First cards I ever made

[VelocityRaptor]

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[Gussion]

I really like the pictures you chose! The card effect is pretty nice!

Some suggestions I would have is changing it to Level 8, making it 3000 ATK, and adding an effect where monsters summoned by Alduin can't be destroyed that turn. But that's just me.

Good job, though! :)

[Flash Flyer - Sakura]

Put bluntly, this card is sorely outclassed by Red-Eyes Darkness Metal Dragon for a variety of reasons.

 

First of all, this card is restricted to Level 4 and under in the Graveyard. REDMD has access to any Dragon from the hand or Grave; assuming they are not Nomi.

Also, this card requires more setup to go into + Nomi, as opposed to simply banishing a Dragon you control for a freely revivable monster.

 

Sure, it has 3500 ATK to break things with; but lacks any form of protection from effects or something else that makes it stand out.

If you notice from recent Ritual Spells, they all have a secondary effect that do something in the Graveyard.

 

 

I would recommend giving the Ritual Spell a protection effect for Alduin; in a similar vein to what Hymn of Light does for Saffira (protection against a destruction attempt).

For Alduin himself, an additional effect would be great on him, so he's not outclassed in his functions [besides brute force].

[Krein]

Considering it's based off of Alduin, I think it would be better to give it the ability to special summon any dragon from the graveyard and then give them immunity to your opponent's card effects so long as he's face up on the field (which would make up for him not being able to special summon from the hand like REDMD). You could also add in something like, "Once per turn, you can send one Dragon type monster you control to the graveyard to target one card your opponent controls; send it to the graveyard," to reference Alduin's Meteor Storm shout, and to make it more of a boss monster for something that requires a good bit of resources to summon.

 

As for the Ritual card itself, I think adding in a secondary effect like Sakura described would make both cards stand out and desirable to use were they real.

 

Nice picture choices by the way, I love Skyrim related things myself!