sportsplayer627 Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 cant wait for chap 4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skyfi Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 when will cahpter 4 come? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 @Raviel Priest WYHE: 343 Guilty Spark has sent me a Chapter for his character' date=' and that will be Chapter 4.[/b'] I promise you have to wait as long. @cardking123: DO NOT SPAM! NEGGED! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 Very well then.I'll wait... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 24, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 Well then wait no longer. Here is Chapter 4, written by 343 Guilty Spark himself! I only editted. Chapter 4: Wrath of the Wicked One On the southern-most coast of Duel Academy, a boat had pulled up, and a teenage boy who looked like Seto Kaiba and was wearing a black trench coat had pulled up and was walking into the forest. This guy's name was David Mitchell, and he was the protégé of Nightshroud. He was on a sort of mission, to find two things: the Celestial Warriors and Nightshroud. From what he knew, the Celestial Warriors were a group of five elite duelists who were "servants" of the Light of Destruction. From what else he had heard, a boy named Jaden Yuki, the only one known to be able to destroy the Light of Destruction, was on the island as well. Young Jaden will either be an asset or a threat, David thought. And then there's Yugi Muto... For he had also found out that Yugi Muto had somehow traveled through time to the island. He also sought out Atticus Rhodes and Yusuke Fujiwara, two of Nightshroud's "hosts". "Who's there?" someone had shouted. David spun around. A teenaged-boy stood there, wearing what looked an Obelisk Blue blazer, but it was white. "Who are you?" asked the boy. "My name is David Mitchell." replied David. "Why do you want to know?" "My name is Brian, and I’m a messenger for the Celestial Warriors" said the boy. "They know you are here." David smirked. "Oh, they do, do they?" he asked Brian slyly. "It just so happens I’m looking for the Celestial Warriors, too. I'm looking for, ah, information." Brian's face was suspicious. "Well, you'll never get it unless you duel me. If you lose, which you will, you must leave the island." David nodded, accepting the terms. "Fine with me, but if I win, you let go about my business, and...you'll pay." "Huh?" asked Brian. "Nothing." said David. "Then let's duel!" said Brian. They went to the open area where David docked his boat, and began to duel. "I'll start things off, shall I?" asked Brian. "I summon my Marauding Captain (1200/400) in attack mode. And, since I normal summoned him, I can summon another warrior from my hand! So I’ll summon Exiled Force in attack mode. (1000/1000). I end my turn with a facedown card." "My turn." said David. "I'll summon Gil Garth in attack mode (1800/1200). I'll also activate a spell card: Pot of Greed, which lets me draw two new cards. Now, Gil Garth, attack his Marauding Captain!" "Man, dude, you're as predictable as you are brainless." taunted Brian. "I activate my trap card: Negate Attack! This card blocks my Captain from your attack and-" "-and ends the battle phase, yeah, yeah, yeah." said David, sounding slightly annoyed. Oh, well. No matter. That's only a minor setback. I will still win he thought . "That's ok. I'll set two cards facedown and end my turn." "That's fine with me." said Brian. "It's the second turn and I can already tell you're a pathetic duelist." You'll regret those words, thought David. After a full minute of silence, Brian resumed dueling. "I'll summon Freed the Brave Wanderer in attack mode (1700/1200). Next, I’ll equip Freed with Axe of Despair, raising his attack strength to 2700! Now, Freed, attack David's Gil Garth!" David watched as Brian's warrior destroyed his Gil Garth. This guy is better than I thought, but he will still lose, David thought as his life points dropped to 3100. "Now, I will end my turn." David smirked malevolently. "Fine." With my Sanctuary in the Shadows, it won't matter what he plays. Once I play my Sanctuary, this duel will become a true Shadow Game! "I'll begin my turn by playing the field spell The Sanctuary in the Shadows!" Shadows covered the entire field, and a huge, black castle loomed above and behind David. "This field spell raises the attack strength of all Fiend-type monsters and Dark-attribute monsters. And it has several hidden abilities I’ll reveal in due time. Now I’ll summon my Phantom of Chaos! And thanks to my Dark Sanctuary, its Attack increases to 300! It may not seem like much now, but trust me, it will help me to my victory." Brian was very annoyed by now. Does this guy EVER stop flapping' his gums? he thought. "Pal, if you think some shadows will win you this