Eater of Cities

[Megagun133]

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Eater of Cities

DARK/Machine/Rank 10/Xyz/Effect

3000/2500

Lore:

2 Level 10 monsters
If this card destroys a monster by battle, attach the monster

to this card instead of putting it on the graveyard. Once per

turn, you can destroy 1 card in defense position; attach it to

this card. You can detach any amount of Xyz materials from

this card; for the rest of the turn, your other monsters gain

400 ATK for each card detached

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

OCG fix:

 

2 Level 10 monsters
If this card destroys a monster by battle: Attach the monster to this card as a Xyz Material instead of sending it to the Graveyard. Once per turn, you can target 1 card in Defense Position: Destroy it; attach it to this card as a Xyz Material. You can detach any amount of Xyz Materials from this card: Until the End Phase of this turn, other monsters you control gain 400 ATK for each Xyz Material detached.

 

(Anyone who posts after, correct me if I got parts of this wrong)

 

With that taken care of, the CnC...

 

What I see here is a Rank 10 monster that basically attaches stuff it destroys as Xyz Materials to itself (whether or not you destroy it by battle or its effect [if target is in Defense Position]) and then unleashes them to make your other monsters gain 2000+ ATK points; possibly leading to ending the game.

 

I would suggest adding a cost to its defense destruction effect: maybe a Life Point cost or something; considering that it's a free material from it in most cases; leading to +1 for you/-1 for opponent (unless you destroy your own monsters to trigger destruction effects, etc.).

 

Overall, it's a decent card; just put a limiter on that effect.

 

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