Crimson Mage[Level 8 Maybe OP][Tried To Balance]

[Norbi2001]

This Card Can Be Summoned By Tributing 3 Monster And Banishing 2 Spell/Traps From The GraveYard, Thise Card Cannot Be Summoned In Other Ways. This Monster Gain Its Original ATK by Targeting 2 Level 4 Or Lower Monster On The Field And Combining Their ATK. When This Card Attacks And The Attack Is Negated it Attacks with double Damage But Then Is Destroyed And You Lose 1000 Life Points

 

[hoom]

okay, so there are a lot of OCG errors, but i'm not going to be the one to help you with that because i'm not very good at it either / i'm kind of confused about the effect of your card. I understand the first 2 parts which are pretty much its summoning conditions, but what if there are no level 4 or lower monsters when it comes out? Does it get to target 2 whenever it wants?

and also, what is the point of doubling its ATK when the attack is negated? From my understanding of the card, it pretty much self-destructs and you go -1000 when one of its attacks are negated. 

 

1 more thing; I don't think this card would be seeing a lot of play, as you have to tribute THREE monsters for it to even come out. 

; and please don't capitalize each word of every sentence.

[AzNPaladin]

OCG Fix (I think)

Can only be Summoned by Tributing 3 monsters and banishing 2 Spells/Traps in your Gravyard. When this card is Summoned; Target 2 Level 4 or lower monster. This card's original ATK becomes the combined ATK of those two monsters. If this card's attack is negated; Inflict damage equal to double this card's ATK. If this effect activates, destroy this card and take 1000 damage.

[PinesolOfChaos]

Found it interesting that this thing's name has "mage" in it even though it's a warrior. I can see this effect working well with a Number 39: Utopia (assuming you manage to bring both out). A few copies of Scapegoat in a generic Rank 4 deck could easily make use of this card.

 

Well here's my OCG fix:

This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 3 monsters and banishing 2 Spell/Trap cards in your Graveyard and cannot be Summoned in other ways. When this card is Special Summoned by its own effect; target up to 2 face-up Level 4 or lower monsters on the field. This card's original ATK becomes equal to the combined ATK of those two monsters. If this card's attack is negated apply this effect:

• Inflict damage equal to double this card's ATK, then destroy this card and take 1000 damage.

 

Also:

(Replace the "???" with "?" on the ATK)

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

Cannot be Normal Summoned/Set. Must be Special Summoned (from your hand) by tributing 3 monsters you control and banishing 2 Spell/Traps from your Graveyard and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways. When this card is Special Summoned: Target 2 Level 4 or lower monsters on the field; this card's original ATK becomes the combined ATK of the targeted monsters. When this card's attack is negated: Your opponent take damage equal to double this card's ATK. When this effect resolves: Destroy this card and take 1000 damage.

 

(You have a habit of capitalizing the first letter in each word; don't do that. If you need help with OCG, read the sticky thread)

 

Considering this card requires 5 cards in total to bring out, unless you use tokens or monsters that can Special Summon themselves over and over again, I don't foresee this to see much play, especially since it'll have 0 original ATK if ever flipped face-down or there aren't any possible targets for its effect; which will essentially neuter it.

 

If you do have targets, it'll probably be somewhere around the 2500-3000 mark on average, which I can then see this card's last effect being OPed, since it will take out more than half your opponent's LP (and/or end game if it occurs at that point in game). While the summon conditions might compensate for something like this, you need to tone down the damage effect (just inflicting this card's ATK as damage is fine).