duel, you're sadly mistaken!" David ignored him. "But I’m not through! Now I’ll sacrifice my Phantom to evoke the all-powerful Crush Card Virus! Now watch as all your monsters with over 1500 attack points are destroyed!" A mingled look of shock and fright passed over Brian's face. Even as he said it, his Freed the Brave Wanderer had raised his hands to his throat as if he was choking, he began to squirm, and a second later, he was destroyed. "No, not the Crush Card!" shouted Brian. "Yes, the Crush Card." said David maliciously. "And, due to my Sanctuary's effect, my Phantom of Chaos comes back to my hand." "Hold on." said Brian, after a minute's silence. "That Crush Card is only in effect for three turns." David smirked again. "I know, Brian, but by then, I’ll have won this duel. I set two cards facedown to end my turn." "Fine, I’ll go." said Brian. Some turn this'll probably be, he thought desperately. With that Crush Card Virus out, all my monsters with 1500 attack points automatically go to the graveyard. C'mon deck, show me some love! Brian drew his card, and he got his wish. "First, I’ll switch all my monsters to defense mode, then I play the spell card Exchange! I take it you know how it works? We both take a card from each other's hands!" David nodded, and then both duelists walked across the field and showed each other their hands, which both had seven cards. David's hand included, in order, Dark Grepher, Dark Crusader, Hate Buster, Pot of Avarice, Fires of Doomsday, Phantom Skyblaster, and Demonic Motor Omega. "Hmmm...I select your Demonic Motor Omega!" He took the card. Brian's hand included, in order, Marauding Captain, Dimensional Prison, Sakuretsu Armor, Big Shield Guardna, Goblin Black Ops, and Judgment of the Sacrificed. "I'll choose your Judgment of the Sacrificed." said David, and he took the card. They both went to their respective sides of the field. I wonder why he took my Demonic Motor? David thought. My Virus is still contaminating his deck. He must be waiting until my Virus lifts.[i/] David lifted his face and looked at Brian, who resumed dueling. "I'll activate the spell card Pot of Greed so I can draw two more cards. Now, I’ll activate the spell card Yellow Luster Shield, which increases the defense of all my monsters by 300, which makes Exiled Force's defense 1300 and Marauding Captain's defense 700. It's not much so far, but hey, it'll keep me safe for now. I'll end my turn with a face-down." I'll play it safe until I can carry out my strategy. After he drew his card, he said, "I'll bring back an old friend: another Gil Garth!" Brian looked annoyed as he saw the Gil Garth return to the field. "Now, I activate my facedown spell: Inferno Rage Summon! Now I can summon my third Gil Garth!" said David with a triumphant air. Brian cringed as another Gil Garth appeared on the field. "And now, Gil Garth number one, attack hi-" "Sorry, David!" Brian interrupted. "I activate a trap: Threatening Roar! Now you can't attack this turn, thanks to Threatening Roar!" David grimaced. "Fine, then I will end my turn by playing a facedown card." Heh heh heh. If only he knew..."Fine, then I’ll end my turn." "My move!" said Brian. "I summon Big Shield Guardna in defense mode (100/2600), and thanks to Yellow Luster Shield, his defense power becomes 2900! Last, but not least, I activate the spell card Swords of Revealing Light! Now you can't attack for three full turns! "Fine." said David, unfazed by Brian's spell card. "You will still lose." "Then I’ll end my turn, if you’re so confident." said Brian. "You forget, at the end of your next turn, your Virus lifts!" "Very well." said David. "I will pass my turn." he told Brian after he drew his card. That fool, Why'd he pass his turn? Hmmm...he's probably realized there's no way he can win! "So..." said Brian. ”Realized you can't win, huh? I'm glad, 'cause it’s true! Now that your virus is not contaminating my deck any more, I can play high-powered monsters now! So I’ll sacrifice Marauding Captain and Exiled Force to summon the card I got from you: Demonic Motor Omega! (2800/2000) Now, I’ll use the spell card Raigeki to destroy all your monsters!" David growled as his two Gil Garths were struck by lightning, and then remembered that they would return to his hand anyway. "That was a waste of a powerful spell, Brian." commented David. "You realize that my Gil Garths just return to my hand?" Brian nodded, and David's confusion deepened. "I realize that." agreed Brian. "I've still wiped your field clean, and you’re open for a direct attack! Now go, Demonic Motor Omega! Attack David directly!" "You don't get off that easily, Brian." said David. "I activate a trap: Dark Destruction!