Chaos Number 445: Garchomp, mach dragon of the dessert

[ems97]

I've decided to do a Mega Garchomp. The effect is rough skin with sand force. Image belongs to

pokemonofanubis.tumblr.com.

 

(Edit): To make life easier, there will be a link where you get to see the normal cards instead of you searching page by page. Thanks for the suggestion

 

 

3 Level 7 monsters

When a monster you control is destroyed by battle with an opponent's monster: That monster loses 700 ATK. If this card has "Number 445: Garchomp, the Mach Shark Dragon" as an Xyz Material, it gains this effect.

. Once per turn: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card; EARTH monsters gain 600 ATK. Once per turn, this card cannot be destroyed by battle.

 

Garchomp:  http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/317386-number-445-garchomp-the-mach-shark-dragon/

[Nightmare Stomper]

Try this!

 

3 Level 7 monsters

If this face-up card would be destroyed, you can detach all Xyz materials instead.  While this card has Xyz materials when a monster you control is destroyed by battle, the monster that destroyed it loses 700 ATK. If this card has "Number 445: Garchomp, the Mach Shark Dragon" as an Xyz Material, it gains this effect.

· Once per turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card; all EARTH monsters you currently control gain 700 ATK, also, when an EARTH monster you control battles an opponent's monster, that monster loses 700 ATK until the end of the damage step. 

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

Here's your regular review.

At this point, you know what happens: OCG fix and the general CnC.

 

3 Level 7 monsters

When a monster you control is destroyed by battle with an opponent's monster: That monster loses 700 ATK. If this card has "Number 445: Garchomp, the Mach Shark Dragon" as an Xyz Material, it gains this effect.

. Once per turn: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card; EARTH monsters gain 600 ATK. Once per turn, this card cannot be destroyed by battle.

 

The first effect has been reworded so it weakens the opponent's monster if they happen to kill anything of yours (which is what I am assuming you intended to create); which does reflect Rough Skin (in normal Chomp). It works nicely for softening up your opponent (so in a way, they need to be wary about attacking carelessly or risk getting into kill range for smaller monsters)

 

As for the Xyz effect, while the first part of it does reflect Sand Force, note that stat boosting effects are getting overused nowadays; especially factoring in the threat of effect removal. You've already been told about this a few times in the past, so hopefully you remember. That said though, this is based on an ability so not really a big deal. I don't need to tell you that as it is now, your opponent benefits as well should they be playing EARTH as well. I would change this part of the effect to affect only your side.

 

Second one plays mindgames with your opponent, since they will need to use two monsters to kill it (outside of effects). Factoring in its 3300 ATK, it'll take a while to accomplish.

 

You may want to link the original Garchomp though, for comparison reasons (remember that not everyone saw the original form or likes going back several pages to find it).

 

@above user: You also need to provide some explanation about why you think the effect should be that way, not just offer an altered effect.