Frozen Dragon

[Fat Cat Ultim]

Hello !

 

So I made another Dragon ! :3

 

LORE : When this card is Normal Summoned,you can banish the top card of your deck,then target one Set card in your opponent's side of the field; That target cannot be activated.

 

Feedback pls :3

[LeLukeX]

Nobody would use this card, sorry.

 

Look up Blizzard Dragon.

 

"Once per turn: You can target 1 monster your opponent controls; it cannot change its battle position or declare an attack until the end of your opponent's next turn."

 

He has the exact same stats except 1800 ATK.  Blizzard Dragon's effect is clearly superior to yours.  No discard cost, it's an ignition Once Per turn (you can change targets if you need to or if the other target died).  It doesn't have to be Normal Summoned.

[Spinny]

I like the design...but if you play this doesnt blizzard dragon outclass it??

 

Blizz has no cost, similar attack stat, can switch targets on a regular bases.

 

however you could probably lower the cost so it doesnt have to discard, maybe banish the top card of your deck, following the frozen theme of freezing one of your own cards.

[Fat Cat Ultim]

I understand.So I made another version with what I think a handy effect :

[Armoire]

I understand.So I made another version with what I think a handy effect :

 

I like the idea, but I still don't think it would see use mostly because of the banishing part. Also, the targeted card would be activated, more often than not, in response to this card's effect, which would render this useless. I suggest you make the cost send the top card of your deck to the Graveyard (which would compliment the Dragon-Type as a whole) and make it so that the targeted card cannot be activated in response the this card's effect. That way, you at least get some advantage by wasting a Normal Summon.

[LeLukeX]

I understand.So I made another version with what I think a handy effect :

I'm not one to correct card lore, but the way you worded is insufficient, not enough information.  Yugioh has to be exact not just, "get the jist."

 

When this card is Normal Summoned: You can Banish the top card of your Deck, then target 1 Set card on your opponent's side of the field; While this card is face-up on the field, that Set target cannot be used.

 

First off, I don't even know if Banishing from your Deck is allowed to be a cost by game mechanics, but I'm just pulling a blind eye here and say it can.  Secondly you never said in the card lore if the targeted card is permanently not allowed to be activated or while your monster is face-up (if it's permanent it would have to say for the rest of the Duel so that it's clear).  Also, important, you have to say "used" and not activated.  B/c the way you worded it implies you can target monsters too, and Set monsters cannot be activated, so used to prevent Flip Summons.  If you meant to only have this card target Spell/Trap cards, you would have to put that in the targeting restriction, then "activated" would be the correct term.

 

This card is much better.  It might see some play by some competitive Deck simply b/c of that nasty ATK and great lock effect.  This is looking more like an "up-to-date" card.  

 

I agree with the above user, sending a card from top of Deck to Graveyard would make this card perfectly balanced and both usable.

[Radiant F.U.R.Y.™]

I think this is a good idea. I actually run a couple of lockdown decks on Duelingnetwork. Card seems well thought out but I think to make it more viable, you should add a variation of what I call, "the gyokkou clause", "Your opponent cannot activate the targeted card in response to this card's activation. "

 

Here is my proposed alternate lore. Do with it what you like

 

When this card is Normal Summoned, you can banish the top card of your Deck. Then, if you do, Target 1 set card your opponent controls: that card can not be activated. Your opponent can not activate the targeted card in response to this effect's activation.

[LeLukeX]

I think this is a good idea. I actually run a couple of lockdown decks on Duelingnetwork. Card seems well thought out but I think to make it more viable, you should add a variation of what I call, "the gyokkou clause", "Your opponent cannot activate the targeted card in response to this card's activation. "

 

Here is my proposed alternate lore. Do with it what you like

 

When this card is Normal Summoned, you can banish the top card of your Deck. Then, if you do, Target 1 set card your opponent controls: that card can not be activated. Your opponent can not activate the targeted card in response to this effect's activation.

You still have to state whether or not the "cannot be activated" is only applied while the monster remains face-up or is for the rest of the duel.

[Fat Cat Ultim]

I updated it.Thank you all for feedback !

 

 

LORE : When this card is Normal Summoned, you can send the top card of your Deck to the Graveyard. Then, if you do, Target 1 Set card your opponent controls: that card can not be activated for the rest of the Duel. Your opponent can not activate the targeted card in response to this effect's activation.And when this card leaves the field,destroy that target.

[Dramatic Crossroad]

Enough dragon cards already 

:mad:

Banishing the top card of the deck is a thing, i can recall that fairy monster that came out with the Monarch deck, what was the name .... :/ 

 

Considering the ATK it would seem overpowered still. If it were a Level 5 monster = things look more balanced. 

 

Also, try editing your main post instead of posting new card versions, people get confused and comment your 1st (and sometimes most flawed) original concept. 

[Radiant F.U.R.Y.™]

if you want to lock the card face-down permanently, then there is no need for th last effect. If you dont specify how long the effect lasts, then it lasts as long as the card i out ie: Xing Zhen Hu