* Now, by sending the top card in my deck to the graveyard, I won't just get nailed by that attack, but you will too!" Both David and Brian dropped to their knees as they both felt waves of pain due to Dark Destruction's effect. David's life points dropped to 300, while Brian's dropped to 1200. "You idiot, I still have more life points than you, and now you're down to your last 300!" blustered Brian. "That's not all. My Dark Destruction trap has a bonus effect: if the monster I discarded to activate my trap card was a Dark-attribute monster, you can't attack on your next turn. And my discarded monster, you ask?" He took a card from his graveyard, and revealed-"...the Shadowpriestess of Ohm, who's clearly a Dark-monster!" Brian glared angrily at David. "I'll take your silence as a sign that you end your turn." said David snidely. "I guess I should begin to end this duel. First, I'll summon Double Coston in attack mode (1700/1650). Next, I’ll play the spell card Mystical Space Typhoon to destroy Swords of Revealing Light! Now, I’ll play another spell card, the one I got from you: Judgment of the Sacrificed! "Since it's your card, I suppose you know how it works: If I have a high-level monster in my hand, I can automatically summon it by tributing one monster. So I sacrifice my Double Coston, which, thanks to my Dark Sanctuary, returns to my hand. Now, I use Judgment of the Sacrificed to summon the powerful Gaap the Divine Soldier! (2200/2000)" "That monster won't stop me!" jeered Brian. David raised his eyebrows. "Oh, really?" he sneered. Brian's grin faded. "My Divine Soldier has a few special abilities that will win me this duel." David continued to sneer. "So I’ll activate the first: switching all monsters to attack mode, including your Big Shield Guardna! And now, I activate Gaap's second effect: by revealing one or more Fiend monsters in my hand, my Divine Soldier gains 300 attack points! I currently have six cards in my hand, and four of them are fiends!" "What-No!" gasped Brian. "Don't believe me?" asked David. "I'll prove it." He took four cards from his hand and revealed them. With a wave of terror, Brian saw the cards: two Gil Garths. one Phantom of Chaos, one Phantom Skyblaster. "With those 1200 extra points, my Divine Soldier now has a grand total of 3400 attack points! Next, I’ll play Change of Heart to take control of Demonic Motor Omega! And now, I’ll attack! Go, Demonic Motor Omega! Attack Brian's Guardna!" David watched his monster charge at Brian's Guardna with a triumphant air. "I don't think so!" shouted Brian. "I activate my trap card: Magic Cylinder! Now, your own attack is blasted right back at you!" "Hmmm...not for long." said David. Brian looked confused. "What do you mean?" David smirked yet again. "You've forgotten," he explained, "I have one last facedown card: the trap card Trap Jammer! Now your Cylinder has been destroyed." Brian looked shocked as the hologram of his Magic Cylinder trap shattered into holographic pixels. "Now, I will end this duel. Now, Gaap the Divine Soldier, attack Big Shield Guardna!" Brian continued to look shocked as his Guardna was destroyed, and as his life point counter reached zero. David smirked yet again as he walked over to Brian, who has slumped to the ground in a kneeling position. "You are beaten." sneered David. "Gaap the Divine Soldier is one of my weakest strong monsters. I'm disappointed, but not surprised. Very few can stand up to the power of the Shadow Games, he added mentally. "Now, Brian," David asked Brian, who was shaking slightly, "tell me, where are Celestial Warriors?" "Well," said David weakly and shakily, "I don't really know. Th-They were last seen at the Ob-Obelisk Blue Dorm. That's where I l-lost contact with them. One of them was dueling Ja-Jaden Yuki." "Ahhh...so I’ll start looking for answers at the Obelisk dorm...and find Jaden Yuki as well." He turned his gaze to Brian, who looked back with eyes full of fright. "Thanks for the information, Brian, but you have outlived your usefulness. And now to send you to the Shadow Realm!" David then pulled out a medallion that looked like the one that Jaden Yuki had himself, except an un-readable phrase was carved around the edge. The jewel suddenly blazed with a brilliant bright red light, which enveloped both David and Brian. Brian let out a scream of anguish as if he was being tortured, and a second later, the light was gone. Brian lay on the ground, sprawled on his back, his eyes blank and empty. "Another good duel, David." said a voice. David turned around. His duel spirit partner had appeared next to him, the Messenger of Hades-Gorz. "Thank you, Gorz." replied David. "He will be the first of many." He smirked an all-too-familiar smirk as he continued walking down the forest path in front of him. And now I am one step closer to bringing back Nightshroud, and eradicating the Light of Destruction once and for all... