most cases, still want to go for Bounzer as it is much more powerful. A Rank 6 that has an ATK boost isn't all that impressive (even with the Goblin Thief/Ookazi effect). The protection is the only noteworthy effect on the card, and it is limited to when it is Summoned, so a Rank 4 has a better protection effect then this card (Key Beetle can detach to protect, though it is only card effects).

I think it would be nice to swap the EtB effect with the detach effect.

"When this card is Xyz Summoned: Target 1 monster you control and 1 monster in your Graveyard. Banish the second target, and the first target gains ATK equal to the Level of that target by x 100 or equal to the Rank of that target x 200. Once per turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card: Target 1 other monster you control; it cannot be destroyed while you control this card, then if the targeted monster is the monster this card targeted when it was Summoned, inflict 800 damage to your opponent, also gain 800 Life Points."

 

I love the art. ^^

[Zazubat]

The ATK gaining wording is wrong.

"gains ATK equal to the Level/Rank of the card x 100, then..."

The ATK boost is rather low, but I guess it would get crazy at x 200 with Tragoedia and etc. I feel like you could make the boost x 200 if the banished card had a Rank, and x 100 if it has a Level. It wouldn't be to hard to word.

"gains ATK equal to the Level of that target x 100 or equal to the Rank of that target x 200, then..."

Aside from that, a very nice card. You would, in most cases, still want to go for Bounzer as it is much more powerful. A Rank 6 that has an ATK boost isn't all that impressive (even with the Goblin Thief/Ookazi effect). The protection is the only noteworthy effect on the card, and it is limited to when it is Summoned, so a Rank 4 has a better protection effect then this card (Key Beetle can detach to protect, though it is only card effects).

I think it would be nice to swap the EtB effect with the detach effect.

"When this card is Xyz Summoned: Target 1 monster you control and 1 monster in your Graveyard. Banish the second target, and the first target gains ATK equal to the Level of that target by x 100 or equal to the Rank of that target x 200. Once per turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card: Target 1 other monster you control; it cannot be destroyed while you control this card, then if the targeted monster is the monster this card targeted when it was Summoned, inflict 800 damage to your opponent, also gain 800 Life Points."

 

I love the art. ^^

I thought that the x ATK/DEF was obsolete, but looking into it, it seems that they still use it when talking about Levels and Ranks. In that case, I need to update the OCG page a little, so thanks for that. I'm thinking of boosting this card's stats, make it able to target itself for the ATK gain, and maybe give the monster it first targets some kind of special effect. I will have an updated version up in a bit.

[Zazubat]

bump and update

[I Hate Snatch Steal]

Still some issues here.

 

2 Level 6 monsters
When this card is Xyz Summoned: Target 1 other monster you control; that card cannot be destroyed by battle or your opponent’s card effects while you control this card. Once per turn: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card to target 1 monster in your Graveyard and 1 monster you control; banish the first target, then the second target gains ATK equal to the Level/Rank x 100 of what?, then if the second target is the monster this card targeted when this card was Summoned, inflict 900 damage to your opponent, also gain 900 Life Points.

 

I think it should say:

 

2 Level 6 monsters
When this card is Xyz Summoned: Target 1 other monster you control; that card cannot be destroyed by battle or by your opponent’s card effects while you control this card. Once per turn: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card to target 1 monster in your Graveyard and 1 monster you control; banish the first target and if you do, the second target gains ATK equal to the Level/Rank x 100 of that banished monster, then if the second target is the monster this card targeted when this card was Xyz Summoned, inflict 900 damage to your opponent, also gain 900 Life Points.

 

Changes underlined.

 

"and if you do" implies that you have to banish the first target for the 2nd target to gain ATK. 900 seems like a weird number to choose, but that's not a big deal. One worry I have is that if you summon 2 of these, they both become indestructible. Maybe make it not able to target cards named "Longevity of Nature, Kassara". My bad, you'd have to xyz summon then at the same time and that's not going to happen with the known card pool. 2600 seems decent for a rank 6, given its useful abilities. Overall my rank 6 making set would love this.

[Zazubat]

Still some issues here.

 

2 Level 6 monsters
When this card is Xyz Summoned: Target 1 other monster you control; that card cannot be destroyed by battle or your opponent’s card effects while you control this card. Once per turn: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card to target 1 monster in your Graveyard and 1 monster you control; banish the first target, then the second target gains ATK equal to the Level/Rank x 100 of what?, then if the second target is the monster this card targeted when this card was Summoned, inflict 900 damage to your opponent, also gain 900 Life Points.

 

I think it should say:

 

2 Level 6 monsters
When this card is Xyz Summoned: Target 1 other monster you control; that card cannot be destroyed by battle or by your opponent’s card effects while you control this card. Once per turn: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card to target 1 monster in your Graveyard and 1 monster you control; banish the first target and if you do, the second target gains ATK equal to the Level/Rank x 100 of that banished monster, then if the second target is the monster this card targeted when this card was Xyz Summoned, inflict 900 damage to your opponent, also gain 900 Life Points.

 

Changes underlined.

 

"and if you do" implies that you have to banish the first target for the 2nd target to gain ATK. 900 seems like a weird number to choose, but that's not a big deal. One worry I have is that if you summon 2 of these, they both become indestructible. Maybe make it not able to target cards named "Longevity of Nature, Kassara". My bad, you'd have to xyz summon then at the same time and that's not going to happen with the known card pool Overall my rank 6 set would love this.

I don't get your change. Why would you change my "then" to "and if you do". It was my decision to make it that way, it changes how it works completely. Also, the last part about it being the Xyz Summon doesn't matter at all. 900 is random, I just liked 900, deal with it. The "and by your opponent's card effects", yeah that's correct, but it isn't a deal breaker. I must have overseen something about the ATK gain, it's suppose to mean the banished monster, I'll fix that.

 

EDIT: Put new version up, fixed the stuff you said, while it doesn't matter, I suppose it makes it clearer that it says Xyz Summoned, rather than just Summoned.