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Oncoming Storm Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 Yay! My chapter's up! Though you probaly should've italicized David's thoughts though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sportsplayer627 Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 that was really good Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skyfi Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 aweesome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 24, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 Thanks. By the way, all the thoughts have been italicized. Thank you for all your help Guilty Spark, I'll try to make the rest of the chapters as long as yours. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Oncoming Storm Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 I'm flattered, Shadow. Really. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supreme Gamesmaster Posted June 24, 2008 Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 Hehe, not bad at all. I don't like Sanctuary of the Shadows, though. Too Seal of Orichalcos-ish. And obviously, we all hate the Seal of Orichalcos. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 24, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 24, 2008 Dark Sanctuary doesn't take the losers' soul, David's medallion did. Guilty Spark, could you post the effect of Dark Sanctuary? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted June 25, 2008 Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 great duel & what a way to intro Nightshroud's servant...wonder what plans he had with Jaden,Atticus & Fujiwaru Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 Well, he probably wants revenge on Jaden for defeating Nightshroud. Not sure what he wants with Atticus and Yusuke. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Oncoming Storm Posted June 25, 2008 Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 Sanctuary's effect: Increase the ATK of all DARK and Fiend-type monsters by 300. Whenever a DARK or Fiend-type is destroyed by battle or by a card effect immidiately returns to your hand during the End Phase of your turn. Also, David is looking for Atticus and Yusuke because he thinks part of Nightshroud's influence over them still exists (somewhere, and it does, will a little "encouragement"), and that he could use that influence to bring back Nightshroud. It's very confusing, even for me. Also, he, at first, tries to convince Jaden to join him so that they can both defeat the Celestial Warriors, but then, when Jaden refuses, he then considers him an enemy, and will become out for blood. All this will vary depending how the rest of the fanfic plays out. I appreciate the compliments about my chapter! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 Okay, I think I can work that in to the next Chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Oncoming Storm Posted June 25, 2008 Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 That reminds me, i'll start on what David could say, and also his next appearance. How does chapter 7 sound? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 25, 2008 As of now, 343 Guilty Spark is Co-Writer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 but that means that this show will have another bad guy...how could Jaden manage that..even with Yubel & Neos? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 26, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 How else? By cheating, just like every other character on the show! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Oncoming Storm Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 I found a video on youtube that could work as Final Light's intro. Click below to see it. [url]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Y055JGQ8GHw&feature=related[/url] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 26, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 Since it's 4Kids, no. But I'm sure that'll be the Season 4 Dub Opening. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nightfallen Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 good chapter, looked kinda liked you rushed a bit. Some grammer errers, but nothing to major. I like the consept that you put in there too how he might work with and/or aganst Jaden, however, Jaden does have one advantage, the villans are fighting agenst him. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Supreme Gamesmaster Posted June 27, 2008 Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 You may wish to update the thread title. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Roxas Posted June 27, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 Oh yeah. And Nightfallen, I said Guilty Spark wrote it, I only editted, so credit him. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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